CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Pierced"A collection of poetry
43 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
wounded -left withering - you capture the essence of the artwork perfectly- hope stems the bleeding heart - most excellent considering when I looked at the picture when the contest was announced, I couldn't think of a blasted thing LOL
Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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wounded -left withering - you capture the essence of the artwork perfectly- hope stems the bleeding heart - most excellent considering when I looked at the picture when the contest was announced, I couldn't think of a blasted thing LOL
Brooke
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Brooke, YOU can ALWAYS find words to an artpiece! LOL!! Guess the rose didn't do anything for you? Thanks for your close read and great review. Always, Sue
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yeah, just looking at the rose was not moving me - coupled with your poem - now it moves me! :-D
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Hey Sue! This is a great entry. Your version of the intrepretation is on the mark. The reason I LOVE CP's is because they convey the many ways one word can be expressed and thought of. It depends on the person writing it and their perceptions of that word and shows that everyone is unique in their thinking.
I would either double space the first triplet to match the second one or visa versa, hunny bunny. This isn't the proper format.
Thank you so much for participating!
Love,
Pen
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Hey Sue! This is a great entry. Your version of the intrepretation is on the mark. The reason I LOVE CP's is because they convey the many ways one word can be expressed and thought of. It depends on the person writing it and their perceptions of that word and shows that everyone is unique in their thinking.
I would either double space the first triplet to match the second one or visa versa, hunny bunny. This isn't the proper format.
Thank you so much for participating!
Love,
Pen
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Gotcha! I just patched it up. Yeah, I'd never done one of these before and really enjoyed it! Thanks for your great review and help on getting it lined up properly. With regards, Sue
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - Now I know what a Clarity Poem (I'll probably forget tomorrow.) Very nicely written. You should do well in the contest. I see that you are still leading in the Fourteener Challege. Good luck. Charlie
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Sue - Now I know what a Clarity Poem (I'll probably forget tomorrow.) Very nicely written. You should do well in the contest. I see that you are still leading in the Fourteener Challege. Good luck. Charlie
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Oh! I didn't even know the vote was on. Duh. I'd better get over there and vote. Yeah, you'll probably for the "Clarity" by tomorrow, but I'll remind you again when I write another. :-)) Thanks much for your very kind review. Sue
Comment from QuietMtnSunrise
You really do know how to say so much with so little. That is the mark of a great writer. You have it, you definitely have it. Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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You really do know how to say so much with so little. That is the mark of a great writer. You have it, you definitely have it. Good job.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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QuietMtnSunrise, your words touched me greatly. As, I only started to write in November and have grown so much on this site. Your words are more encouraging than you know. Thank you for such a lovely review and compliment. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
This is such a powerful pyramid, piling on the words to heighten the impact, but succinctly. And, you added the strong element of alliteration and a sense of hope. Bravo!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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This is such a powerful pyramid, piling on the words to heighten the impact, but succinctly. And, you added the strong element of alliteration and a sense of hope. Bravo!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Joan, thanks so much for your lovely compliments and review. Yes, I did want that sense of hope. Thanks for making comment about that! :-)) Sue
Comment from Hitcher
I think you are definitely starting to take off and soar Sue, WOW! I love your chosen words here friend, every single one of them perfectly positioned for maximun overdrive and they create the PERFECT Juxtaposition between artwork and your Clarity pyramid. i just love the penertrating power of this offering friend, don't think I'll have a go at this one, you should clean up. Brlliant, you dazzle! Have a well earned six and I'll look for you come voting.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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I think you are definitely starting to take off and soar Sue, WOW! I love your chosen words here friend, every single one of them perfectly positioned for maximun overdrive and they create the PERFECT Juxtaposition between artwork and your Clarity pyramid. i just love the penertrating power of this offering friend, don't think I'll have a go at this one, you should clean up. Brlliant, you dazzle! Have a well earned six and I'll look for you come voting.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Hitch, my man! I know you don't hand out those beautiful sixers out too hastily. And to receive your highest regard for my work is MORE than an honor! I am so happy you liked it so much. Thank you, thank you! And for your awesome compliments.....I'm now speechless, my friend. You know what it means to me. Your friend, Sue
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I don't hand them out easily, but that was truly awesome, tell me it took you awhile to put it together? That could quite easily be a published piece Sue, Credit to your emerging talent!
Your mate
Hitch
Comment from RapturedHeart
Ooh, I love your quote at the end. Man, that is one of the most stunning picture's I've ever seen. Could mean so many things.
Like that you've chosen 'pierced'. Fits perfectly with this picture. Just leaves me feeling sadly chilled. Well done, and all the best in the contest,
Heather
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Ooh, I love your quote at the end. Man, that is one of the most stunning picture's I've ever seen. Could mean so many things.
Like that you've chosen 'pierced'. Fits perfectly with this picture. Just leaves me feeling sadly chilled. Well done, and all the best in the contest,
Heather
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from jshep
I am so impressed, Sue. This is a very powerfuol poem. As I said to Pen, I was not sure how entrants were going to interpret the art. You outdid yourself with imagery and power. "Pierced, impaled, inflicted." - wow!
'wound left withering'- fantastic. What more can be said of perfection. A fantastic interpreptation and clarityn pyramid. ~Contrats! Joyce
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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I am so impressed, Sue. This is a very powerfuol poem. As I said to Pen, I was not sure how entrants were going to interpret the art. You outdid yourself with imagery and power. "Pierced, impaled, inflicted." - wow!
'wound left withering'- fantastic. What more can be said of perfection. A fantastic interpreptation and clarityn pyramid. ~Contrats! Joyce
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Joyce, I'm the one who's "WOWED" here! Your compliments have me agape! My first clarity poem and this is so encouraging. I am so honored to receive your highest regard for this work. Honored, indeed! Thank you again. It is so much appreciated. With regards, Sue
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Well deserved for great interpretation with such an impact. Smiles, Jxx
Comment from joan marie
Good contest entry. Interesting topic. The topic is writer's choice? They all seem great to read. Good luck in the contest. joan marie
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Good contest entry. Interesting topic. The topic is writer's choice? They all seem great to read. Good luck in the contest. joan marie
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from The Rivaling Mimic
The last line was the gem of the entire piece and I suppose that's the aim of a clarity pyramid? This was well written and I've come to expect nothing less from you. Great work.
The Rivaling Mimic
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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The last line was the gem of the entire piece and I suppose that's the aim of a clarity pyramid? This was well written and I've come to expect nothing less from you. Great work.
The Rivaling Mimic
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Rivaling Mimic, thank you so much for saying that about the last line. As I wrote it, I felt good, but then have had doubts ever since. Ha! YOU know that feeling....don't we all. Well, I do appreciate it. And thank you for your very generous review. Sue