Refugees Left to Die
Heart breaking of refugees who died fleeing war and death39 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This photograph and the poem which accompanies it are jolting and would and should stop people to at least investigate what we are doing and could do to prevent such useless death.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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This photograph and the poem which accompanies it are jolting and would and should stop people to at least investigate what we are doing and could do to prevent such useless death.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments and your excellent rating
Comment from Jacob1395
I think of we ever had to flee our country for whatever reason that we would hope to be welcomed by other countries as well. Life is very fragile, we have no idea what is around the corner. This is a well written piece Pam and I could feel the emotion in your writing. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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I think of we ever had to flee our country for whatever reason that we would hope to be welcomed by other countries as well. Life is very fragile, we have no idea what is around the corner. This is a well written piece Pam and I could feel the emotion in your writing. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments and for your excellent rating.
Comment from BOO ghost
BOO is reading...really. This true story isn't surprising. For instance, the war in Israel. Both sides target civilians. Oh. And America dropping atomic bombs on two Japanese cities killing thousands. Man repeats wars, theirs no mercy or empathy. It's in mankind's DNA to kill!
For him, his freedom's out of reach;
his body washed up on the beach.
We still reject these refugees;
ignoring all their desp'rate pleas
Favorite stanza. Above,
Thanks for sharing!
BOO!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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BOO is reading...really. This true story isn't surprising. For instance, the war in Israel. Both sides target civilians. Oh. And America dropping atomic bombs on two Japanese cities killing thousands. Man repeats wars, theirs no mercy or empathy. It's in mankind's DNA to kill!
For him, his freedom's out of reach;
his body washed up on the beach.
We still reject these refugees;
ignoring all their desp'rate pleas
Favorite stanza. Above,
Thanks for sharing!
BOO!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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BOO. THANK YOU FOR YOUR THOUGHTFUL REVIEW YOUR RETROSPECTIVE WORDS AND YOUR EXCELLENT RATING
Comment from Katiemae1977
This is so very, very distressing I'm having a hard time wrapping my head around it. I'm not much of a news watcher because it bothers me too much. I don't mean to turn a blind eye. I simply can't handle it
Your poem is perfectly rhymed and metered and of course quite poignant
Well done Pamusart!
Katherine
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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This is so very, very distressing I'm having a hard time wrapping my head around it. I'm not much of a news watcher because it bothers me too much. I don't mean to turn a blind eye. I simply can't handle it
Your poem is perfectly rhymed and metered and of course quite poignant
Well done Pamusart!
Katherine
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful review and reviewing this, even though distresses you and your excellent rating
Comment from Aussie
It is hard to fathom man's inhumanity to man. The photo hits hard, thinking it was a stunt; but no, the little one is with the Lord now. We should be ashamed. Hitler tried to wipe the Jews out. He failed because they are a strong and resilient race. They are God's chosen people whom Moses led out of Egypt. I believe they are His chosen people because they put God first in their lives. K xx
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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It is hard to fathom man's inhumanity to man. The photo hits hard, thinking it was a stunt; but no, the little one is with the Lord now. We should be ashamed. Hitler tried to wipe the Jews out. He failed because they are a strong and resilient race. They are God's chosen people whom Moses led out of Egypt. I believe they are His chosen people because they put God first in their lives. K xx
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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I agree about the Jews They are strong and resilient people. But they are also always persecuted. They're only 11 million Jews left in the world Hitler wiped out a third of them more than a third of them.
Now, Trumpty Dumpty is trying to wipe out Hispanics at the border
Thank you for your heartfelt lovely review and for the shiny stars. Both are greatly appreciated.
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He won't win. Arrogant bastard. He thinks money will get him there. Fancy setting up his paparazzi in Arlington Cemetery sacred to the war dead.
Comment from visionary1234
Bravo for you, Pam, for selecting such a difficult subject to write a poem about! Just a couple of comments. For me, the really simple meter and rhyme scheme, though, tend to come across as 'trite' and a bit cliched. The iambics trip off the tongue and it's not a 'tripping' subject - it's at odds with it, in fact. But that's just my opinion. I had the same feeling when I first read Keats' "La Dame Sans Merci', too! So please don't take it personally. The cliched expressions 'full of cheer' 'can't be bothered with the fuss' etc add to the triteness. You obviously have a good ear for rhythm - but I'd go deeper into your talents to find your UNIQUE voice, rather than the first convenient phrasing that comes to mind. Find a voice that no one else would ever use. Find your uniqueness as a poet, ok? You said you welcomed all feedback. I'm giving you my honest feedback.
Best wishes
Sharyn
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Bravo for you, Pam, for selecting such a difficult subject to write a poem about! Just a couple of comments. For me, the really simple meter and rhyme scheme, though, tend to come across as 'trite' and a bit cliched. The iambics trip off the tongue and it's not a 'tripping' subject - it's at odds with it, in fact. But that's just my opinion. I had the same feeling when I first read Keats' "La Dame Sans Merci', too! So please don't take it personally. The cliched expressions 'full of cheer' 'can't be bothered with the fuss' etc add to the triteness. You obviously have a good ear for rhythm - but I'd go deeper into your talents to find your UNIQUE voice, rather than the first convenient phrasing that comes to mind. Find a voice that no one else would ever use. Find your uniqueness as a poet, ok? You said you welcomed all feedback. I'm giving you my honest feedback.
Best wishes
Sharyn
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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do you mind telling me which clichés are in this poem?
And what was your problem with the meter. I always write this way tetrameter. I'm not going to change now
Thank you for your detailed review and excellent rating
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Yes, Pam, I have been looking forward to this revealing poem. You tell the sad truth about the refugees of the past and how we repeat the indignities of their plight.
Your verses are tight and easy to read and understand. The rhymes are chosen well and they add so much to the feel of this piece. And I cried too when I first saw the picture of the little boy washed up on the shore.
You say it plainly with no punches held back.
I'm glad you are revealing the truth about how we treat the refugees and how we repeat the process over and over again.
It's an abomination!
Jesse
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes, Pam, I have been looking forward to this revealing poem. You tell the sad truth about the refugees of the past and how we repeat the indignities of their plight.
Your verses are tight and easy to read and understand. The rhymes are chosen well and they add so much to the feel of this piece. And I cried too when I first saw the picture of the little boy washed up on the shore.
You say it plainly with no punches held back.
I'm glad you are revealing the truth about how we treat the refugees and how we repeat the process over and over again.
It's an abomination!
Jesse
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Yes it is an abomination. I can't agree more. I'm crying just going back to that poem and thinking about it
Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem and provide your excellent feedback. And thank you for the shiny stars
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You're welcome, my friend.
Good luck with the surgery.
Comment from royowen
It's such a pity, you're right, the Statue of Liberty has a poem written by Emma Lazarus that says Give me your tired, your poor, your huddled masses yearning to breathe free. and yet we turn them away, I know God would never appreciate it, we do the same here, although many have been accepted, beautifully written dear girl, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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It's such a pity, you're right, the Statue of Liberty has a poem written by Emma Lazarus that says Give me your tired, your poor, your huddled masses yearning to breathe free. and yet we turn them away, I know God would never appreciate it, we do the same here, although many have been accepted, beautifully written dear girl, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your poignant thoughts you're great review and your excellent rating
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Well done
Comment from jenintorre
This is a wonderful poem about a heartbreaking situation. Your picture certainly illustrates what is happening all over the world today. There seems to be no answer. Take care. Jen,
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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This is a wonderful poem about a heartbreaking situation. Your picture certainly illustrates what is happening all over the world today. There seems to be no answer. Take care. Jen,
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2024
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Thank you for your appointment yet lovely comments, and for the shiny stars