All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "I'm Possessed"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from juliedickson55
How lovely, the image against the burning sky...
Possessed by the brilliance, not wanting it to fade; she seems to celebrate that intensity you refer to, reveling in the burst of red as a triumphant spector- a prelude to the night sky.
Very nice.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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How lovely, the image against the burning sky...
Possessed by the brilliance, not wanting it to fade; she seems to celebrate that intensity you refer to, reveling in the burst of red as a triumphant spector- a prelude to the night sky.
Very nice.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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you've got it julie! thank you so much! :)
Comment from gazzagodbod
this is a beautiful naani so well written and presented definitely the best i have read so far thank you and good luck gazza
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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this is a beautiful naani so well written and presented definitely the best i have read so far thank you and good luck gazza
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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hey thanks gazza!!!
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Yes, I think it is at sunset that most of relaxation activities take place like dancing, romancing and the likes.
Good interpretation with the photo.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Yes, I think it is at sunset that most of relaxation activities take place like dancing, romancing and the likes.
Good interpretation with the photo.
ola thomas
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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thx so much Ola!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this naani poem, excellent line about finger painting the sky, beautiful picture choice, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this naani poem, excellent line about finger painting the sky, beautiful picture choice, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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thx sweets!
Comment from Cool Beans
Wow! This is fabulous. The imagery that is present throughout this piece is phenomenal. I love "participate in finger painting the sky". How innocent and free. I would give you 6 stars if I were able. Well done!!!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Wow! This is fabulous. The imagery that is present throughout this piece is phenomenal. I love "participate in finger painting the sky". How innocent and free. I would give you 6 stars if I were able. Well done!!!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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thx so much CB!
Comment from MAMONIA
This is most lovely. The picture is so
expressive and your words explode with
color.
You did an excellent write with this
Naani and I think it is a great entry
for the contest.
With the best of luck to you, my friend.
Marie
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This is most lovely. The picture is so
expressive and your words explode with
color.
You did an excellent write with this
Naani and I think it is a great entry
for the contest.
With the best of luck to you, my friend.
Marie
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Marie!
Comment from Ekim777
You write with consummate skill making full use of assonance and consonance. I think you do it intuitively. It never looks contrived. Your rapport with mother nature and the elements is almost mystical,(dare I use the word) How else can you leap so high and paint the sky the way you want it. It might be all fantasy but it makes for fine poetry. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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You write with consummate skill making full use of assonance and consonance. I think you do it intuitively. It never looks contrived. Your rapport with mother nature and the elements is almost mystical,(dare I use the word) How else can you leap so high and paint the sky the way you want it. It might be all fantasy but it makes for fine poetry. -Ekim777
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Thx Ekim!
Comment from MizKat
Your Naani poem for the contest is lovely. You also chose a great picture that goes with your words perfectly. I enjoyed everything about this. Kat
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Your Naani poem for the contest is lovely. You also chose a great picture that goes with your words perfectly. I enjoyed everything about this. Kat
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Kat!
Comment from GWHARGIS
That is a rare and wonderful feeling you wrote about. I loved the picture you chose as it intensified your words. The flow to this was great and the rhythm was good. You have defined possession in a good way.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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That is a rare and wonderful feeling you wrote about. I loved the picture you chose as it intensified your words. The flow to this was great and the rhythm was good. You have defined possession in a good way.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx so much GW!
Comment from Starlit Ink
Sunsets can be captivating, and you captured the moment in this great entry. I love the thought of finger-painting the colorful sky. Nice alliteration in the first line. Your presentation is beautiful. Good luck in the naani contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Sunsets can be captivating, and you captured the moment in this great entry. I love the thought of finger-painting the colorful sky. Nice alliteration in the first line. Your presentation is beautiful. Good luck in the naani contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Starlit!