Redemption
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Comment from R. K. Alan
I really liked the idea of recirculating drug money to purchase much needed equipment... vests and guns. Makes perfect sense to me. I wonder where it really goes? Ray aka Krylon
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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I really liked the idea of recirculating drug money to purchase much needed equipment... vests and guns. Makes perfect sense to me. I wonder where it really goes? Ray aka Krylon
Comment Written 19-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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In a town where I used to live, they actually did buy equipment with some siezed money. If not a general practice, it should be! Thanks for reading. Regards, Bill
Comment from Shirley B
Another great chapther. This story is really coming together. I like the story because sadly meth is a problem for every state because it is so cheap to make. I like how you keep a list of characters. That helps me a lot. Great job. Off the subject Out teams are doing great too! Please, please yell loud enough that Auburn stomps LSU! Shirley
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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Another great chapther. This story is really coming together. I like the story because sadly meth is a problem for every state because it is so cheap to make. I like how you keep a list of characters. That helps me a lot. Great job. Off the subject Out teams are doing great too! Please, please yell loud enough that Auburn stomps LSU! Shirley
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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Hi Shirley - thanks for reading and making me smile with the football. I believe that Auburn will beat LSU, which will make the third top 20 team they've beaten. Could be Auburn and Oklahoma for the National Championship! I'll still be crazy about you, but maybe not that day.
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I loving reading your work, but I know what's important. God and football! can you tell I was the girl in the stands telling my friends what what a 1st down was? I just hope Oklahoma doesn't mess up when they play in Missouri next week. The Tigers are out for blood. The last year they played Okla. beat them twice in 1 year, It would be great Auburn and Oklahoma. We are bad about tanking bowl games! LOL Shirley
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Ah - what's so bad? I always talk football to my buddies!
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I do too. I just don't drink beer!
Comment from Jen Gentry
Please forgive me I have a cold and can't quit sneezing. so I had to stop and start reading over and over. SO what I found with reading this is that it is easy to pick up were you leave off. Makes it look good to me great chapter. NO spag that I can see.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Please forgive me I have a cold and can't quit sneezing. so I had to stop and start reading over and over. SO what I found with reading this is that it is easy to pick up were you leave off. Makes it look good to me great chapter. NO spag that I can see.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thanks Christa - glad we're a computer screen away. Hate colds, but love people who read my story and give kind and generous feedback! Regards, Bill
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Ha HA just for that I am sending you a cyber sneeze achoo! lol
Comment from dportwood
bhogg,
This is a good, clean story that is a pleasure to read. The action is constant and fast moving. Never a dull moment by getting bogged down in rhetoric and details. Well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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bhogg,
This is a good, clean story that is a pleasure to read. The action is constant and fast moving. Never a dull moment by getting bogged down in rhetoric and details. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thanks Duane - writing a book is a totally new experience. I somehow miss the singular stories. I'm going to see this one through though. Thanks for reading and your kind remarks. Bill
Comment from InHisownwrite
Well, as usual the suspense continues.....
The chracters we have come to know.....
The story grows deeoer and deeper.....
As a past meth addict, I'm very curious as to where this will all go.... But, love it!
Bryan
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Well, as usual the suspense continues.....
The chracters we have come to know.....
The story grows deeoer and deeper.....
As a past meth addict, I'm very curious as to where this will all go.... But, love it!
Bryan
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thanks Bryan! I might contact you with private message for some help. Regards, Bill
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No problem! Bryan
Comment from quashdog
I liked the story. It had suspense and a sense of humor. Ther were some typos. Mostly with puncturation. The dialogue had good flow and the characters showed personality.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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I liked the story. It had suspense and a sense of humor. Ther were some typos. Mostly with puncturation. The dialogue had good flow and the characters showed personality.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thanks - I'll circle back around and look at some of the punctuation. I try hard on the self editing, but have yet to post anything error free. Appreciate you stopping by. Regards, Bill
Comment from Gungalo
The things some people learn in school, eh? LOL.
This is moving along quite nicely and keeping the action and the suspense alive. Awesome done you and now I'm pondering on the next action.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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The things some people learn in school, eh? LOL.
This is moving along quite nicely and keeping the action and the suspense alive. Awesome done you and now I'm pondering on the next action.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for reading and for your continued support of this work! I had no idea how difficult it was to write a book as opposed to independent stories! Regards, Bill
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My pleasure, Bill. Oh it's just tons of fun. LOL.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Great job and addition to your novel. I love the characters.
Coughing for effect only, & Smiling, Leal, responded, (Just a warning, I have taken some major hits for starting sentences with 'ing' words. I guess we aren't supposed to.)
Stan was patient as he answered. (I made it almost to the bottom before I notice a dialogue error, comma after answered.)
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Great job and addition to your novel. I love the characters.
Coughing for effect only, & Smiling, Leal, responded, (Just a warning, I have taken some major hits for starting sentences with 'ing' words. I guess we aren't supposed to.)
Stan was patient as he answered. (I made it almost to the bottom before I notice a dialogue error, comma after answered.)
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you very much Barbara. I can sure change those sentences without changing meaning. I always appreciate your help!
Comment from mmmichelle34
that is an exellent peace of work i so enjoyed reading it.
you do have a tuley great way of writting hope to see more of your work.
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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that is an exellent peace of work i so enjoyed reading it.
you do have a tuley great way of writting hope to see more of your work.
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you Michelle - if you could look out across the internet, you would see a big smile. Regards, Bill