POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Scrubbin' The Night Away"When I dabble at things.....
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Comment from Toller
Your poem is very fun. It has good rhythm, rhyme, and flow. I don't think any revisions are needed. Nice job!
Ashley
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Your poem is very fun. It has good rhythm, rhyme, and flow. I don't think any revisions are needed. Nice job!
Ashley
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Ashley
Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from wierdgrace
Awe and fun and puts a smile on my face, we all need to read poems like this, that is why I wrote the story about blondes, it made many laugh and you made many smile, thank you for putting a smile on my face
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Awe and fun and puts a smile on my face, we all need to read poems like this, that is why I wrote the story about blondes, it made many laugh and you made many smile, thank you for putting a smile on my face
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Wiergrace
Thanks so much for the kind review. I am happy that you enjoyed the silly song. It was meant to make you smile and I am glad to see it did its job. Carol
Comment from gerry26
What fun it was to read this. You have really brought a smile to my face. Your writing clear and concise with good flow.
gerry
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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What fun it was to read this. You have really brought a smile to my face. Your writing clear and concise with good flow.
gerry
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Gerry
Sometimes you just have to write something to be silly about...This was my sometime. So glad that you enjoyed it.
Thanks again Carol
Comment from Amfunny
Very cute... but sad that I wasn't invited to this Girls Night Out. Sounded like fun. Would have enjoyed watching Brooke and Margaret think of nature. Could have learned how they do it so easily. LOL... this was a fun piece to read.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Very cute... but sad that I wasn't invited to this Girls Night Out. Sounded like fun. Would have enjoyed watching Brooke and Margaret think of nature. Could have learned how they do it so easily. LOL... this was a fun piece to read.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Amfunny
I truly did try to put you in their but since I didn't really know your name, I tried using the clown aspect...I didn't work so well. So I owe you one my friend. Thanks for the review. Carol
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Ahah.... check out my book that is on my profile. It has my real name there. I am Norma Jean. Just like Marilyn Monroe.. lol. :)
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Oh I love it....You are not only funny but beautiful too. And a star on top of it! I knew I liked you as my friend. Carol
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Hiya, Carol. What a delightfully whimsical piece! A fun song, no less. Love how you included some of my FAVORITE fanstorians. :)
This is a very happy poem, hopefully alleviating many folks' stress, particularly your own.
John
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Hiya, Carol. What a delightfully whimsical piece! A fun song, no less. Love how you included some of my FAVORITE fanstorians. :)
This is a very happy poem, hopefully alleviating many folks' stress, particularly your own.
John
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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John
Did you not see that I also included you in the poem...How could I leave some of my favorite guys out...Not a chance! Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
Well, this is a fun poem. But, if the poets are lazy poets like me, the scrubbing itself doesn't sound like that much fun. Very clever to use all those names. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Well, this is a fun poem. But, if the poets are lazy poets like me, the scrubbing itself doesn't sound like that much fun. Very clever to use all those names. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Jeanie Actually, I didn't memtion it but allthe bubbbles were really coming from some scrubbing bubbles and a case of bubbling champagne. Made the job a lot easier. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from S.Yocom
This is cute and fun, Carol. (Thanks for including me in your scrubbing party.) I have only two suggestions regarding printing mistakes. In stanza three the word "grinin'" should be spelled "grinnin.'" and in the last stanza, "it's" should not have an apostrophe. When this word has an apostrophe, it means "it is" or "it has." (I guess I will always be an English teacher.) I enjoyed your poem a lot.
Sally
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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This is cute and fun, Carol. (Thanks for including me in your scrubbing party.) I have only two suggestions regarding printing mistakes. In stanza three the word "grinin'" should be spelled "grinnin.'" and in the last stanza, "it's" should not have an apostrophe. When this word has an apostrophe, it means "it is" or "it has." (I guess I will always be an English teacher.) I enjoyed your poem a lot.
Sally
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Sally
I was English major and I know the rules, but you can see how well I did with that...That's why I need friends like you attending my parties. I fixed them asap and I thnk you for telling this feeble mind to get over the champagne and write correctly. Thanks and smiles to you....:) Carol
Comment from jdrhye
Yep I hear you most times I try to have a positive note at the end of a sad or poem of rustration but it is not always there. Like the ditty that sound like a song a mother and child would sing in order to make doing chores a bit more fun. I also find myself cleaning when feeling anxious or frustrated I could sing this song in my head instead maybe would have same effect!!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Yep I hear you most times I try to have a positive note at the end of a sad or poem of rustration but it is not always there. Like the ditty that sound like a song a mother and child would sing in order to make doing chores a bit more fun. I also find myself cleaning when feeling anxious or frustrated I could sing this song in my head instead maybe would have same effect!!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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jdrhye
Thank you so much for the kind and thoughtful review. I appreciate it very much. Smiles to you... :) Carol
Comment from Arkine
~LOL~ Well this was a lot of fun to read. I'd say you nailed the happy poem on the head...actually, it sounds more like a song but either way it works. Rules are made to be broken anyway (besides, I wouldn't know poetry rules.) Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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~LOL~ Well this was a lot of fun to read. I'd say you nailed the happy poem on the head...actually, it sounds more like a song but either way it works. Rules are made to be broken anyway (besides, I wouldn't know poetry rules.) Great job!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Arkine
It was a song...just some silly lyrics I wrote because everyone said I was writing too much sad stuff. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from jmdg1954
For a quirky poem written on a whim it was good. Comical, rhyming,lengthy and fun is what it was . For that.... a very good job!
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For a quirky poem written on a whim it was good. Comical, rhyming,lengthy and fun is what it was . For that.... a very good job!
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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jmdg Thanks for the kind review. I greatly appreciate your thoughts. Carol