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Comment from ennahanid
So this kept my attention from first word to the last. Loved the last part where the wife upped the 'snip' date, put a grin on my face it did.
Thank you for an entertaining read tonight...I'm still grinning - Dinah
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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So this kept my attention from first word to the last. Loved the last part where the wife upped the 'snip' date, put a grin on my face it did.
Thank you for an entertaining read tonight...I'm still grinning - Dinah
Comment Written 30-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2012
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Thank you, Dinah, for the kind words in your review. Glad to provide cheer. Bill
Comment from gramalot8
Bill, this is such a fun, cute storyline. I really could feel your "pain" so to speak of the possible upcoming surgery. And, yes, the truth staring you in the face with that cute family. Hope all went well... LOL... Jerri
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Bill, this is such a fun, cute storyline. I really could feel your "pain" so to speak of the possible upcoming surgery. And, yes, the truth staring you in the face with that cute family. Hope all went well... LOL... Jerri
Comment Written 29-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Thank you, Jerri, for the kind words. The surgery was memorable. I'm thinking of penning it as a sequel.
Comment from jtconcessions
"Rhythm? Two kids proved we had rhythm; what we needed was a change of tune"- I particularly like this line!!
I love the humorous twist at the ending. This is a light hearted way to address what could be a serious topic.
Error free writing from what I could tell. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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"Rhythm? Two kids proved we had rhythm; what we needed was a change of tune"- I particularly like this line!!
I love the humorous twist at the ending. This is a light hearted way to address what could be a serious topic.
Error free writing from what I could tell. Nicely done!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from adewpearl
ninth month of her pregnancy,and the time - add comma
Love your sense of humor :-)
You have me rolling in the aisles with your observations.
When the office visit ended, - add comma
Turning away, I saw - add comma
LOVE that last line!!! LOL Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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ninth month of her pregnancy,and the time - add comma
Love your sense of humor :-)
You have me rolling in the aisles with your observations.
When the office visit ended, - add comma
Turning away, I saw - add comma
LOVE that last line!!! LOL Brooke
Comment Written 23-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2012
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I'm so happy you enjoyed the story. Thank you for your kind remarks and the punctuation advice. I've applied the commas.
Comment from joann r romei
Ouch, only kidding, what a guy, i have my own story ,one day i hope to write it and have it be as good as yours was, God Bless
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Ouch, only kidding, what a guy, i have my own story ,one day i hope to write it and have it be as good as yours was, God Bless
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is extremely well-done--skillfully written, entertaining, descriptive, and wryly clever. The passage about rhythm and tune is especially effective!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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This is extremely well-done--skillfully written, entertaining, descriptive, and wryly clever. The passage about rhythm and tune is especially effective!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from CammyCards
A delicate subject written with much humor. The story is full of love, particularly the end.Thank you for using my picture to illustrate your nice poem.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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A delicate subject written with much humor. The story is full of love, particularly the end.Thank you for using my picture to illustrate your nice poem.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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I guess you mean the short story. Thank you for your kind words.
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Yes, I read the short story.
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Comment from peggles
I thought your story was very well written and told an interesting engaging story
It also had a lot of humor
Very nice read thou I could see some men grimacing at the thought
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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I thought your story was very well written and told an interesting engaging story
It also had a lot of humor
Very nice read thou I could see some men grimacing at the thought
Comment Written 12-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Thank you for reviewing my story.
Comment from ajdevore
Wow. and the picture? OMG. It was so brave and honest of you to share this story. It distresses me how few people understand the need for population control. Father of three and two grandchildren (if this is really you), you have certainly been sufficiently blessed. A couple of minor points as I can never resist wordsmitting, although there is very little her that's not pitch perfect. No was the unanimous vote? Did the kids vote too? Otherwise maybe immediate decision? When you say you made another appointment, I know what you mean but it kind of sounds like you had a prior appointment for a vasectomy. Maybe just made and appointment.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Wow. and the picture? OMG. It was so brave and honest of you to share this story. It distresses me how few people understand the need for population control. Father of three and two grandchildren (if this is really you), you have certainly been sufficiently blessed. A couple of minor points as I can never resist wordsmitting, although there is very little her that's not pitch perfect. No was the unanimous vote? Did the kids vote too? Otherwise maybe immediate decision? When you say you made another appointment, I know what you mean but it kind of sounds like you had a prior appointment for a vasectomy. Maybe just made and appointment.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your honest critique and helpful sugestions.
Comment from Frank Atwood
I liked your story. I felt for the guy all the way through and the end was the hard felt clincher which would make many men cringe. There is much truth in this story which can relate to many problems our society is having today. People always jump before they think.
Your story moved very smoothly towards the final climax and the only thing I could spot was the paragraphs might have needed to have a space between them.
I love your picture of the snapping flower with teeth, it definitely sets a nice mood for the story.
The descriptions you chose to use to demonstrate the physical goings on between males and females who are in loves non-compromising positions and how even when protection is applied, there are no guarantees. Though it's a Fiction story, you had me thinking this was a non-fiction story. Not until after I read it did read you classified it under fiction. Thus your story did it's job. Sometimes it's a blessing not to read some things. In this case me not knowing it was fiction and believing it was a true story, shows me, you did your job. Nice story. OUCH!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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I liked your story. I felt for the guy all the way through and the end was the hard felt clincher which would make many men cringe. There is much truth in this story which can relate to many problems our society is having today. People always jump before they think.
Your story moved very smoothly towards the final climax and the only thing I could spot was the paragraphs might have needed to have a space between them.
I love your picture of the snapping flower with teeth, it definitely sets a nice mood for the story.
The descriptions you chose to use to demonstrate the physical goings on between males and females who are in loves non-compromising positions and how even when protection is applied, there are no guarantees. Though it's a Fiction story, you had me thinking this was a non-fiction story. Not until after I read it did read you classified it under fiction. Thus your story did it's job. Sometimes it's a blessing not to read some things. In this case me not knowing it was fiction and believing it was a true story, shows me, you did your job. Nice story. OUCH!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your honest and helpful critique. I did go through this procedure and only classified it as fiction since my wife probably wasn't as calculating and she didn't really move my appointment up. It made for a funny ending I thought instead of a sappy one where she cancels the procedure. Thanks again.