CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Victim to Vagrant"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
AMEN SISTER! I just said the exact same thing in a review for the contest. It's the damned truth.
I say to humankind: Wake up Rip and smell the friggin' coffee, because the baby has shit and it's your damned turn to change it, rock it and take responsibility for the wonderful blessings bestowed upon you. We suck as human beings and then when it's our turn to suffer we wonder why nobody rallies. Can you say KARMA?
Great post!
Pen
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AMEN SISTER! I just said the exact same thing in a review for the contest. It's the damned truth.
I say to humankind: Wake up Rip and smell the friggin' coffee, because the baby has shit and it's your damned turn to change it, rock it and take responsibility for the wonderful blessings bestowed upon you. We suck as human beings and then when it's our turn to suffer we wonder why nobody rallies. Can you say KARMA?
Great post!
Pen
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from Diny
WOW- I really didn't see the prompt for that one- Wish I had... the homeless are near and der to my heart- I volunteer weekly and am currently trying to help one woman who is going for the first time in years move into an apartment- She has nothing no pots and pans dishes and few clothes- but she is so excited, and this is just so appropriate today- Write on-Diny
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WOW- I really didn't see the prompt for that one- Wish I had... the homeless are near and der to my heart- I volunteer weekly and am currently trying to help one woman who is going for the first time in years move into an apartment- She has nothing no pots and pans dishes and few clothes- but she is so excited, and this is just so appropriate today- Write on-Diny
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
I feel for homeless people. If I didn't have my family, I would be in the same position. You've captured the homeless emotion well. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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I feel for homeless people. If I didn't have my family, I would be in the same position. You've captured the homeless emotion well. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
Comment from The Rivaling Mimic
Why couldn't you enter? Was it something to do with the rules? This would have been such a worthy contest entry had you managed to jump aboard. I have noticed no room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Why couldn't you enter? Was it something to do with the rules? This would have been such a worthy contest entry had you managed to jump aboard. I have noticed no room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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One can only enter two "prompts" per week, (I think that's the restriction). But thanks so much for that encouragement that it "coulda been a contender" Ha! And thank you for your very kind review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from old gray mare
Well written. To true for to many. We see it on the news everyday. I think you have great writing talent. This has strong images and is fluid to read.
O.G.Mare
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Well written. To true for to many. We see it on the news everyday. I think you have great writing talent. This has strong images and is fluid to read.
O.G.Mare
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Yes, far too many who need so much. Thank you for your most kind compliments and review. With regards, Sue
Comment from MJMuraco
Your poem is very emotional and strong. It flowed nicely with good rhythm. I know that some homeless people are truly just victims of a bad thing that happened in their life. Especially, the woman you portrayed, may have been married to a guy who is a criminal and now she is on the street. I always feel sympathy for homeless people. I don't think that many of them choose this life.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Your poem is very emotional and strong. It flowed nicely with good rhythm. I know that some homeless people are truly just victims of a bad thing that happened in their life. Especially, the woman you portrayed, may have been married to a guy who is a criminal and now she is on the street. I always feel sympathy for homeless people. I don't think that many of them choose this life.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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There is a growing trend of people who have become drug addicts which has forced them onto the streets. That is very unfortunate. But, there are also those who, at one time in there lives, lived productive and meaningful lives. Bad for all of them, though. Mental illness seems to also be a huge contributor. As the laws changed back in the 70's to close most mental hospitals. Now, these people are left to their own devices and no medications. Certainly an array of people on the streets. Thank you very much for your very kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Janet65
Nice poem, and I hope it's not a true story. Good writing.
I found nothing I would change. It flows well, and sends a message. Thanks for sharing.
Janet
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Nice poem, and I hope it's not a true story. Good writing.
I found nothing I would change. It flows well, and sends a message. Thanks for sharing.
Janet
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Not true for me, but for many others, of course. Thanks so much for your very kind compliments and review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Roisin
What a great poem, Sue. It's so true. We pass by these people every day, not knowing anything about them and why they've ended up like this. If we bothered to find out, we might be surprised by what we'd hear. I've written a couple myself about vagrants because it's something that I often think about. I love your last line. We should all have more compassion and think; 'there but for the grace of God go I'. I love it.
Warm regards.
Roisin
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What a great poem, Sue. It's so true. We pass by these people every day, not knowing anything about them and why they've ended up like this. If we bothered to find out, we might be surprised by what we'd hear. I've written a couple myself about vagrants because it's something that I often think about. I love your last line. We should all have more compassion and think; 'there but for the grace of God go I'. I love it.
Warm regards.
Roisin
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
Comment from Jazh
This is a great poem, Sue, and tells a vivid story. You've created the images clearly, and the message you leave is that this situation is common with your final, effective line. Cheers. :)
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This is a great poem, Sue, and tells a vivid story. You've created the images clearly, and the message you leave is that this situation is common with your final, effective line. Cheers. :)
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2009