Death's Sadness
A sad day.121 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow what a great poem a sad subject skilfully explored and the picture is wonderful thank you so much for sharing it gazzagodbod
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wow what a great poem a sad subject skilfully explored and the picture is wonderful thank you so much for sharing it gazzagodbod
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from MrBoTie
Definately a sad topic. Death brings up many different emotions in each person. Your poem is true to the 5-7-5 format and it flows well. Nice job.
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Definately a sad topic. Death brings up many different emotions in each person. Your poem is true to the 5-7-5 format and it flows well. Nice job.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Kingsland
This could be a poem in where you just insert a name. This was well written with a good emotional thought. It was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
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This could be a poem in where you just insert a name. This was well written with a good emotional thought. It was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Bayberry
Everyone can relate to the loss of somebody who was meaningful to us, especially if it was family- or friend- connected.
It's a beautiful 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck.
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Everyone can relate to the loss of somebody who was meaningful to us, especially if it was family- or friend- connected.
It's a beautiful 5-7-5 poem.
Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Tina55
Nice, private thought, and yet, so widely shared. I like how you began with a punch instead of setting it up with description and character outline. Very effective.
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Nice, private thought, and yet, so widely shared. I like how you began with a punch instead of setting it up with description and character outline. Very effective.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from pencat9
I'm sorry that my opinion might be bit insulting, but I didn't feel much individuality in this poem. There isn't much in here that says it was written by you and no one else. Honestly, I think someone else could've said the same general statements. I'd like to ask: did you write this specifically for this contest?
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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I'm sorry that my opinion might be bit insulting, but I didn't feel much individuality in this poem. There isn't much in here that says it was written by you and no one else. Honestly, I think someone else could've said the same general statements. I'd like to ask: did you write this specifically for this contest?
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2011
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No. Actually my grandfather passed Friday. He was well loved and respected throughout his hometown and surrounding communities.
Comment from Mari_
This is a very good haiku for the 5-7-5 contest!
I can hear the emotion in it, something you don't always get with a haiku.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is a very good haiku for the 5-7-5 contest!
I can hear the emotion in it, something you don't always get with a haiku.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from JW
This is a very well written poem. One could easily feel the emotion, the sadness it contained. It makes one wonder who it was who died. JW
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This is a very well written poem. One could easily feel the emotion, the sadness it contained. It makes one wonder who it was who died. JW
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from Daniel Dean Young
Nicely done! I get the feeling that the emotion in this piece comes from a recent loss. If that is so, sorry fopr your loss. A 5-7-5 is not an easy poem to write. good job.
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Nicely done! I get the feeling that the emotion in this piece comes from a recent loss. If that is so, sorry fopr your loss. A 5-7-5 is not an easy poem to write. good job.
dy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
Comment from eyesthatsee
It reads as spiritual poetry even if there is no actual mention of God or Jesus or was this about something else. I loved it no matter... warmly ETS
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It reads as spiritual poetry even if there is no actual mention of God or Jesus or was this about something else. I loved it no matter... warmly ETS
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011