POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
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Comment from malachi1206
This was a great poem and tribute poem I lost my first love and wife to cancer so I have a real relatability to those who have cancer and just as important the family it affects excellent acrostic malachi1206
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This was a great poem and tribute poem I lost my first love and wife to cancer so I have a real relatability to those who have cancer and just as important the family it affects excellent acrostic malachi1206
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Malachi
Thank you for your kind response and the thoughtful review. Carol
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol...this is a lovely poem and one you can be proud of. I am so sorry about your mom. I volunteer in the hospital's radiation oncology unit and I have found many get cancer a second time. One would think that dreaded disease should have only one chance. This is an outstanding acrostic...good luck in the contest....blessings....to you and your mom....chey
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Hi Carol...this is a lovely poem and one you can be proud of. I am so sorry about your mom. I volunteer in the hospital's radiation oncology unit and I have found many get cancer a second time. One would think that dreaded disease should have only one chance. This is an outstanding acrostic...good luck in the contest....blessings....to you and your mom....chey
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Chey
Thank you for the kind response. I appreciate it very much. I am glad that you enjoyed my attempt at the acrostic poem. Thanks again Carol
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is a very well written acrostic poem in which you have incorporated your feelings of sadness strongly and I am pleased that you ended on a lighter note no need for any changes I hope your mother fights this terrible disease and is soon much better regards Fuller
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This is a very well written acrostic poem in which you have incorporated your feelings of sadness strongly and I am pleased that you ended on a lighter note no need for any changes I hope your mother fights this terrible disease and is soon much better regards Fuller
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Fuller
Thank you for your kind response. I appreciate it very much. Glad that you enjoyed my acrostic poem. Thanks again CArol
Comment from fictionwriter
I know just how you feel, but make the most of the time you have together. I know that's what makes the difference to me. Great job, even if you're not a poet.
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I know just how you feel, but make the most of the time you have together. I know that's what makes the difference to me. Great job, even if you're not a poet.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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fictionwriter
No greater compliment could I receive. I am pleased that you enjoyed it and understood the emotions within it. Thanks again. Carol
Comment from Phil Kitom
I believe that poetry is the vehicle by
which we express our emotions, and though
many will say it is the way it is constructed
I think that is secondary to the thoughts and
emotions that a person conveys. It is not
necessasry to have an English degree to say
the words I love you. It is the meaning
that is important. Your words speak from the
heart and by doing so you have been true to
the voice inside you. Well done Carol...
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I believe that poetry is the vehicle by
which we express our emotions, and though
many will say it is the way it is constructed
I think that is secondary to the thoughts and
emotions that a person conveys. It is not
necessasry to have an English degree to say
the words I love you. It is the meaning
that is important. Your words speak from the
heart and by doing so you have been true to
the voice inside you. Well done Carol...
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Phil
My friend, you always have the exact words to say to make me feel good about my writing. I truly appreciate your thoughts. Thank you for each and every word. Carol
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You are so welcome dear friend
and best wishes to your mom who
is a very brave woman and I pray
that a light will fill her heart and
radiate through her to give her peace...
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My heartfelt thanks...Carol
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Lift that chin, raise a smile and love is with you all the while...
Comment from RADIO
A true poet you are because you write
from the heart and that to me says it all.
Your feelings flow true and pure in this well
written poem.
It is not easy dealing with our own personal
sorrows, we cannot do it without God's help.
Give me the strength dear Lord. I've said
these words so often.
Radio
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A true poet you are because you write
from the heart and that to me says it all.
Your feelings flow true and pure in this well
written poem.
It is not easy dealing with our own personal
sorrows, we cannot do it without God's help.
Give me the strength dear Lord. I've said
these words so often.
Radio
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Radio
Thank you so much for your kind comments and understanding the emotions within my poem. I appreciate your review.
I just re-posted my very first writing...and certainly the one closest to my heart...I'd value your opinion on "Butterflies From Heaven" Thank you again. Carol
Comment from hotstuff
I am so sorry to hear about your mum. I hope that she wins her battle against the return of cancer. She must be devastated. I hope you poem helps her to remain positive.
Good luck in the competition.
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I am so sorry to hear about your mum. I hope that she wins her battle against the return of cancer. She must be devastated. I hope you poem helps her to remain positive.
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Hotstuff
Thanks so much for the kind comments and wishes. I appreciate it so much. Carol
Comment from Deuces
What a remarkable piece. You speak of seeking comfort in sorrow - how true that is of most people. When something hard comes along we revel in its negativity instead of searching for the way to rise above the badness it leaves us with. This is an inspirational piece. I do not think you have slaughtered the proper construction of the poem as you say, to each their poem is worded differently as each person writes in different ways. This is your poem and you wrote it the way your heart allowed you to - its very good!.
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What a remarkable piece. You speak of seeking comfort in sorrow - how true that is of most people. When something hard comes along we revel in its negativity instead of searching for the way to rise above the badness it leaves us with. This is an inspirational piece. I do not think you have slaughtered the proper construction of the poem as you say, to each their poem is worded differently as each person writes in different ways. This is your poem and you wrote it the way your heart allowed you to - its very good!.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Deuces
I appreciate the vote of confidence and you have uplifted me as well. Thank you for reading and understanding the poem. I appreciate it. Carol
Comment from utopian_dream_x
I'm so sorry about your mom. My heart goes out to you. As for the poem, this is a challenging acrostic and you have managed to piece the lines together so well. Your words are well chosen. Lovely!
utopian_dream_x
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I'm so sorry about your mom. My heart goes out to you. As for the poem, this is a challenging acrostic and you have managed to piece the lines together so well. Your words are well chosen. Lovely!
utopian_dream_x
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Utopian
I thank you for your thoughts and I am pleased that you enjoyed the acrostic poem. Thank you for your kind review. Carol
Comment from DrCarter2001
This is a great job for a first acrostic. I was going to take a stab at this contest but couldn't come up with a good word to use, and now I see you would have blown me away, anyway. My one real criticism is that if you're going to rhyme, you really should have a consistent meter. In a few spots it feels like the beats are off (e.g. "Cancer came a calling, demanding its place to stay,
Only then did I pray, begging for another day.") Try reading it aloud, try tapping as you read if you need, or count syllables.
I'm a little confused by the dark knight reference; though I'm sure it has nothing to do with Batman, I don;t understand who the knight is. One other nit: "a(-)calling"
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This is a great job for a first acrostic. I was going to take a stab at this contest but couldn't come up with a good word to use, and now I see you would have blown me away, anyway. My one real criticism is that if you're going to rhyme, you really should have a consistent meter. In a few spots it feels like the beats are off (e.g. "Cancer came a calling, demanding its place to stay,
Only then did I pray, begging for another day.") Try reading it aloud, try tapping as you read if you need, or count syllables.
I'm a little confused by the dark knight reference; though I'm sure it has nothing to do with Batman, I don;t understand who the knight is. One other nit: "a(-)calling"
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
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Dr. CArter
A poet I am not so I accept all suggestions. This dark Knight Sorrow...its simply a metaphor making the grief and sadness a person owning my spirit.
Thank you for your review. Carol