Eating Mommy's Sandwich
Sung to the tune: I've been workin on the railroad32 total reviews
Comment from Shadow Pahn
This is a kind of writing i am not familiar with, so my review might not be as useful as it should be. The switching back and forth between POV is slightly confusing, although it doesn't take more than a second to catch on.
Is this supposed to be a sing a long? ;-)
Keep writing!
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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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This is a kind of writing i am not familiar with, so my review might not be as useful as it should be. The switching back and forth between POV is slightly confusing, although it doesn't take more than a second to catch on.
Is this supposed to be a sing a long? ;-)
Keep writing!
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013
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Part story as told by a child and part sing-along as where indicated. Sorry you didn't understand.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
This is a cute and entertaining story told through the eyes and mind of an eighteen month-old child. The story is told well, and the flow is good with excellent imagery.
Curtis
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This is a cute and entertaining story told through the eyes and mind of an eighteen month-old child. The story is told well, and the flow is good with excellent imagery.
Curtis
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2013