Scarecrow
inspired by Father Flaps36 total reviews
Comment from RuralFrights
Remarkable quatrain! Your writing style is much like mine, and the structured of quatrain make it all the better.
"Would a straw beauty take the chance?". That line could be opened as a topic of discussion in a classroom. (a straw beauty--alliteration--has more meaning than you probably even realize.
In you final stanza - final line: the rhyme the word "alone doesn't rhyme well with your second line's ending "gone" --I noticed it as I do the exact same thing. Enjoyful!
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Remarkable quatrain! Your writing style is much like mine, and the structured of quatrain make it all the better.
"Would a straw beauty take the chance?". That line could be opened as a topic of discussion in a classroom. (a straw beauty--alliteration--has more meaning than you probably even realize.
In you final stanza - final line: the rhyme the word "alone doesn't rhyme well with your second line's ending "gone" --I noticed it as I do the exact same thing. Enjoyful!
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Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Tommy, thank you ever so much. I apologize for just responding to this review. I appreciate your comments very much.. gone, alone..lol..poetic license I shall employ..depends on what part of Texas you hail from!!! lol...Of course I was born in Nth Texas too, right in Tornado Alley..
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Pampa, Texas (50 miles NE of Amarillo/Texas Panhandle)
Comment from Wendyanne
Aww how cute jls. I feel sympathy for your delightful scarecrow. What a lovely character he is. Thanks for making me smile today. Well done
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Aww how cute jls. I feel sympathy for your delightful scarecrow. What a lovely character he is. Thanks for making me smile today. Well done
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Wendyanne, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. I apologize for just responding.. jimi
Comment from RebelRose
I haven't read the one by FatherFlaps that inspired this one but I will look into it. Yours, however, is very entertaining and your rhyming scheme is very good. Good line flow and rhythm. An easy read.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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I haven't read the one by FatherFlaps that inspired this one but I will look into it. Yours, however, is very entertaining and your rhyming scheme is very good. Good line flow and rhythm. An easy read.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Rebel Rose, once again thank you so much. I rarel;y post more than one work a week, much less 2 in one day. It is a doulble pleasure to have you review again..thank you so very much..jlsavell
Comment from M.L. Gardner
I really liked this. It is well written, easily read and brings back the nostalgia of The Wizard of Oz with a sentimental twist. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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I really liked this. It is well written, easily read and brings back the nostalgia of The Wizard of Oz with a sentimental twist. Nicely done!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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M.L. Gardner, thank you so very much. I do not beleive we have met before. Are you new. I will look into your portfolio sometime this afternoon. Once again thank you for stopping by and for the great review..jlsavell
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I am new here. I really enjoy this site so much. I had never seriously read poetry before in my life, but I am finding so much beautiful raw talent here I've found a new hobby! I look forward to making good friends here.
Regards,
MLG
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you certainly will. I just went ot your portfolio..wow..cannot wait to read..jlsavell
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oh and welcome to Fanstory!!!!!
Comment from Matoshka
This was so gentle, I could feel the loneliness of the scarecrow as he stands alone. Perhaps, the wizard will grant him a female scarecrow and together they can rule the land they guard from the crows. Thanks for sharing it was great!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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This was so gentle, I could feel the loneliness of the scarecrow as he stands alone. Perhaps, the wizard will grant him a female scarecrow and together they can rule the land they guard from the crows. Thanks for sharing it was great!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Matoshka, once again thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. Rarely do I ever post more than one work a week, much less 2 in one day. And today I am graced with the same reviewer twice. Thank you so very very much. This was inspired by another Fanstorain..Father Flpas..after reading one of his brilliant works..again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
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Again, your very welcome.
Comment from Ann Smith
I enjoyed the voice of the scarecrow and can feel his sadness at being alone. The poem has good rhythm and rhyme. I hope the scarecrow can have some grace from the wizard, and get kissed and become real, so he is not alone. This was especially appropriate for the season. ann
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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I enjoyed the voice of the scarecrow and can feel his sadness at being alone. The poem has good rhythm and rhyme. I hope the scarecrow can have some grace from the wizard, and get kissed and become real, so he is not alone. This was especially appropriate for the season. ann
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Comment Written 10-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2010
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Ann Smith, thank you so very much for stopping by. This little poem was inspired by Father Flaps poetry here on Fanstory. Isn't it uncanny how we as writers derive our inspirations to create..again thank you..jlsavell
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You're welcome, and yes it is uncanny. ann
