Nostalgia (haibun style)
Reserved for the aging, it summons all other emotions.45 total reviews
Comment from MizKat
This is really nice for the Emotions contest. I think you did an outstanding job in writing it. The picture is great and the background color is too. All around a great job!! Kat
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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This is really nice for the Emotions contest. I think you did an outstanding job in writing it. The picture is great and the background color is too. All around a great job!! Kat
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sgalletti
I have no idea who you are. But, whoever you are, you really know how to write beautifully! The haibun is, perhaps, my very favorite form of writing. You execute this beautifully. I know I don't need to detail all the reasons why because it is obvious you know them. I loved it!!!! Hugs and good luck, Sue
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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I have no idea who you are. But, whoever you are, you really know how to write beautifully! The haibun is, perhaps, my very favorite form of writing. You execute this beautifully. I know I don't need to detail all the reasons why because it is obvious you know them. I loved it!!!! Hugs and good luck, Sue
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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I have fallen in love with the form. Thank you so much for the wonderful review.
Comment from EMB
For the longest time, I asked myself "Is nostalgia an emotion?" I always thought of it as a feeling, but after reading this, I think I've been converted to your way of thinking. :)
This was great.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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For the longest time, I asked myself "Is nostalgia an emotion?" I always thought of it as a feeling, but after reading this, I think I've been converted to your way of thinking. :)
This was great.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you. I wondered also but I checked it out first and it is. Probably the king.
Comment from Walu Feral
Great job my friend! You have captured the process beautifully in majestic style. This is a really good contest entry and I wish you luck. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Great job my friend! You have captured the process beautifully in majestic style. This is a really good contest entry and I wish you luck. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this haibun poem about the nostalgia that hits us from time to time. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this haibun poem about the nostalgia that hits us from time to time. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from vickib
Haibun style-I like that idea a lot. So does that mean you don't consider it a haibun or that its in the spirit of the haibun? Just wondering why you didn't call it a haibun. How many times can I say haibun in one paragraph? LOL!!!
So I love this! This is what I love to read, and the way you did it is so unique and a believe perfectly and beautifully you described emotion. Well more than that you walk with emotion. I love the ebb and flow you talk about, one minute happy, the next crying. Which may hold the answers to mid life crisis and age, because now you have this mixed bag of experience to deal with, why I love the title-nostalgia. A warped wonderer-like a coin-to me are just perfect haibun style mixed with the longer sentence. I think of haibun almost like travel journals sometimes and wow this is quite the travel journal. Also I think of them as sketches, and you do that here. A steady stream of one thought after the other, without elaborating. You leave it with a bit of unfinished feel so the reader can be apart of it too.
Your senryu/ haiku is very unique too I guess its true we truly don't know where life will take us next.
I think you have a haibun here, though I'm no expert on these by any means, you have it posted as poetry instead of prose, but I can see why. I do like them posted this way they are much more appealing. I love the way the whole thing looks, but mostly I like what you wrote. A lot! I think its all beautiful and emotional. It is how I feel too. A wonderful entry for this contest.
XO
Vicki
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Haibun style-I like that idea a lot. So does that mean you don't consider it a haibun or that its in the spirit of the haibun? Just wondering why you didn't call it a haibun. How many times can I say haibun in one paragraph? LOL!!!
So I love this! This is what I love to read, and the way you did it is so unique and a believe perfectly and beautifully you described emotion. Well more than that you walk with emotion. I love the ebb and flow you talk about, one minute happy, the next crying. Which may hold the answers to mid life crisis and age, because now you have this mixed bag of experience to deal with, why I love the title-nostalgia. A warped wonderer-like a coin-to me are just perfect haibun style mixed with the longer sentence. I think of haibun almost like travel journals sometimes and wow this is quite the travel journal. Also I think of them as sketches, and you do that here. A steady stream of one thought after the other, without elaborating. You leave it with a bit of unfinished feel so the reader can be apart of it too.
Your senryu/ haiku is very unique too I guess its true we truly don't know where life will take us next.
I think you have a haibun here, though I'm no expert on these by any means, you have it posted as poetry instead of prose, but I can see why. I do like them posted this way they are much more appealing. I love the way the whole thing looks, but mostly I like what you wrote. A lot! I think its all beautiful and emotional. It is how I feel too. A wonderful entry for this contest.
XO
Vicki
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your glowing in depth review. I wasn't quite sure it met all of the criteria but I thought it did. It is only my fourth haibun but I love this form.
Comment from Black_Oxygen
The images of this poetry are vivid. The many layers
of emotions are captivating. It held my interest
from start to finish. The attached photo is a
befitting accent. Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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The images of this poetry are vivid. The many layers
of emotions are captivating. It held my interest
from start to finish. The attached photo is a
befitting accent. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
I only wish I had a 6 left to give. This incredible poem is very deserving of a 6.
I love that you thought outside of the box to think of Nostalgia as an emotion. And yes, what an emotion ... bringing forth other emotions, as you have mentioned.
This was a very well thought out, well penned piece that I loved reading. You captured the essence of Nostalgia so well. Loved "your power is not the faint of heart". The artwork is a very good choice to complement your poem.
Great work!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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I only wish I had a 6 left to give. This incredible poem is very deserving of a 6.
I love that you thought outside of the box to think of Nostalgia as an emotion. And yes, what an emotion ... bringing forth other emotions, as you have mentioned.
This was a very well thought out, well penned piece that I loved reading. You captured the essence of Nostalgia so well. Loved "your power is not the faint of heart". The artwork is a very good choice to complement your poem.
Great work!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I love this form. Appreciate the virtual six also. :.)
Comment from wanderlost
You have the power to persuade me to tears and launch me to laughter. Days turn into weeks, weeks slip into months and months disappear into another year. You remain tried and true. Holding my hand on this journey called life, as I slide across the borders of time. One foot in the now, the other in yesterday.
the virgin path
spirals and shifts- it leads
I know not where.
Excellent work. The format isn't appealing to me, as it just seems like prose. but you did a good job with the writing!
Wanderlost
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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You have the power to persuade me to tears and launch me to laughter. Days turn into weeks, weeks slip into months and months disappear into another year. You remain tried and true. Holding my hand on this journey called life, as I slide across the borders of time. One foot in the now, the other in yesterday.
the virgin path
spirals and shifts- it leads
I know not where.
Excellent work. The format isn't appealing to me, as it just seems like prose. but you did a good job with the writing!
Wanderlost
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you. The body is suppose to be prose and scattered thoughts. Scattered comes easy to me that must be what attracts me...lol
Comment from angelmagnet
I love the haibun style of your contest entry. Your paragraphs capture delicate images and your poetry condenses your words to a thoughtful ending. Well done
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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I love the haibun style of your contest entry. Your paragraphs capture delicate images and your poetry condenses your words to a thoughtful ending. Well done
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and welcome to fanstory. Enjoy the ride.
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fun so far!