Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

You do an effective job, Carol, of creating a most dramatic and emotionally intense scene within the syllable count of the haiku - good luck in the contest :-) Brooke

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Brooke

Thanks so much for reading my haiku. This one meant a lot to me so I appreciate the comments. Carol

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Your great Haiku poem:
"please, don't let him die,
mother prays to God above,
baby cries, he lives."
This was a great Japanese Haiku. I liked the photo you used it went along with this Haiku. I'm giving you five stars because it was the essence of a moment. As you know Haikus are defined as an unrhymed Japanese poem recording the essence of a moment. Nature is combined with human nature my favorite along with Senryu poems are defined as Senryu (also called human haiku) is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed
lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5) or 17 syllables in all. Senryu is usually written in
the present tense and only references to some aspect of human nature or emotions. They possess
no references to the natural world and thus stand out from nature/seasonal haiku.
Thanks for posting this Haiku and good luck on the writing prompt. I'm giving this five stars because it was a true Haiku that was great.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2009

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Melissa
Thanks for stopping by and reading my haiku. I appreciate all the information and the kind comments. Take care, Carol

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

Those babies can really prove everyone wrong. The will to live is just too strong. I loved you little piece of hope and joy. Great job.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2009

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Joy

The doctors counted him out, but with the will of God he proved them all wrong. I was definitely blessed.

Carol

Comment from Clouddancer

Excellent

An emotional haiku that tugs at the heartstrings. perfect syllable count.
Points out (authors ntoes) that people make plans and God laughs...(He is in charge). Well written imagery.

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Clouddancer

Thanks for taking a look. I thought you would understand the emotions behind this haiku. The doctors counted him out, but God had other plans. Thanks again, Carol

reply by Clouddancer on 26-Oct-2009

Thanks for sharing!

Comment from lola29

Excellent

Carol, your poem is so lovely, and radiates your love and compassion for your family and others. You always inspire and encourage us with your grace.

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Lola

I was blessed when the doctor's gave up on my son, but God didn't. He may be handicapped but he's a blessing every day. Thanks for the kind review. Carol

reply by lola29 on 26-Oct-2009

Carol, you are such a lovely lady. I would think that everyone who has the good fortune to know you is blessed because of it.

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2009

LOLA

Thanks for making my day! I try very hard to make everyone happy, but some times they begin to take if for granted. It's nice to know when some one recognizes those special feelings I have for people. You are one of them that I hold close...Hope you don't mind. Smiles, Carol

reply by lola29 on 26-Oct-2009

I feel very honored.

Comment from Nanette Mary

Excellent

Hullo Carol ....

What you have written here is very beautiful, coupled with your Notes at the end. Such a clear blessing from God should provide you with constant inspiration to write in such a way that your words do good for all your readers and that they give honour and glory to the One Who spared the life of your baby son.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.

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Nanette

I am thankful everyday for the blessing I received. The doctors gave up on him, but God certainly didn't. Thanks for the kind review. Carol

Comment from RebelRose

Excellent

This one tugs at the heart strings.
Very sweet and poignant poem. Good haiku.
Good luck in the contest; this is a good entry.

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RebelRose

When the doctors gave up on my son, I was blessed that God did not. Thanks for the wonderful review. Smiles, Carol

Comment from MJMuraco

Excellent

I love your poem. The photo is perfect and in such a few words you created such a strong message with much emotion. I'm so happy you put your faith in God and that your son survived.

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MJ

I was very blessed. He may be handicapped but he gives me great joy. When I first joined fan story I wrote about him but never finished it. I am thinking about re-posting and adding the new chapters. I truly was blessed. Smiles, Carol

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Begin Again,

This is so moving and full of faith! What a thing to live through! God is faithful! He heard moms prayers and baby's cry! Your artwork is precious.

Thank you for sharing your blessing with us!

SweetLinda

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linda

I truly was blessed. The doctors had me get him baptized because they said it was highly unlikely he would survive. God had other plans! I was blessed. Smiles, Carol

Comment from RADIO

Excellent

Very well said Begin Again
is your message of the power
of prayer. Even when things may
appear hopeless we must never
lose faith. I just posted a prayer
that actually led to a television show.
on that condition.
Radio

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Radio

I shall look for it! I was blessed when the doctors gave up hope, God didn't. He had other plans for my son. Thank you.

Carol