Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "So The Story Goes...."A book of a mixture of stories
64 total reviews
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
This made me chuckle. Its so true how rumors get started. Form a Labrador to someone in a white wedding dress.
I enjoyed this very much.
John
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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This made me chuckle. Its so true how rumors get started. Form a Labrador to someone in a white wedding dress.
I enjoyed this very much.
John
Comment Written 22-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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Blaidd Drwg...
Thanks for the kind words...We all need a chuckle now and then. It was fun to write. Thanks again - Carol C
Comment from Cairn Destop
You had me wondering about the "crime" when I started to read this story. Then I noticed how each retelling got a bit embellished, just like it did when you played telephone in elementary school. Amazing how things get distorted. No SPAG noted.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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You had me wondering about the "crime" when I started to read this story. Then I noticed how each retelling got a bit embellished, just like it did when you played telephone in elementary school. Amazing how things get distorted. No SPAG noted.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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It was fun to write...Thank you for reading and for your comments Carol C
Comment from Jonesy
What effective use of how things change from person to person when relying events. It's a known fact it happens, and loved the way the author used it within a story.
Great pacing and structure and a highly entertaining read.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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What effective use of how things change from person to person when relying events. It's a known fact it happens, and loved the way the author used it within a story.
Great pacing and structure and a highly entertaining read.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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Jonesy...
Thank you so much for your kind words. This was fun to write. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Thanks again - Carol C
Comment from c_lucas
It is a fact of life, facts can become distorted and a person's world can turn into turmoil. Very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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It is a fact of life, facts can become distorted and a person's world can turn into turmoil. Very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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C Lucas...
Thanks for your kind words. This was fun to write. I appreciate you stopping by to read it. Carol C
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from Belinda
Yes, rumors go a long way. I like your descriptions of how one thing gets into another, making the story more and more scary, while ... The end tells all. I think this is a good entry to the competition. And I'm happy to see that you begin to write again lately.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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Yes, rumors go a long way. I like your descriptions of how one thing gets into another, making the story more and more scary, while ... The end tells all. I think this is a good entry to the competition. And I'm happy to see that you begin to write again lately.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2009
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Belinda...
Thank you for taking the time to read my little story. It was fun to write. Hope to see you soon again. Carol C
Comment from anabelle
Nice rendition of he said/she said, and guess where it ends up? Completely wrong, that's where. I like the way the boy calls all his buddies and says the girl is dead and someone was robbing graves and now they'll have girls all over them, and maybe they can help solve it. Ah! Youth!
Great read. Best of luck in the contest. Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Nice rendition of he said/she said, and guess where it ends up? Completely wrong, that's where. I like the way the boy calls all his buddies and says the girl is dead and someone was robbing graves and now they'll have girls all over them, and maybe they can help solve it. Ah! Youth!
Great read. Best of luck in the contest. Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Thank you so much for your kind and generous words. This was a fun write for me. I'm glad you liked it!
Thanks again Carol C
Comment from rama devi
Excellent!
Amazing how fabrications expand exponentially -people have such vivid imaginations - and so do you, my friend. This is amusing, clever and well written. Good word economy. It did not seem overly descriptive except , perhaps for the word hysterically- 'laughed hysterically'.
the dialog was good, the plot development (LOL) and the overall flow are all without flaw as far as i can see.
I did not see any spags.
Best of luck in the contest.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Excellent!
Amazing how fabrications expand exponentially -people have such vivid imaginations - and so do you, my friend. This is amusing, clever and well written. Good word economy. It did not seem overly descriptive except , perhaps for the word hysterically- 'laughed hysterically'.
the dialog was good, the plot development (LOL) and the overall flow are all without flaw as far as i can see.
I did not see any spags.
Best of luck in the contest.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Thank you for your generous and kind words. They are greatly appreciated. It was fun to write!
Thanks again - Carol C
Comment from Tellis
This is totally hilarious and I agree that is how rumors get started in a small town. LoL I loved this entry and I guess I'll have stiff competition.
Tellis
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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This is totally hilarious and I agree that is how rumors get started in a small town. LoL I loved this entry and I guess I'll have stiff competition.
Tellis
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Thank you for your generous words. I usually am a very descriptive person so this was a definite challenge for me. It was a fun write. I'm sure as usual everyone's will be terrific. Thanks again - Carol C
Comment from maxic59
A very good story. I like how you have used peoples imagination as a base for your story. Well done.
Good luck with the competition
cheers max
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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A very good story. I like how you have used peoples imagination as a base for your story. Well done.
Good luck with the competition
cheers max
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. It is greatly appreciated. Carol C
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh, my! LMAO
You really have described how rumours get started and how they build, step by step. What a peculiar race of people we are. I wonder if other animals do this too? I'm still laughing, not least because the dog got tangled in someone's white sheets!
My own two dogs live here with ten cats. These cats would beat the dogs crapless if either dog even thought about chasing them. However, this doesn't stop the dogs giving chase OUTSIDE the house, if they see a strange cat - but then the cats do too!
I so enjoyed reading this, I read it again, and then called my son for a read too.
Great writing.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Oh, my! LMAO
You really have described how rumours get started and how they build, step by step. What a peculiar race of people we are. I wonder if other animals do this too? I'm still laughing, not least because the dog got tangled in someone's white sheets!
My own two dogs live here with ten cats. These cats would beat the dogs crapless if either dog even thought about chasing them. However, this doesn't stop the dogs giving chase OUTSIDE the house, if they see a strange cat - but then the cats do too!
I so enjoyed reading this, I read it again, and then called my son for a read too.
Great writing.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm wishes
Kat
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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DecrepitOldBag...
Your words are so kind. I truly appreciate for reading 3x.
My cat, Bailey, thinks he's a dog and rolls on the floor with the other four "real" dogs. But if any of them see one through the windows, they go absolutely crazy.
Thanks for reading. I enjoyed the comments. Carol C