CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from adewpearl
born by a fluke or fashioned - a provocative line
I have never had the slightest problem reconciling my utter belief in science with my devout belief in God - so many people do, but quite a few others don't. You convey the problem those who do have with it well and in good clarity poem form. Brooke
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born by a fluke or fashioned - a provocative line
I have never had the slightest problem reconciling my utter belief in science with my devout belief in God - so many people do, but quite a few others don't. You convey the problem those who do have with it well and in good clarity poem form. Brooke
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
I'm not sure whether Christians believe in the big Bang (or evolution)? Not that it's anything to do with your brilliant poem, though maybe it has in the ambiguous and thought-provoking last line? Obviously, that's the question being asked - I fell in eventually. Nice one
Love Ray xx
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Hi, Sue
I'm not sure whether Christians believe in the big Bang (or evolution)? Not that it's anything to do with your brilliant poem, though maybe it has in the ambiguous and thought-provoking last line? Obviously, that's the question being asked - I fell in eventually. Nice one
Love Ray xx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from joan marie
I like the way you gave the reader the option of their belief in how our universe was created. I think that makes this poem universal to all. Great write. joan marie
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I like the way you gave the reader the option of their belief in how our universe was created. I think that makes this poem universal to all. Great write. joan marie
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Way to spark debate, Sue! I always try to compromise and imagine God sort of behind the big bang--keeps it neat in my head. Love the image, the alliteration, your creative take on the starting word. Good one! :)
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Way to spark debate, Sue! I always try to compromise and imagine God sort of behind the big bang--keeps it neat in my head. Love the image, the alliteration, your creative take on the starting word. Good one! :)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from dportwood
The old God vs evolution discussion. Or perhaps the chicken or egg argument. Whatever, I liked your clarity poem, especially this:
"One atom or one God--at odds"
Duane
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The old God vs evolution discussion. Or perhaps the chicken or egg argument. Whatever, I liked your clarity poem, especially this:
"One atom or one God--at odds"
Duane
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from Judian James
Great artwork to accompany your Clarity Pyramid. This is quite excellent Sue. A very intelligent piece with much said within the brevity of the form. Bravo
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Great artwork to accompany your Clarity Pyramid. This is quite excellent Sue. A very intelligent piece with much said within the brevity of the form. Bravo
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from Roisin
A wonderful clarity pyrimid Sue. I find it a very restrictive form, and even more so that you had to use the word 'birth' to start with! You've done a great job in not writing the obvious. Your words are well thought out. I think you'll do well in the contest. Good luck.
Hugs
Roisin
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A wonderful clarity pyrimid Sue. I find it a very restrictive form, and even more so that you had to use the word 'birth' to start with! You've done a great job in not writing the obvious. Your words are well thought out. I think you'll do well in the contest. Good luck.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from rama devi
Exceptional clarity pyramid, Sue. Awesome artwork too. I love the depth of thought in this, especially here:
a universe born
by a fluke or fashioned;
with arrant awe, it's argued
Amusingly alliterative and artistic.
:)
No Nits
Love, rd
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Exceptional clarity pyramid, Sue. Awesome artwork too. I love the depth of thought in this, especially here:
a universe born
by a fluke or fashioned;
with arrant awe, it's argued
Amusingly alliterative and artistic.
:)
No Nits
Love, rd
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a good poem. The few words tell a full story of a controversy that has raged over centuries. The last line is very poignant and weighty. kudos
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This is a good poem. The few words tell a full story of a controversy that has raged over centuries. The last line is very poignant and weighty. kudos
Comment Written 03-Apr-2009
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Sue, a great different take on BIRTH. Yes, it can an emergence of, or start to anything. all rules perfectly followed. Good luck!
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Hi Sue, a great different take on BIRTH. Yes, it can an emergence of, or start to anything. all rules perfectly followed. Good luck!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009