Flash Fiction
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Comment from june prescott
Nice little story of a set of twins sneaking off to have a bit of chocolate. Did you mean to say "You open (it)?" When I first started, I thought it was the box they were opening, then find out it's a candy bar! LOL
Nicely done, JP
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Nice little story of a set of twins sneaking off to have a bit of chocolate. Did you mean to say "You open (it)?" When I first started, I thought it was the box they were opening, then find out it's a candy bar! LOL
Nicely done, JP
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
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LOL... No problem! My pleasure to read! :) Cheers, JP
Comment from Jetco
I rated this high for no spag and also because the story read fast with good sentence structure. I'm wondering though what was chocolate doing in a trunk in an attic. Is that where Mom hid it to keep the twins from finding it. Just like kids to think a dog Sammy could open the trunk and if they lie Mom will know the truth.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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I rated this high for no spag and also because the story read fast with good sentence structure. I'm wondering though what was chocolate doing in a trunk in an attic. Is that where Mom hid it to keep the twins from finding it. Just like kids to think a dog Sammy could open the trunk and if they lie Mom will know the truth.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a humorous overtone. Your story has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. The twins don't know that dogs can't eat chocolate.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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This is very well written with a humorous overtone. Your story has a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. The twins don't know that dogs can't eat chocolate.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Charlie..
As always, thank you...Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork I think this very cute and funny. I love how they blame it on the dog.My children would do the same thing that poor dog got blame for everything.
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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I like the artwork I think this very cute and funny. I love how they blame it on the dog.My children would do the same thing that poor dog got blame for everything.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
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Hello y friend you just take it easy If I don't heard from you on site. I will always hear from you in my heart.
Comment from RebelRose
Sounds just like two mischievous little boys. Another good example of flash fiction. Well done. I enjoyed the light-hearted subject matter.
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Sounds just like two mischievous little boys. Another good example of flash fiction. Well done. I enjoyed the light-hearted subject matter.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
