His Wife
A conflicted man and his sick wife35 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad. I'm sure it happens much more than we know about. You told the story well in rhyme.
How are you doing, Pam? Roy said you had surgery. Hope you are recovering well.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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That's so sad. I'm sure it happens much more than we know about. You told the story well in rhyme.
How are you doing, Pam? Roy said you had surgery. Hope you are recovering well.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I am One big mass of pain. I can only hope that not all of it is permanent. I had back surgery and it's possible that the surgeon screwed up the nerve on the left side of my back and it's also possible he screwed it up one on the right side of my back.
But, from a life or death standpoint I'm doing fine. There was a risk of death from the surgery, but I've gotten over that hurdle.
Thank you for your comments and wonderful review
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That's a scary thought. Okay, will pray to the Real Healer. Oh LORD, even if the doctor's surgery was imperfect, You are Perfect and know every cell, every nerve, every bone. Please align Pam's back into perfect balance and heal her. Let the pain lessen each day as You heal her. In Jesus' Name, Amen.
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Amen. Thank you so much. Already my left leg is getting less pain than it was.
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🎶💖🙏So glad to hear! Thank the Lord! 😊🎵
Comment from jenintorre
Your story is very tragic. The husband's behavior is not uncommon. I think 'men are from Mars' etc. is quite apt in many cases.
I can't help wondering why you haven't reviewed any of my recent poems. Are you getting notifications?
Take care. Jen.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Your story is very tragic. The husband's behavior is not uncommon. I think 'men are from Mars' etc. is quite apt in many cases.
I can't help wondering why you haven't reviewed any of my recent poems. Are you getting notifications?
Take care. Jen.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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I had surgery on August 22 and I've only been able to respond to comments and reviews because I can just still use the microphone for those.
This poem was already written before the surgery, but it took me a week to post it. I'll go look at yours now. It's just harder because I have to type. I can't do everything by microphone. Thank you for this wonderful review
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I am so sorry Pam and wish you a speedy recovery. Love Jen. X
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Powerful and intense weaving a narrative of betrayal and regret! Progression from lustful thoughts to the realization of loss was very emotional. Raw honesty and the shift from earlier d feelings to the guilt at the end really stands out. 'Surprised he feels the urge to scream' (been there)
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Powerful and intense weaving a narrative of betrayal and regret! Progression from lustful thoughts to the realization of loss was very emotional. Raw honesty and the shift from earlier d feelings to the guilt at the end really stands out. 'Surprised he feels the urge to scream' (been there)
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Aiona
Wow.... that was a good poem. I love poems that rhyme and have a regular meter that could possibly be put to song. And this one fits the bill. It's predominantly iambic meter, with a simple but effective rhyme scheme of aabb. I usually prefer poems that make me giggle, and...... um.... this one didn't. But it did move me deeply!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Wow.... that was a good poem. I love poems that rhyme and have a regular meter that could possibly be put to song. And this one fits the bill. It's predominantly iambic meter, with a simple but effective rhyme scheme of aabb. I usually prefer poems that make me giggle, and...... um.... this one didn't. But it did move me deeply!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your lovely poignant comments and for the extra star. I appreciate it very much.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, Pam, you've captured the tale of a selfish man so well that it made me start to cry when he realized she chose to die instead of face life without his love he is a selfish man and now he lives alone facing his demise.
This is well documented as if it were true. Whether it is or not it doesn't matter since the message of this poem speaks loud and clear do not cheat on your wife whether it is in your body or your mind.
Jesse
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Wow, Pam, you've captured the tale of a selfish man so well that it made me start to cry when he realized she chose to die instead of face life without his love he is a selfish man and now he lives alone facing his demise.
This is well documented as if it were true. Whether it is or not it doesn't matter since the message of this poem speaks loud and clear do not cheat on your wife whether it is in your body or your mind.
Jesse
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Not to mention that she was dying. I have a little bit of sympathy for him because a lot of people withdraw from a loved one when knowing they are going to die. The same way that people who are about to commit suicide push loved ones away because they think it will hurt their loved ones less if their loved ones don't care about them so much
Similarly, this man pulled away from his wife because he thought it would hurt him less when she died. And he was wrong but too late.
Thanks my friend for this thoughtful poignant review
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You offer a lot to ponder, my friend.
I didn't see this from all the different angles you mentioned.
People often do not realize they are being selfish.
You gave an extreme example of what it is like to be selfish when someone else is dying.
Thanks for this thoughtful reply.
Jesse
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by the way, I will be leaving fan store in less than a month and I'll probably be away for years. For whatever money I have left over after I post my last post I will donate some sent pumps to you and a couple of other people.
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Oh, I'll miss you and your provocative poetry. Thanks in advance for the member cent pumps.
Hurry back, we need you and your views on refugees and other oppressed people.
Jesse