All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Through My Open Door"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Robin Gilmor
I love the smell of freshly mowed grass and your verse expressed it so well. I could actually smell it. Also the coffee! A lovely verse well written with great alliteration and rhythm. A very enjoyable read. Robin :)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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I love the smell of freshly mowed grass and your verse expressed it so well. I could actually smell it. Also the coffee! A lovely verse well written with great alliteration and rhythm. A very enjoyable read. Robin :)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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drop in any time Robin! :)S
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
this one deserved a 6 and I dont give them out very easy but this is one of the best free versed poems that I have read in a long time. I love the poems that drag me in kicking and screaming and I live in the poem till it is done. I can see thru your words everything. It was great.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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this one deserved a 6 and I dont give them out very easy but this is one of the best free versed poems that I have read in a long time. I love the poems that drag me in kicking and screaming and I live in the poem till it is done. I can see thru your words everything. It was great.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Barb, I'm going to KISS YOU! Thank you so much for the lovely six!! and please, drop in for coffee any time!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Sharon,
I've never given back to back six's to one writer, but this poem knocked me out. the nature, beautiful visual portraits with words and just the awesome aura and feeling of the piece. Have some champagne tonight, you deserve it:)
Tedt
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Dear Sharon,
I've never given back to back six's to one writer, but this poem knocked me out. the nature, beautiful visual portraits with words and just the awesome aura and feeling of the piece. Have some champagne tonight, you deserve it:)
Tedt
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Wow, Ted! Pick me up off the floor you gorgeous man! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU for the fabulous six on this one. Champagne's on me!
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On that lovely porch in Maui? Orin Old DC? Either way, you deserved the rating. Two fantastic writes and you know I wouldn't do that capriciously:) Congrats on some really great writing--Ted
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I know you wouldn't - that's why I'm smiling - and you can come sit on my porch any time - bring your music! :)
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Of course:) My music travels with me, whether it's my tenor saxophone, a harmonica in my pocket (a pocketful of blues) or just the velvet Crooner, "First the tide rushes in, then plants a kiss on the shore...."Ebb Tide"). I'm low-maintainance and a great chef, so I'll earn my keep:)
Comment from write hand blue
You weave a picture of painted serenity.
Pictured is the dark blue sky of dawn, a perfect match for the beautiful cool morning airs you describe so well.
Creative, visual and artistic. A nice poem... Mel.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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You weave a picture of painted serenity.
Pictured is the dark blue sky of dawn, a perfect match for the beautiful cool morning airs you describe so well.
Creative, visual and artistic. A nice poem... Mel.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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thx so much, Mel!
Comment from Imn2writingstories
This is really well done and yes we should leave the door open for birds and nature to come in from out side and smell the fresh cut grass and ocean air. I feel like I am so many different places but, yet I feel the beach or island is where I am.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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This is really well done and yes we should leave the door open for birds and nature to come in from out side and smell the fresh cut grass and ocean air. I feel like I am so many different places but, yet I feel the beach or island is where I am.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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bless you my dear - glad to have you drop by for coffee! :)Sharyn
Comment from words
Such a lovely, whimsical and peaceful write.
I was right there with you through every cup of coffee.
Love your ending:I sigh
pour my carefully allotted
second cup of coffee -
with real cream, not the powdery pretend stuff,
watch my grass grow greener
till next week's mow
and the early morning rooster
shepherding his harem into the future
I leave my door open
I am definitely an open door person myself.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Such a lovely, whimsical and peaceful write.
I was right there with you through every cup of coffee.
Love your ending:I sigh
pour my carefully allotted
second cup of coffee -
with real cream, not the powdery pretend stuff,
watch my grass grow greener
till next week's mow
and the early morning rooster
shepherding his harem into the future
I leave my door open
I am definitely an open door person myself.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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bless you, d. - so glad you enjoyed sharing my early morning cup of coffee! :)Sharyn
Comment from Cornetist
Wonderful imagery! You paint a pleasant picture of a pleasant place and time. Lovely phrasing with delicate descriptions of the flora and come-to-life images of the fauna. The coffee...is it Kona? If so, I'd like a cup, if you please!
Cornetist
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Wonderful imagery! You paint a pleasant picture of a pleasant place and time. Lovely phrasing with delicate descriptions of the flora and come-to-life images of the fauna. The coffee...is it Kona? If so, I'd like a cup, if you please!
Cornetist
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Kona, of COURSE!! but that would have been wayyyy to much alliteration I think, "second cup of Kona coffee" - fun thought though ... and please join me, any morning my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from sunnilicious
It's a good thing when you can be comfortable in your home. Your words evoked a sense of beauty in the atmosphere. Wonderful vivid imagery created. Nice poem. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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It's a good thing when you can be comfortable in your home. Your words evoked a sense of beauty in the atmosphere. Wonderful vivid imagery created. Nice poem. Excellent work.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much, Sunni!
Comment from RominaItalia
This made me smile huge. Aliteration is aweseome. Superior syllabic structure. Impeccable imagery. And flawlessly fluent flow. :) I love it! Great piece.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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This made me smile huge. Aliteration is aweseome. Superior syllabic structure. Impeccable imagery. And flawlessly fluent flow. :) I love it! Great piece.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much my dear! Ciao! :)Sharyn
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What fantastic imagery! I felt like I was there.. smelled the grass after the rain... what a fragrance! The birds were colorful and graceful... the air was so pure and fresh! Thanks for having me over for a cup of coffee. May I come back again? :)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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What fantastic imagery! I felt like I was there.. smelled the grass after the rain... what a fragrance! The birds were colorful and graceful... the air was so pure and fresh! Thanks for having me over for a cup of coffee. May I come back again? :)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013
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Any time Phyllis, any time!! :)S