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A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)

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Metre ... Freeverse

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Comment from Dave Sargeant
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I like the simplicity of your poem and you can almost smell the toast. The closing thought portrays a brilliant example of self determination.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    I try when I can...
Comment from volunteer angel
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Great free verse and it makes me hungry! I had eggs this morning for breakfast. The picture looked tempting, except for the feathers. LOL I'll skip that one for breakfast. LOL
Great poem! V.A.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Excellent.
Comment from Matoshka
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This is wonderful and your picture so fit. Breakfast, an egg, some toast and tea. This was so visual for me, and it sounds so very British. I just loved it. Blessings

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Many thanks...
reply by Matoshka on 19-Oct-2011
    Your very welcome. Blessings
Comment from HPicasso
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It's perfect! I though it was funny and cute and says a lot about our moods and the start of our day.
Nice picture to go with your free verse poem. So unique and sharp.
This poem is very nice and it appeals to me very much.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Excellent.
Comment from rudion
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I'm not sure I am the best judge of this type of poetry. Actually, I know I'm not because my knowledge is so limited in this style. However, I know what I like and what sounds right, and I like this. Well-done.
Rudion

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Excellent, always room to improve.
Comment from Chris Tee
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Nothing wrong with this free verse we have here old sport.
I have a problem with you not having enough breakfast.
Well done with your splendid first attempt.
Free verse though should be a bit longer.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Thanks Chriss, it was my first attempt and I did not really eat any more than that.
Comment from Ian Ayris
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I LOVE this one.

Simple, playful, beautifully present.

Not sure about the need for the exclamation mark in line one, though, although perhaps that is just a personal taste. Sorry about the pun.

Top job, sir.

Warmest regards,

Ian

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Well free verse is about expression...he exclaimed...!
Comment from Carolyn 12
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This ha s agreat background picture.I like the simplicity of this poem. AN egg, toast, tea maybe more. Thank you for sharing. I think this is the second piece of your work I have come upon. I look forward to more.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Thank you.
Comment from Herb
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A little slice of life's loaf. All dipped in the embryo of a free verse virgin. A liked its simplicity, but then maybe that can also be its weakness??

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    mmmmmm...1st attempt.
Comment from stephybs
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This is different! A nice little piece on what one thinks in the morning!. Simple words yet well thought up, nice art work to match. Stephy

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Thanks stephy...