The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "A Talk With Mom"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from quashdog
This chapter is apparently meant to build tension for the upcoming posts. You built it up like a stick of dynamite fixing to blow. Very good writing.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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This chapter is apparently meant to build tension for the upcoming posts. You built it up like a stick of dynamite fixing to blow. Very good writing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Yup, I love to build the tension. I hope to post the next chapter by tomorrow.
Comment from adewpearl
both hands in a vice-like grip - vise-like
typo - she sudenly began to speak - suddenly
Oh, what a powerful scene as James doggedly questions his mother and Mom goes into some other reality in response - I can't wait to hear what she has to say. Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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both hands in a vice-like grip - vise-like
typo - she sudenly began to speak - suddenly
Oh, what a powerful scene as James doggedly questions his mother and Mom goes into some other reality in response - I can't wait to hear what she has to say. Brooke
Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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I haven't checked my records, but I think you have pointed out that vice is spelled vise at least twenty times...I guess I am just a hopeless case. Glad you liked this one. I plan to post another chapter tomorrow.
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Yeah, you're hopeless, but you write one helluva story! ;-)
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One out of two ain't bad.....
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Especially if it's the important one :-)
Comment from c_lucas
James and his family are feeling the pressures from his father's actions. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Excellent job.
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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James and his family are feeling the pressures from his father's actions. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Excellent job.
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thanks. I am pleased you liked this one.
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You're welcome, Sasha. Good luck in the Story of The Month Contest. Charlie
Comment from animatqua
Oh you are doling this out in dips and dabs, aren't you! I swear, if this was in book form, it would already be devoured and I would be looking for the next one.
Wonderful job, as usual.
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Oh you are doling this out in dips and dabs, aren't you! I swear, if this was in book form, it would already be devoured and I would be looking for the next one.
Wonderful job, as usual.
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Yup, but I do plan to post another chapter tomorrow so you won't have to wait too long. Glad you liked this one.