Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Coat-Tail Ghost"A collection of my poems
54 total reviews
Comment from guinea
Excellent poem od horror. You held my attention to the end. My Dad used to tell me stories like that also. The words flow nicely. Shows deep thinking.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Excellent poem od horror. You held my attention to the end. My Dad used to tell me stories like that also. The words flow nicely. Shows deep thinking.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the generous review.
Steve
Comment from visionary1234
oh this is MASTERFUL!!! YOU DESERVE TO WIN THIS COMPETITION HANDS DOWN!! A wonderful scary telling with impeccable rhyme - I'd LOVE to read this aloud to kids round the fire!!! If I had a '6' to give, you'd have it, believe me!!!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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oh this is MASTERFUL!!! YOU DESERVE TO WIN THIS COMPETITION HANDS DOWN!! A wonderful scary telling with impeccable rhyme - I'd LOVE to read this aloud to kids round the fire!!! If I had a '6' to give, you'd have it, believe me!!!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the enthusiastic review and the virtual Six. Not holding my breath about the contest - I never win these ones - starting to think the invisible committee don't like me - and they do attract some quality entries. Both Adewpearl and Humpwhistle have good entries in and there may be more before deadline is reached...
Steve
Comment from CheyLGwriter
I love this poem. It was interesting from beginning to end. The descriptive words you used made for a great visual. The twist at the end made it even better. Yhanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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I love this poem. It was interesting from beginning to end. The descriptive words you used made for a great visual. The twist at the end made it even better. Yhanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's so crazy it must be true! It's easy to imagine the kids sneaking out. Then, on a dare and the one boy, scared to death, nails his coat to the floor and thinks the ghost has him. This is a great entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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That's so crazy it must be true! It's easy to imagine the kids sneaking out. Then, on a dare and the one boy, scared to death, nails his coat to the floor and thinks the ghost has him. This is a great entry for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks, Cindy. My father always swore he was there... I have popped him into the poem as Len.
Steve
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your "Share a Story in a Poem" Poem, The Coat-Tail Ghost, is a hoot! I got a real laugh out this one!!! I love the ending!!! Your poem has a really good rhyming scheme and the cadence is nice and smooth. The story is really good. I felt like I was there listening too and I could imagine exactly what was being said! What year and where was this Dan Carew from?
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Your "Share a Story in a Poem" Poem, The Coat-Tail Ghost, is a hoot! I got a real laugh out this one!!! I love the ending!!! Your poem has a really good rhyming scheme and the cadence is nice and smooth. The story is really good. I felt like I was there listening too and I could imagine exactly what was being said! What year and where was this Dan Carew from?
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated.
My father's (true?) story involved the nail in the coat, but not the ghost - I just made him up...
Steve
Comment from MumEsGirl
The six stars is for the giggle I got and the excellent telling of a story. I had a good giggle at the little fellow almost crying at the idea of a life without Facebook.
Look forward to seeing more of your work
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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The six stars is for the giggle I got and the excellent telling of a story. I had a good giggle at the little fellow almost crying at the idea of a life without Facebook.
Look forward to seeing more of your work
hugs
kate
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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I shall definitely try to make you giggle again in the future.
If you are brave enough to venture into my portfolio, other story poems with a giggle may be found - Batroom Incident, Country Justice, alternative ending to Smiler Jack, Pardon My French and Pardon My Latin....
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, kiwisteveh, you did a great job writing this cute little poem about the brave lad who scared himself silly, i love it and give you my last six. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, kiwisteveh, you did a great job writing this cute little poem about the brave lad who scared himself silly, i love it and give you my last six. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and the much appreciated Six.
Steve
Comment from Curtis Hatch
This is a delightful poem and story. Your words paint the picture well, accented by the black background and the picture of the church on the hill. I could almost feel the chill of the young lad as he met the dare.
I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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This is a delightful poem and story. Your words paint the picture well, accented by the black background and the picture of the church on the hill. I could almost feel the chill of the young lad as he met the dare.
I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks, Curtis - glad you enjoyed...
Steve
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A story well told in a poem...
the content, the flow to the words,
and to both rhythme and rhyme, all
excellent - a great contender for
the contest.
good luck to you, Steve.
Margaret
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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A story well told in a poem...
the content, the flow to the words,
and to both rhythme and rhyme, all
excellent - a great contender for
the contest.
good luck to you, Steve.
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Margaret, my friend. I appreciate your kind comments.
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well now that was really a fun read. I enjoyed it very much and was really amused at the ending.It in my opinion is a six!Thank you for sharing this ghost story today. Honeycomb
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Well now that was really a fun read. I enjoyed it very much and was really amused at the ending.It in my opinion is a six!Thank you for sharing this ghost story today. Honeycomb
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve