Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Wow! Let's swim in the stars. What a magical imagery this presents to your reviewing audience. The artwork aligned perfectly with your incredible talent.
God bless,
Steve

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Steve, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

reply by Neonewman on 06-Feb-2025

My pleasure, Debi.

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

The picture is lovely, and it fits your dodoitsu poem well. Your final line supports the reflection of the stars in the ocean. Your syllable counts are perfect for the constraints of the form. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Carol, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

reply by Carol Clark2 on 06-Feb-2025

I enjoyed the humor of that line. Well done.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Oh yes, I've been in the Aussie outback, sleeping outside, a long way from the nearest town, it's absolutely divine, you can see forever, God in His own backyard, beautifully written Debi, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Thanks so very much, Roy. The last line was supposed to meet the criteria of the prompt with a little humor. I appreciate the kind words. Much love to you an yours, Roy. Love, Debi

reply by royowen on 06-Feb-2025

Well done

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh, how I want warmer weather to come so I can at least drive to the ocean for a day trip. It's my "peaceful place" always -- but you've captured the romantic moment skillfully in this beautiful Dodoitsu. I'd like to be transported to THAT twilight kissed beach immediately!

Karenina

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Yeah, K, while you are waiting for that beach, we are looking at 15 inches of snow on Saturday. I would also love going to that beach and have someone hold me in their arms.

Haha, that is what Gypsy's fantasy prompts do to me.
Remember when I wrote about the hearts in my driveway and I thought Glen did them. So, it turned out to be a car turning around in my driveway. Haha.

So LOL, instead, it will snow and snow and we will get snowed in together and our romance will be Super Bowl this weekend. Haha.

Thanks for the kind words for this romantic beach story!! Love, Debi

reply by karenina on 06-Feb-2025

Who are you cheering on? We're getting snow today and the weekend.

Go Eagles!

;)

reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Philadelphia yay

reply by karenina on 06-Feb-2025

I knew I could count on you to be rational.

(Chuckling here)

reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Shoot, I would cheer Philadelphia against anyone, except the Vikings. However, we never have to worry about that. Haha! We have what they call a post season curse here.

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This is very beautiful. What a romantic place to be with someone you love, have you ever been to the ocean? I went to Florida some years ago and was overwhelmed by it's beauty. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Sharon, so many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

Short and sweet but very touching. I could feel myself lying about with someone I love, looking up at the stars and their arms wrapped around me.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Mia, so many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Very romantic poem, Debi. I couldn't tell this was a dodoitsu because I never heard that before. Thanks for defining it.

I also liked how you defined the star reflection:

'at the beauty that sparkles in the ocean'

I really enjoyed this poem,
Thanks for sharing.

John

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi John, so many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear
brother/friend. Lotsa Love, Debi

Comment from Teri7

Exceptional

Debi, This is a very beautiful and very romantic dodoitsu poem you have penned for the Japanese poetry contest. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Teri, many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. Thanks so much for the beautiful six stars, my lovely friend. It was such a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was very romantic and dreamy. I loved how it became the alternate universe, so to speak. Swimming in the stars and gazing at the ocean. Beautifully written. Gretchen

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Gretchen, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

I love the romance in this lovely poem and most especially the image created in that last line. Swimming in the stars would indeed be something romantic and wonderful. thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend.
Love, Debi