Aiden's Birthday Surprise
A magical Disney treat41 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
I love how you take a beautiful first birthday party and turn it into a grand adventure that any child would so love. What a great story with all the characters taking part in the party. Just two minor things to look at...
(to) frolic in the sun
it made (their) day complete
Best wishes in the contest, John.
Smiles,
karyn :>)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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I love how you take a beautiful first birthday party and turn it into a grand adventure that any child would so love. What a great story with all the characters taking part in the party. Just two minor things to look at...
(to) frolic in the sun
it made (their) day complete
Best wishes in the contest, John.
Smiles,
karyn :>)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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Thank you Karyn for those great words. It was a great day for sure. I made those coupe of small corrections thank you. Always enjoy your reviews, your comments are always positive. Thank you for them six stars... You just made my early morning. John
Comment from Crystal Vail
My 9 year old daughter read your poem and wanted to give a review. She says, "I love all the disney characters and it was really alot of fun to read it." I enjoyed it, as well. :)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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My 9 year old daughter read your poem and wanted to give a review. She says, "I love all the disney characters and it was really alot of fun to read it." I enjoyed it, as well. :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2012
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Thank you Crystal to both you and your daughter!! Having a child read it and comment on it made me feel real special. Thank you both for your time!!! John
Comment from Eric Corsten
Wow really cute ...and long..wraps up nicely "Laughter is timeless Imagination is a gauge, Dreams last forever Happiness shows no age ...
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Wow really cute ...and long..wraps up nicely "Laughter is timeless Imagination is a gauge, Dreams last forever Happiness shows no age ...
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Thank you Erica....
Comment from Deorre Leonard
What a beautiful story in a poem. You never know that Disney wish just may come true one day soon. Great contest entry. Well said. Deorre
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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What a beautiful story in a poem. You never know that Disney wish just may come true one day soon. Great contest entry. Well said. Deorre
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Maybe one day. Thank you for reading and sharing. John
Comment from Gungalo
You have plenty of time to do the Disney thing grandma. LOL she so young yet. I love this little ditty you ended with:
Laughter is timeless
Imagination is a gauge,
Dreams last forever
Happiness shows no age ...
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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You have plenty of time to do the Disney thing grandma. LOL she so young yet. I love this little ditty you ended with:
Laughter is timeless
Imagination is a gauge,
Dreams last forever
Happiness shows no age ...
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Thank you Gungalo, and its grandpa who wrote this. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts. John
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Smile.
Comment from ronnie k
Wonderful writing. This was an adult ride on the merry go round. Personally I have not gotten off. Beautiful wording, if i did not know better I WOULD PLACE YOU AT SIX smiles. Not one character was denied their 15 minutes of fame. I so enjoyed this write. Bravo
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Wonderful writing. This was an adult ride on the merry go round. Personally I have not gotten off. Beautiful wording, if i did not know better I WOULD PLACE YOU AT SIX smiles. Not one character was denied their 15 minutes of fame. I so enjoyed this write. Bravo
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Ronnie, WOW WOW WOW. Thank you so much for the six star rating, that's incredible.... wow can't believe it.
John
Comment from Joe Hudson
I Loved this! You are so talented. Poetry like this is great to read. Grandchildren are a rich source of inspiration and you mined this one deep. It flows nicely and it's not hokey and trite. I like the fact that you can't predict the next verse. Well done! Great job! I wish you the best in the contest. Joe
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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I Loved this! You are so talented. Poetry like this is great to read. Grandchildren are a rich source of inspiration and you mined this one deep. It flows nicely and it's not hokey and trite. I like the fact that you can't predict the next verse. Well done! Great job! I wish you the best in the contest. Joe
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Wow, thank you Joe for not only the six star rating but your commentary as well.
I truly appreciate it very much.
John
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Wow! This is a great poem. Your guest list is so impressive,
and your felightful plot is really well developed. Great use of imagination
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Wow! This is a great poem. Your guest list is so impressive,
and your felightful plot is really well developed. Great use of imagination
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Thank you Janice for reading and commenting. It is appreciated. John
Comment from tasettrini
It sounds like a lot of beautiful filled wishes, I believe you woke Disney up! Grandchildren are inspiring and delightful and they inspire our minds to dream in expressed wishes of wonderment! This was lovely.I really liked several lines, your rhythm and metaphors were like a roar!I do not think that you have left any character out! lol Good for you.Very nice, thank you for sharing.:)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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It sounds like a lot of beautiful filled wishes, I believe you woke Disney up! Grandchildren are inspiring and delightful and they inspire our minds to dream in expressed wishes of wonderment! This was lovely.I really liked several lines, your rhythm and metaphors were like a roar!I do not think that you have left any character out! lol Good for you.Very nice, thank you for sharing.:)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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She is an inspiration to write for... I've written a bunch and not posted for her. Thank you for reading and commenting. John
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written my friend it has a fun feeling through the poem and has great imagery well done I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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This is very well written my friend it has a fun feeling through the poem and has great imagery well done I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much Jill for your generous rating and wonderful words in your review, I appreciate it. John