The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "James Pauses To Take a Breath"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from Deejharrington
I think it all has finally sunk in to James. All that information he was hell bent on getting, he now has to accept. Excellent writing on James's very normal breakdown to accepting and processing of the information.
deb
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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I think it all has finally sunk in to James. All that information he was hell bent on getting, he now has to accept. Excellent writing on James's very normal breakdown to accepting and processing of the information.
deb
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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It was long over do. I am pleased you liked this exceptionally short chapter.
Comment from Joan E.
Wow, this post popped up quickly on the heels of the last dark chapter. It was wise to make it a separate chapter of transition. The "wet, slimy blanket" is an apt metaphor along with the "layer of thick filth choking the life" hyperbole. James' catharsis is palpable. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Wow, this post popped up quickly on the heels of the last dark chapter. It was wise to make it a separate chapter of transition. The "wet, slimy blanket" is an apt metaphor along with the "layer of thick filth choking the life" hyperbole. James' catharsis is palpable. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thanks you so much. I wasn't sure how this would be received, being so short. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Sasha, I know there is not much happening in this chapter, but I guess this is what makes your books interesting. The plot undergoes several different speeds, and the chapters do not resemble the 'skin' of a story only. This chapter shows me how human James is. I like the part when James looks into the mirror and realizes how old he has grown.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Hi, Sasha, I know there is not much happening in this chapter, but I guess this is what makes your books interesting. The plot undergoes several different speeds, and the chapters do not resemble the 'skin' of a story only. This chapter shows me how human James is. I like the part when James looks into the mirror and realizes how old he has grown.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much. I felt I the dark nature of the previous chapter needed a slower paced one to follow. Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from adewpearl
I reached for the bar of soap laying on the edge - lying
As my hatred for Dad grew, - add comma
so did my fear that, my life - drop this comma
What a poignant scene of James just crying in the shower after the water has turned cold.
He really has a struggle, balancing his knowledge of what his father suffered through with his knowledge of his father's unconscionable acts. Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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I reached for the bar of soap laying on the edge - lying
As my hatred for Dad grew, - add comma
so did my fear that, my life - drop this comma
What a poignant scene of James just crying in the shower after the water has turned cold.
He really has a struggle, balancing his knowledge of what his father suffered through with his knowledge of his father's unconscionable acts. Brooke
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thanks for catching the spags...you'd think I would eventually get the lay and lie thing after writing it so many times!!! Yes, poor James is caught in a very dark place right now. He still has to re3ad the two letters....
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Very good,why can't I find novels like this,in the stores? I don't think I have read any of this.[or is this girl a cop?] I have read so many today,I am going to finish with this one. There are a lot of great writers on Fan Story,and you are one of them.This storyline is great,just pulled me right in.Very well laid out,and carried through. Real characters. And a great plot. Keep it up. Very good.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Very good,why can't I find novels like this,in the stores? I don't think I have read any of this.[or is this girl a cop?] I have read so many today,I am going to finish with this one. There are a lot of great writers on Fan Story,and you are one of them.This storyline is great,just pulled me right in.Very well laid out,and carried through. Real characters. And a great plot. Keep it up. Very good.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Nope, James is just a kid trying to deal with the reality his dad is a serial killer. Mac is the lead detective and has become friends with James. James's mother is a basket case, his younger brother Charlie is a bomb with a short fuse, and is sister is in a psychiatric ward after a failed suicide attempt. Other than that, they are a perfectly normal American family...lol
Comment from Carolyn 12
Oh wow. How awful for this young man. I think as kids we try to raionalize things away after all they are our parents. And then you think but by the Grace of God go I. It does not take away the hurt and pain. I could not help but cry seeing this come alive as I read. Do you hate or do you forgive, can you forgive..
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Oh wow. How awful for this young man. I think as kids we try to raionalize things away after all they are our parents. And then you think but by the Grace of God go I. It does not take away the hurt and pain. I could not help but cry seeing this come alive as I read. Do you hate or do you forgive, can you forgive..
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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In my research, I learned that some are able to forgive and others hate. There is little in between. Glad you liked this really short chapter.
Comment from mumsyone
This chapter is well written, well edited, and the story line is good. Thank you for putting some extra notes in the author notes.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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This chapter is well written, well edited, and the story line is good. Thank you for putting some extra notes in the author notes.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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You are more than welcome. I know the chapter is short, but I felt it was necessary.
Comment from lisasolorio1
What a very sad story but yet really realistic of what a young man would be going through.. nicely descriptive and you see it being portarayed in your head like a movie. Nicely done... look forward to reading more.
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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What a very sad story but yet really realistic of what a young man would be going through.. nicely descriptive and you see it being portarayed in your head like a movie. Nicely done... look forward to reading more.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thank you very much. I am thrilled you are enjoying this.
Comment from c_lucas
Hotels havean almost endless supply of hot water. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. James is finally having to face the reality he did not want to face.
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Hotels havean almost endless supply of hot water. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. James is finally having to face the reality he did not want to face.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2011
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Thanks for making me laugh. I have stayed at the Sheraton, and take my word for it, it you run the shower long enough, you will eventually get cold water...lol Glad you liked this one.
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I take quick showers.