A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "My Breakfast ..."Metre ... Freeverse
73 total reviews
Comment from Dave Sargeant
I like the simplicity of your poem and you can almost smell the toast. The closing thought portrays a brilliant example of self determination.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
I like the simplicity of your poem and you can almost smell the toast. The closing thought portrays a brilliant example of self determination.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
I try when I can...
Comment from volunteer angel
Great free verse and it makes me hungry! I had eggs this morning for breakfast. The picture looked tempting, except for the feathers. LOL I'll skip that one for breakfast. LOL
Great poem! V.A.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
Great free verse and it makes me hungry! I had eggs this morning for breakfast. The picture looked tempting, except for the feathers. LOL I'll skip that one for breakfast. LOL
Great poem! V.A.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Excellent.
Comment from Matoshka
This is wonderful and your picture so fit. Breakfast, an egg, some toast and tea. This was so visual for me, and it sounds so very British. I just loved it. Blessings
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
This is wonderful and your picture so fit. Breakfast, an egg, some toast and tea. This was so visual for me, and it sounds so very British. I just loved it. Blessings
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Many thanks...
-
Your very welcome. Blessings
Comment from HPicasso
It's perfect! I though it was funny and cute and says a lot about our moods and the start of our day.
Nice picture to go with your free verse poem. So unique and sharp.
This poem is very nice and it appeals to me very much.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
It's perfect! I though it was funny and cute and says a lot about our moods and the start of our day.
Nice picture to go with your free verse poem. So unique and sharp.
This poem is very nice and it appeals to me very much.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Excellent.
Comment from rudion
I'm not sure I am the best judge of this type of poetry. Actually, I know I'm not because my knowledge is so limited in this style. However, I know what I like and what sounds right, and I like this. Well-done.
Rudion
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
I'm not sure I am the best judge of this type of poetry. Actually, I know I'm not because my knowledge is so limited in this style. However, I know what I like and what sounds right, and I like this. Well-done.
Rudion
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Excellent, always room to improve.
Comment from Chris Tee
Nothing wrong with this free verse we have here old sport.
I have a problem with you not having enough breakfast.
Well done with your splendid first attempt.
Free verse though should be a bit longer.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
Nothing wrong with this free verse we have here old sport.
I have a problem with you not having enough breakfast.
Well done with your splendid first attempt.
Free verse though should be a bit longer.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Thanks Chriss, it was my first attempt and I did not really eat any more than that.
Comment from Ian Ayris
I LOVE this one.
Simple, playful, beautifully present.
Not sure about the need for the exclamation mark in line one, though, although perhaps that is just a personal taste. Sorry about the pun.
Top job, sir.
Warmest regards,
Ian
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
I LOVE this one.
Simple, playful, beautifully present.
Not sure about the need for the exclamation mark in line one, though, although perhaps that is just a personal taste. Sorry about the pun.
Top job, sir.
Warmest regards,
Ian
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Well free verse is about expression...he exclaimed...!
Comment from Carolyn 12
This ha s agreat background picture.I like the simplicity of this poem. AN egg, toast, tea maybe more. Thank you for sharing. I think this is the second piece of your work I have come upon. I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
This ha s agreat background picture.I like the simplicity of this poem. AN egg, toast, tea maybe more. Thank you for sharing. I think this is the second piece of your work I have come upon. I look forward to more.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Thank you.
Comment from Herb
A little slice of life's loaf. All dipped in the embryo of a free verse virgin. A liked its simplicity, but then maybe that can also be its weakness??
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
A little slice of life's loaf. All dipped in the embryo of a free verse virgin. A liked its simplicity, but then maybe that can also be its weakness??
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
mmmmmm...1st attempt.
Comment from stephybs
This is different! A nice little piece on what one thinks in the morning!. Simple words yet well thought up, nice art work to match. Stephy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
This is different! A nice little piece on what one thinks in the morning!. Simple words yet well thought up, nice art work to match. Stephy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
-
Thanks stephy...