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Comment from amada
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A very well done and said love poem. those old and carrugoused hand tell something special, a long lived love. Beautiful words.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
    Amada I appreciate you reading and commenting on my mpoem. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Carol
Comment from Toller
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I love the picture you chose. You said a lot in very few words with this poem. Nice job and good luck in the contest!

Ashley

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Ashley Thanks for the kind review. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from Freeflyer
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True love. If someone is prepared to give their last breath for their loved one...What can I say? Fifteen words yet so powerful. I shared third place in this competition. I see why I did not score higher. This is truly beautiful.
Freeflyer

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Freeflyer

    Thanks for the wonderful review. Carol
Comment from Sally Carter
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I echo what everyone else has said - a beautiful sentiment expressed in 15 words, and with terrific artwork to supplement it. Good luck in the contest if it has not yet closed.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Midlifecrisis

    Thanks so much for the kind review. I appreciate you wishes and will cross my fingers. I enjoyed writing it. Carol
Comment from dportwood
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Begin Again,

'Take me instead' may be an expression of the greatest love one being can have for another. End of life is so hard to think about at times.
Good luck.

Duane

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Duane This poem reminded me of my parents, 89 yrs old, married 62 yrs, never apart. I think it will be horrendous when they finally part. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from Eternal Muse
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Oh, how awesome! Till death do us part.. Our friend just lost her husband of 46 years, and she is saying all the time how hard it is. The partner becomes your second self, your twin, and separation is incredibly painful. Loved your picture and the image of that age spotted hand (I'm not there yet! - lol). Liked that in the last moment of his life he was thinking of her, and not himself. Impressive poem.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Yeltel

    My parents are 89, married 62 years, never apart...I can't imagine how difficult it will be. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from RADIO
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Your caring heart is in every word
and in these words, in the breath of this love,
I would reach out and hold firmly to faith.
The faith of your chosen name...We will
begin again, we will meet again. Love is eternal.
Radio

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Radio I believe that our loved ones are waiting for us..I have a son and grandson already there. This poem was written with my parents in mind though. They are 89, married 62 yrs and never apart. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from Judian James
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This is indeed a love poem and a wonderful, albeit sad, one at that. You have expressed so well long-lasting, undying love. excellent

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Judian James Thank you so much for your kind response. I greatly appreciate them. Carol
Comment from PoesyPoet
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You're talking about me breaking your heart, Carol? This one me tearing up. What a lovely and touching short work. Powerful and sad. Picture is point on. Good luck in the contest. You deserve to win.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Poesy Poet Thanks for the awesome comments. I wrote this while thinking about my parents. They are 89, married 62 years, never apart. I can't imagine one of them living without the other. Carol
Comment from Amicus
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Strong emotion conveyed so succinctly here, Carol. You create a vivid image that says all that need be said about this man's love for his spouse in this short smooth flowing and highly effective love poem.

Excellent.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2009

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    Amicus

    Thanks for your wonderful review. I appreciate your kind comments. Carol