Parts are Parts
Parts of my Body are...Part Fiction~Part Non-Fiction50 total reviews
Comment from estory
What I liked about this was that you had a sense of humor about replacing all these body parts, and dealing with the pain and all that. I thought there was some great word play in it, you had a nice hip hop rhythm to it, and it kind of made replacing knees and hips feel like a run of the mill thing. estory
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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What I liked about this was that you had a sense of humor about replacing all these body parts, and dealing with the pain and all that. I thought there was some great word play in it, you had a nice hip hop rhythm to it, and it kind of made replacing knees and hips feel like a run of the mill thing. estory
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, estory, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I like this poem about body parts, and what they all mean. I like the image chosen of a mummified figure reading a book about body parts. it is in a way a meta poem of sorts.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I like this poem about body parts, and what they all mean. I like the image chosen of a mummified figure reading a book about body parts. it is in a way a meta poem of sorts.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Jake, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a neat poem. You made it funny by making puns of some of the body parts. I really got a chuckle out of that last one about the eyes being last to go because the Die late or dilate.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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This is a neat poem. You made it funny by making puns of some of the body parts. I really got a chuckle out of that last one about the eyes being last to go because the Die late or dilate.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Beth, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
Comment from Neonewman
I love the comedy you have shared in this brilliant little piece.
One of my favorite-The parts inside my body that you can't see with your eyes
Some have been taken out and now there's room to organ-ize
Love play on words.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I love the comedy you have shared in this brilliant little piece.
One of my favorite-The parts inside my body that you can't see with your eyes
Some have been taken out and now there's room to organ-ize
Love play on words.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Beth, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
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My pleasure. Lol, I'm Steve. I'm cracking up over here as I've done the same recently.
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LOL, when you find out who I am and see the last poem before this you will know why I filled in the wrong area. I just can't tell you yet. Haha.
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Oh Lord, I'm not great at waiting lol.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Sorry I don't have a six. This was funny. The last line was the perfect pun. It's amazing how quickly the decline starts. I remember snickering about people having trouble going up or down a curb. I'm definitely understanding it now. Great sense of humor. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Sorry I don't have a six. This was funny. The last line was the perfect pun. It's amazing how quickly the decline starts. I remember snickering about people having trouble going up or down a curb. I'm definitely understanding it now. Great sense of humor. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Gretchen, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
Comment from SimianSavant
Excellent author. Your only issue is in line four, which has the right number of syllables, but falls awkwardly on the accents. It would be better to have an extra syllable so that your last accent falls on the first syllable of MIRROR:
The positive in that is I can't see NOTHIN in the mirror
(There are plenty of other solutions available, but that seems like a simple straightforward one)
I really enjoyed this.
🦍
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Excellent author. Your only issue is in line four, which has the right number of syllables, but falls awkwardly on the accents. It would be better to have an extra syllable so that your last accent falls on the first syllable of MIRROR:
The positive in that is I can't see NOTHIN in the mirror
(There are plenty of other solutions available, but that seems like a simple straightforward one)
I really enjoyed this.
🦍
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Well Simian, I am so very honored by your six stars today. You have given me advice before and it has always been very much appreciated, as it is today. Here in our state we pronounce some things a little different than some, so I don't think of mirror as a two syllable word. Yet I know it is. It just slipped by me this time. So I will definitely change it and make it sound right for everyone but this Scandinavian American. LOL. Thank you so very much and you will know who I am by the end of the day. (SMILE)
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Yes, please do let me know your identity after the voting is concluded!
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I just wanted to let you know that you have a special place in my thank you, friendship poem. I picked only my good friends and I consider you one, for sure.
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I just wanted to let you know that you have a special place in my thank you, friendship poem. I picked only my good friends and I consider you one, for sure.
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I found the reference : )
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I hope you took it as a compliment as I figured you would see the humor.
I think a lot of you and would feel bad if you took it any other way.
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I liked it! And you packed a lot in there. It just has some small issues with meter -- I can leave a detailed review on it if you like. How much longer is it promoted for?
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Two days left on promotion.
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Two days left on promotion.
Comment from Shanbreen
Well written. Reminds me a bit of myself. Thank God it is humoristic and only parts are true. :
Just one clarification. Do you think the comma in the line:
"I should have taken them to church, instead and have them graced"
should have been after "instead" instead of where it is?
Loved the play on words in "The pupils will be last to go, cause they will both di-late". Best for the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Well written. Reminds me a bit of myself. Thank God it is humoristic and only parts are true. :
Just one clarification. Do you think the comma in the line:
"I should have taken them to church, instead and have them graced"
should have been after "instead" instead of where it is?
Loved the play on words in "The pupils will be last to go, cause they will both di-late". Best for the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Shanbreen, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
Thank you so much for the wonderful six stars too.
Comment from TPAC
Super shout. I thought, I was kicked in the ass. I admire your strength, facing these challenges against you. Love that attitude: I will, despite. All these statements given in my opinion, pertaining this particular read.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Super shout. I thought, I was kicked in the ass. I admire your strength, facing these challenges against you. Love that attitude: I will, despite. All these statements given in my opinion, pertaining this particular read.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, TPAC, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
Thanks so much for the generous six stars.
Comment from Sally Law
Ah, I love this, mystery poetess, and the humor line by line. I especially love:
I know when its my time to go, these body parts will wait
The pupils will be last to go, cause they will both di-late.
A hilarious poem in rhyming verse. A happy tonic for my day!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the vote.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Ah, I love this, mystery poetess, and the humor line by line. I especially love:
I know when its my time to go, these body parts will wait
The pupils will be last to go, cause they will both di-late.
A hilarious poem in rhyming verse. A happy tonic for my day!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the vote.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Sally, thanks so much for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This is a witty poem about how a body seems to fall apart as we age.
I like the positive outlook on failing eyesight. Not being able to see yourself in the mirror. Now we have to figure out which parts are fiction and which ones are true. i like the put at the end.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Hi
This is a witty poem about how a body seems to fall apart as we age.
I like the positive outlook on failing eyesight. Not being able to see yourself in the mirror. Now we have to figure out which parts are fiction and which ones are true. i like the put at the end.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much, Joan, for the awesome comments for my body parts poem. It was a fun one to do and I sure appreciate your kindness.
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You are most kindly welcome.
Joan.
P S I just published a book that is available now on Amazon, titled The Interloper (and other stories in prose and poetry)