Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Dead Duck"A collection of my poems
46 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Who's a funny boy? LOL
This was a delightful read and although I hate blood and guts I was intrigued by the title and I am glad I dived in for a read. Superb rhymes, meter off a tiny bit in parts but the content was so great you're forgiven. This tale of a dead duck belonging to Bob was not only plausible, but had my showing empathy for the dead duck that had indeed swam and quacked an hour before. Superb silliness and simply stunk of a sixer steve. Your last stanza was deliciously brilliant. most importantly, true and me thinks Bob should have taken the duck and run when the first set of obs were taken. Would have been a darn site cheaper. Enjoy your sixer.
Cheers closet
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Who's a funny boy? LOL
This was a delightful read and although I hate blood and guts I was intrigued by the title and I am glad I dived in for a read. Superb rhymes, meter off a tiny bit in parts but the content was so great you're forgiven. This tale of a dead duck belonging to Bob was not only plausible, but had my showing empathy for the dead duck that had indeed swam and quacked an hour before. Superb silliness and simply stunk of a sixer steve. Your last stanza was deliciously brilliant. most importantly, true and me thinks Bob should have taken the duck and run when the first set of obs were taken. Would have been a darn site cheaper. Enjoy your sixer.
Cheers closet
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the Six - I appreciate it!
Poor old Bob was overcome by grief and not really making too many rational decisions here! Reminds me of the dead parrot sketch in Monty Python - he's just sleeping!
Steve
Comment from WRITER1
I know the feeling of the bill. I love the cat scan and lab report. You did a wonderful job on this one and I laughed when he got the bill.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I know the feeling of the bill. I love the cat scan and lab report. You did a wonderful job on this one and I laughed when he got the bill.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - it's not an original joke, but it is a funny one.
Steve
Comment from onceinabluemoon
Ha ha ha - that's a funny little story. Your rhyming is very good, no issues, and it moved along at a nice pace, no awkwardness or meter problems.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Ha ha ha - that's a funny little story. Your rhyming is very good, no issues, and it moved along at a nice pace, no awkwardness or meter problems.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Steve
Comment from Colette
This has to be the funniest poem I have ever read.
It was totally brilliant. I am looking forward
to your next one now.
Colette
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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This has to be the funniest poem I have ever read.
It was totally brilliant. I am looking forward
to your next one now.
Colette
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you! I shall try not to disappoint. More silliness in my portfolio if you have time to scratch around in there...
Steve
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I will indeed. Cheers, Colette
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!
That was an absolutely delicious Sunday morning read.
Your rythms and rhymes are perfect, but the story is simply a fun read.
What a very clever post.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!
That was an absolutely delicious Sunday morning read.
Your rythms and rhymes are perfect, but the story is simply a fun read.
What a very clever post.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - my accidental sense of timing must have worked well - you are not the first to mention the Sunday morning effect!
Steve
Comment from laren
A fun poem, I love black humor, the poem is very well written and rhythm. Moral: All costs in this life. Thanks for making me laugh this Sunday morning.
Congratulations!
Laren
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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A fun poem, I love black humor, the poem is very well written and rhythm. Moral: All costs in this life. Thanks for making me laugh this Sunday morning.
Congratulations!
Laren
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thanks, laren - I'm glad you enjoyed this funny little tale.
Steve
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I really enjoyed it, thank you for sharing,
Laren
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Steve,
My whacky kiwi friend. What a hoot. The poem was a delight to read anyway, but the punch line, so unexpected, was the finest finish to a silly poem since Noel Coward.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Dear Steve,
My whacky kiwi friend. What a hoot. The poem was a delight to read anyway, but the punch line, so unexpected, was the finest finish to a silly poem since Noel Coward.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Ah, I'll have to give credit to whoever came up with the joke in the first place, but it does seem to have fitted well into my 'poemising'.
Thanks for the Six.
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, kiwi, a wonderful job writing this cute little ramble about the cat scan and lab report. i enjoyed reading this, the last two lines don't rhyme but have no idea how to fix it unless
my fee i waived to be a good sport,
but you bought the cat scan and lab report.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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this is very well written, kiwi, a wonderful job writing this cute little ramble about the cat scan and lab report. i enjoyed reading this, the last two lines don't rhyme but have no idea how to fix it unless
my fee i waived to be a good sport,
but you bought the cat scan and lab report.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Have just had a discussion with jackpeg about the rhyme - you and he seem to be the only ones who have a problem with it - I an just putting it down to crazy Americans not really having a clue how to pronounce English properly! ;o))
Please tell me what words you think rhyme with 'bought'
I'm not cranky, just curious - to my ear it's a perfectly good rhyme.
Steve
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bought rhymes with caught, fought,
fraught, naught,
Comment from misscookie
I thought this poem had sadness mixed with humor
I loved how the poem flowed and it so reminded me of human decors there is no longer on doctor bill but specialist bill for every part of your body. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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I thought this poem had sadness mixed with humor
I loved how the poem flowed and it so reminded me of human decors there is no longer on doctor bill but specialist bill for every part of your body. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review.
Steve
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Your very welcome.
Comment from Kingsland
This gets a six star review from me because I really got and excellent laugh out of read this and didn't expect the punch line at the ending at all. I enjoyed this poem thoroughly. It was just a joy to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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This gets a six star review from me because I really got and excellent laugh out of read this and didn't expect the punch line at the ending at all. I enjoyed this poem thoroughly. It was just a joy to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind words and the six stars. Glad I got a laugh! That's what it's all about!
Steve
