Poems from a Pensive Poet
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Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of abcb rhyme
your lines flow smoothly, enhanced by good enjambment throughout
good alliteration in death will be defeated
and in may mean
and some say the soul
good consonance of P and R sounds in paradise redeployed
good touch of alliteration in mean melody
and thoughtful delivery of a meaningful spiritual message in good poetic form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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excellent use of abcb rhyme
your lines flow smoothly, enhanced by good enjambment throughout
good alliteration in death will be defeated
and in may mean
and some say the soul
good consonance of P and R sounds in paradise redeployed
good touch of alliteration in mean melody
and thoughtful delivery of a meaningful spiritual message in good poetic form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you Brooke, I really appreciate all these nice comments on this poem. I'm not ambiguous on the subject but I prefer to keep my opinion private.
Comment from sdsimpson
It's a nice preponderance of the definition of a soul. However, with no definites, is it really contributing any message? The rhyming scheme is followed; but for flavor, you may consider adding a stanza that breaks the monotony. Overall, good job.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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It's a nice preponderance of the definition of a soul. However, with no definites, is it really contributing any message? The rhyming scheme is followed; but for flavor, you may consider adding a stanza that breaks the monotony. Overall, good job.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I reread the contests rules. I've given three definitions. The truth is soul can be defined in more ways that one. I'm not asked to state my opinion and since it is a personal thing, I don't think an opinion is called for. I've used more words already that most. I'm sorry if you found it monotonous. I see you are new on FanStory. Most who give four star review are. Thank you.
Comment from Kingsland
This poem brought about very strong emotions from this reader. It brought back memories of souls that are no longer with me in this life force. You have written this piece quite masterfully. It is an outstanding piece of poetic artistry. It deserves all of the six stars awarded here... John
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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This poem brought about very strong emotions from this reader. It brought back memories of souls that are no longer with me in this life force. You have written this piece quite masterfully. It is an outstanding piece of poetic artistry. It deserves all of the six stars awarded here... John
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much for the six stars and for you affirming words. I'm so pleased you considered it worthy of the stars.
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Your poem actually brought on tears. But they were good tears. I remember those in my life in a bright light. Only the positive thoughts remain...
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well done! I think you've covered all possible definitions and have done so with good rhyme and rhythm, no less. Looks like a contender to me!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Very well done! I think you've covered all possible definitions and have done so with good rhyme and rhythm, no less. Looks like a contender to me!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you Phylllis, I appreciate your review and nice comments.
Comment from terry drake
I thought you did a marvelous job in your definition of soul. Your rhymes were consistently on point and the rhythm of your rhymes were entertaining.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I thought you did a marvelous job in your definition of soul. Your rhymes were consistently on point and the rhythm of your rhymes were entertaining.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you Terry, I really appreciate your review and comments and I'm glad you found it entertaining.
Comment from mumsyone
Well, so far, this is the best description I've seen of the soul, simply because you acknowledge the fact that there are different viewpoints from different people. Inconclusive for some, maybe; not for me. Thanks for sharing your thoughts in a well-written poem.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Well, so far, this is the best description I've seen of the soul, simply because you acknowledge the fact that there are different viewpoints from different people. Inconclusive for some, maybe; not for me. Thanks for sharing your thoughts in a well-written poem.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and for you nice remarks. I have a definite opinion too but I don't want to appear to disregard the opinions of others. Some of what we believe is based on what has been drilled into us since childhood. Verses in the Bible can be quoted out of contest and used to prove or disprove almost anything.
Comment from thestylus
breath in the first stanza should be breathe. The author is playing safe because he did not give his own definition of soul. The image used is nice. The words used do not make up a good poem. My bad. The breathe should be in the second stanza. ^-^
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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breath in the first stanza should be breathe. The author is playing safe because he did not give his own definition of soul. The image used is nice. The words used do not make up a good poem. My bad. The breathe should be in the second stanza. ^-^
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Breath is a noun and breathe is a verb. I meant to use breath. I assume you are an expert on poetry. I see you just joined and have one poem on FanStory. I can't imagine what you find wrong with the words I used. The syllable count and rhythm are right on for a rhymed poem. I don't claim to have all the answers and on something as personal as the meaning of soul, I wouldn't want to hurt anyones feelings or start an argument.
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Sorry. Just giving my review. I thought we're not supposed to defend our answer? lol. Just doing my job. Peace.
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I didn't mean to insult you. I just noticed the four star reviews always come from those new on FanStory. I was curious as to how any words were not suitable for poetry. I've never heard anyone say that before. Thank your for the review.
Comment from Patti R.
I really enjoyed your poem, and I certainly could not have said it any better! Definition of 'soul' something personal, and sometimes inconclusive to each person. Excellent.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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I really enjoyed your poem, and I certainly could not have said it any better! Definition of 'soul' something personal, and sometimes inconclusive to each person. Excellent.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Patti, Thank you so much for the review. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem and I appreciate your comments.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a really nice poem but I do like your first line the human being is a soul I think the soul is your true being the body is just a vessel good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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This is a really nice poem but I do like your first line the human being is a soul I think the soul is your true being the body is just a vessel good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. My belief may or may not reflect what others believe so I'll not claim to have all the answers.