Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from laurelp
I thought the read was very well done. I enjoyed the dialogue and the way you described the scenes. I found no errors, so I don't understand your author notes. The chapter was just fine.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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I thought the read was very well done. I enjoyed the dialogue and the way you described the scenes. I found no errors, so I don't understand your author notes. The chapter was just fine.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thank you, you are too kind. I usually read my post about four more times than I did this one. So I was worried I posted too soon.
Comment from maggieJo
I found NOTHING lacking or wrong with this chapter. This is a beautiful love story. It is clean - but not sickly so. This would be very appropriate for young teens to read - - - and follow.
Your doing a great job,Barbara, I love your story. We (society) need more stories like this. It could be a good movie.
maggiejo
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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I found NOTHING lacking or wrong with this chapter. This is a beautiful love story. It is clean - but not sickly so. This would be very appropriate for young teens to read - - - and follow.
Your doing a great job,Barbara, I love your story. We (society) need more stories like this. It could be a good movie.
maggiejo
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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You are way too kind. Thank you so much for your review and tghe stars.
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You are so very welcome dear girl.
maggiejo
Comment from Solrac
Barbara Wilkey has written a chapter that is both traditional and fresh, one of the few talents to join this much-plowed field with something interesting and original to say. The charms of Tantalizing Eyes are many, including the picturesque settings, the realistic nature of the plot (a rarity in many mysteries of this type) and the author's simple, evocative prose. But it is the book's characters, and their warm, lushly rendered relationships, that make this work a standout. Among today's authors of traditional mysteries, Barbara ranks at the top. We hope, we will be enjoying her work for years to come.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Barbara Wilkey has written a chapter that is both traditional and fresh, one of the few talents to join this much-plowed field with something interesting and original to say. The charms of Tantalizing Eyes are many, including the picturesque settings, the realistic nature of the plot (a rarity in many mysteries of this type) and the author's simple, evocative prose. But it is the book's characters, and their warm, lushly rendered relationships, that make this work a standout. Among today's authors of traditional mysteries, Barbara ranks at the top. We hope, we will be enjoying her work for years to come.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Oh my gosh. You just brought tears to my eyes. Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind words, coming from a talented author like you I am honored. Thank you for the stars.
Comment from chaswriter
barbara.wilkey - A little sexual tension between Leya and Steve put some interesting possibilities to the story. Makes me wonder how their relationship will evolve. Well written with no spag that I could find.
Charlie
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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barbara.wilkey - A little sexual tension between Leya and Steve put some interesting possibilities to the story. Makes me wonder how their relationship will evolve. Well written with no spag that I could find.
Charlie
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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I am sure with your imagination you know exactly where the romance will evolve to...Thank you for the review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
I keep wondering when they're finally going to get together. Now that Peggy's gone, I gues we're just witing for her family to do their thing.
After dinner, Leya headed toward her room and was half way down the hall[no comma] when Steven asked, ---
In't "half way" one word?
Roberta
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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I keep wondering when they're finally going to get together. Now that Peggy's gone, I gues we're just witing for her family to do their thing.
After dinner, Leya headed toward her room and was half way down the hall[no comma] when Steven asked, ---
In't "half way" one word?
Roberta
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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I am not sure about halfway. My spellcheck had it as one word. It gigged me went I wrote it as two words. Peggy is not out of the way, she will attempt to get Steven back again. Thank you for your kind words.
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I can't wait! Peggy deserves her come-uupins.
Roberta
Comment from nora arjuna
When he didn't respond, she said, "Thank you.["]
ah, for goodness sake, just kissed the lady, steven. :)
nice romantic chapter, barb. think it's time they start being honest with each other?
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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When he didn't respond, she said, "Thank you.["]
ah, for goodness sake, just kissed the lady, steven. :)
nice romantic chapter, barb. think it's time they start being honest with each other?
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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Thank you for catching the missing ". No one else caught it. Steven and Leya will have sparks flying very soon.
Comment from RebelRose
They're dancing around the words, aren't they? I wish Leya had been awake and heard him say "I ove You", but I promise to be patient, ha, ha. I know that is coming. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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They're dancing around the words, aren't they? I wish Leya had been awake and heard him say "I ove You", but I promise to be patient, ha, ha. I know that is coming. Great chapter.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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It's hard to be patient while these two work their way through this. Thank you for the review.
Comment from anabelle
It looks good, Barbara. I really enjoyed this. They're getting closer and closer, but still not close enough. How long does she have to hide out? Forever?
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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It looks good, Barbara. I really enjoyed this. They're getting closer and closer, but still not close enough. How long does she have to hide out? Forever?
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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She has to hide out until her family gets over being angry with her.
Comment from bookishfabler
half way down the hall(-,) when Steven asked, "Would you like to go for a walk?"
Thank you, again, for caring."
I don't think there is any commas in this one.
There was silence(-,) as Steven bent down
There was silence, again.
I thnk you can do better htan there was silence.maybe
an uncomfortable silence encompassed them
I think this is a great chapter, but maybe more description. I don't mean background decription, more decriptive word perhaps.
lots of hugs
book
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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half way down the hall(-,) when Steven asked, "Would you like to go for a walk?"
Thank you, again, for caring."
I don't think there is any commas in this one.
There was silence(-,) as Steven bent down
There was silence, again.
I thnk you can do better htan there was silence.maybe
an uncomfortable silence encompassed them
I think this is a great chapter, but maybe more description. I don't mean background decription, more decriptive word perhaps.
lots of hugs
book
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your review. I will take a look at the descriptors.
Comment from adewpearl
he felt her forehead, making certain - add comma
bookmark laying on the nightstand - lying
You are building enough sexual tension into this relationship to light up a city from its palpable energy. LOL I also love the tender moments - her poem, his just looking at her when she sleeps, his holding her hand. I'm sure rooting for them. Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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he felt her forehead, making certain - add comma
bookmark laying on the nightstand - lying
You are building enough sexual tension into this relationship to light up a city from its palpable energy. LOL I also love the tender moments - her poem, his just looking at her when she sleeps, his holding her hand. I'm sure rooting for them. Brooke
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your assistance. I will correct those errors. I apprecaite your support.