CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from becky7777
oh it does sound like you need out but at lest your mind is getting out and enjoying itself. great poem. and know what you mean about the freezing weather but we only have about 6 inches of snow. love the read
Becky
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oh it does sound like you need out but at lest your mind is getting out and enjoying itself. great poem. and know what you mean about the freezing weather but we only have about 6 inches of snow. love the read
Becky
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was a beautiful poem and I feel like I visited Paris myself? I have never been there though I would love that above all things. I know so much about the city, and it is the most romantic place in the world! Thank you for the very helpful author's notes and your lovely tour of this City of Light.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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This was a beautiful poem and I feel like I visited Paris myself? I have never been there though I would love that above all things. I know so much about the city, and it is the most romantic place in the world! Thank you for the very helpful author's notes and your lovely tour of this City of Light.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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yeltel, so glad you took the trip with me! It's beauty is in it's architecture, arts, lifestyle, food, atmosphere and the list goes on. And steeped in history! Thank you for your great review and lovely compliments! :-)) Sue
Comment from MercyWrites
Your poem makes me wishful that I could see that beautiful place. Like you I'm sitting here trying not to freeze. I love the French language you add; it gives the poem that touch of France. I can say that even though I can read a word of of it.
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Your poem makes me wishful that I could see that beautiful place. Like you I'm sitting here trying not to freeze. I love the French language you add; it gives the poem that touch of France. I can say that even though I can read a word of of it.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
Comment from sara-beth
You know what, I've never been there, but I have a photo of the Champs Elysees in my dining room, and I treasure a little statue of the Eiffel Tower that my grandfather gave me after he returned from a trip when I was very small. Ah, we should all be able to go wherever we want WHEN we want.....oh wait, we can, in our poetry! Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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You know what, I've never been there, but I have a photo of the Champs Elysees in my dining room, and I treasure a little statue of the Eiffel Tower that my grandfather gave me after he returned from a trip when I was very small. Ah, we should all be able to go wherever we want WHEN we want.....oh wait, we can, in our poetry! Great job.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Very cool review! HA! A photo of the Champs Elysees! Very nice. And such a sweet thing that you treasure your little Eiffel Tower. Thanks for sharing that. Yes, so I went to Paris yesterday. Lifted my spirits! Thank you for your very kind review and lovely words. With regards, Sue
Comment from Winslow
Dear Kid,
Ah, Paris the place that women love, the arts and amor so vividly shown. A glass of wine on the Champ Elysees, what better romantic spot in the world?
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Dear Kid,
Ah, Paris the place that women love, the arts and amor so vividly shown. A glass of wine on the Champ Elysees, what better romantic spot in the world?
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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YES! THAT Paris! Ha!! Thanks very much for your review. Always appreciated...Sue
Comment from adewpearl
I only spent three days there decades ago, but you did evoke lovely memories - this is a lovely poem of rhyming quatrains with good specific details that portray the allure of this city most effectively
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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I only spent three days there decades ago, but you did evoke lovely memories - this is a lovely poem of rhyming quatrains with good specific details that portray the allure of this city most effectively
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Wow, the Eagles came SO close! Card fans have gone ballistic. Sorry your team didn't make it. :-(( - So glad this poem did bring some memories, Brooke. Thanks very much for your review and lovely compliments. Sue
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life goes on :-)
Comment from Firefly54
A beautiful poem that is certainly an exciting trip through some of the most beautiful sights of Paris. Thanks to for the author's not that made it all so much more interesting!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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A beautiful poem that is certainly an exciting trip through some of the most beautiful sights of Paris. Thanks to for the author's not that made it all so much more interesting!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Firefly, So glad you enjoyed this piece and "saw" the sights! And am glad the notes were of help. Thank you for your great review and compliments! Sue
Comment from Joan E.
I was transported by your walk-about. You brought back vivid memories of Paris and her landmarks. (I wonder about "au revoir," which actually means to re-see; maybe "a dieu" would be better regarding "cares".) Thanks for sharing...it sounds like you're yearning for a travel.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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I was transported by your walk-about. You brought back vivid memories of Paris and her landmarks. (I wonder about "au revoir," which actually means to re-see; maybe "a dieu" would be better regarding "cares".) Thanks for sharing...it sounds like you're yearning for a travel.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Joan E., So glad you could re-walk Paris and its landmarks! HA! Well "au revoir" literally means "goodbye", while "adieu" means farewell. I felt that "adieu" may be too formal, as in bidding a person farewell. And au revoir, just a plain ole goodbye. Hmmmm....guess I'll have to re-think that one. But, thanks very much for that. Always love good input! I AM yearning for travel. Mainly to the beach! This weather here is for penguins and polar bears only. Thank you for your great review and comments. Will definitely take your suggestion on board. With regards, Sue
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Let me know what you decide.
We're still having our strange heat wave--I am not trying to rub it in, nor am I complaining--just observing!
Enjoy Inauguration Day.
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Okay, here goes. I think we are both correct. Hmmm.....
Literal translation is always a problem. Au revoir can mean "ta ta" or "until then" or "goodbye". Depends on so many different scenarios.
Adieu is farewell. In that particular sentence, it would have to read, "l'adieu" to all my cares. It probably is more fitting, I agree. However, since it's subjective, and I like the sound of "au revoir" better for this piece, I think I'll leave it.
But, thank you VERY much for your input. Always open to anything in your reviews. How fluent are you in French. Do you speak it often?
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I used to teach French, but I support your decision as the author to stay true to your concept of what you are trying to communicate and the sound of the language choice that goes with it. See you soon--
Joan
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I'm arguing with a French teacher???!!! LOL!!! That's too funny!
I called my daughter, who speaks fluently, to see what she thought. When I told her of your suggestion, she went, "Oh, yes, that's correct". So, here I am going against two people who know their french! HA!
I think the REAL reason I want to stay with au revoir is because MOST people are familiar with the word and it would touch them in a more familiar way.
I really do appreciate your help! I'm jealous. I wish I had learned French in my youth. THE most beautiful language in the world!
Please don't think me obstinate. I always welcome suggestions!
Au revoir, bon soir! (my best attempt) tee hee!
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As I said, you are not being obstinate, but rather staying true to your convictions.
A demain-
Joan
Comment from mermaids
I know what you mean, I am also travelling in my mind this winter. Great poem about Paris, I have never been but have studied French for years, someday maybe I'll get there. enjoyable piece of writing that definately describes a feeling of being in Paris.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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I know what you mean, I am also travelling in my mind this winter. Great poem about Paris, I have never been but have studied French for years, someday maybe I'll get there. enjoyable piece of writing that definately describes a feeling of being in Paris.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Oh! Studied French! I love it so much. My daughter is fluent, having taken it for 4 years in high school and now 4 years in college. She gets a bit rusty if she's not speaking it regularly. Hope you keep yours polished! Thank you for your very kind review and lovely comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Judian James
Memories are such wonderful treasures, are they not. I too travel in my mind whenever I'm restless. Paris is lovely and a nice departure from the freezing norm of your existence at the moment I'm sure. well done
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Memories are such wonderful treasures, are they not. I too travel in my mind whenever I'm restless. Paris is lovely and a nice departure from the freezing norm of your existence at the moment I'm sure. well done
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Hi Jude! Yes, I know you travel in your mind. Many of your poems reflect these beautiful journeys. Yes, memories are treasures. I do take a lot of photos, but the best snapshots are in my mind and heart. Thank you for your very kind review and comments. With regards, Sue