Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Okay, what are you up to? This is teasing and tantalizing. It is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Very good job.

 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

Charlie,

Reminicing I think..of the good ole days gone by..lol Thanks Smiles, Carol

reply by c_lucas on 11-May-2010

You're welcome, Carol. Charlie

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Great story, shows a lot of intrique and it keeps for guessing. It is fast moving and it has a happy ending. Nothing like creating a little steam. Good job.

 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

Texasgal,

Good thing she liked his story or the steam might have gotten too hot to handle..lol Thanks...Carol

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hi Carol,

Nice short work here, good job with this. Made me miss my guy. Except he wouldn't turn the light back on...persistent fellow is he.

Easy to read, I enjoyed.
--Turtle.

 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

Turtle,

Where did he run off to? He shouldn't leave you alone because you tend to conjure up some strange people when your mind is left to wander. lol Smiles, Carol

reply by --Turtle. on 12-May-2010

Mother's Day weekend for a guy who works in a kitchen is pretty much an 80hour work week. And afterwards, cause these guys haven't seen enough of each other, they get together and drink them-self silly on monday, and crash at the house closest to the restaurant so they can roll from wherever they crash and go straight back to work. I get left alone a lot! :p

--Turtle.

Comment from Bellringer

Excellent

Well done micro story with a touch of humor at the end: "Shut off the light. I like your story better." I also missed the contest! Well, there are plenty of contests out there in Fanstory land!

 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

Bellringer,

Yes...I just thought it was fun to write anyhow. Glad you enjoyed it. Smiles, Carol

Comment from hfriscia

Exceptional

This is a nice story short story...The ending was a nice touch this really short work...The flow is excellent and every word help towards the story...

 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

hfriscia,

What a lovely surprise...I thank you very very much. I haven't been able to be on the site much lately so tonight I thought even though I missed the contest I would write something. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it. Smiles, Carol

Comment from jl & bandit

Excellent

Cute !!!
So are you doing them all now ???
LOL Please do, I love to read your work !!
I enjoyed this very much !
JL&B

 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

jl & bandit,

It's a thought..I really need the practice. Glad you are enjoying them. Thank you for always reading my stories. I really appreciate your followimg me. Smiles, Carol

Comment from bowls

Excellent

How cute! Your story is direct and wastes no time with superfluous detail. At the same time is totally entertaining. I had to chuckle at the end!

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 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

bowls,

Glad you enjoyed this little flash story. It's hard to wrap much emotion into so few words. Thank you...Carol

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

What a great bit of flirtatiousness between a couple - I like the familiarity of a couple where one can read in bed but also the passion that lingers between them so that one can talk the other out of reading - and the last line is so fun-filled :-) Brooke

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 Comment Written 11-May-2010

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reply by the author on 11-May-2010

Brooke,

Reminiscent of nights gone by I guess...Glad you enjoyed it.

smiles, Carol