Fishing With Bread
Two Worlds Coming Together33 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed the story very much. It has a very profound message and you have written it well. I wish you a blessed day and I am glad that you got to experience this trip and the fishing with the old gentleman. Patricia .
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed the story very much. It has a very profound message and you have written it well. I wish you a blessed day and I am glad that you got to experience this trip and the fishing with the old gentleman. Patricia .
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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I haven't promoted this yet because it is entered into a contest. But thank you for your review. When someone tells me that the writing is good, I can breathe easier. Again, thanks. =Bill
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a fine story of strangers sharing their experience of life. However, I was puzzled as I reached the end and still didn't understand how the bread stayed attached to the fish-hook. kay
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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This is a fine story of strangers sharing their experience of life. However, I was puzzled as I reached the end and still didn't understand how the bread stayed attached to the fish-hook. kay
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Ha! Now you found the mystery to the story. i am notorious in my stories to leave something out I know the reader is expecting. It's what I call "Chapter Two." Thank you for your wonderful review. -Bill
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I would suggest breaking your paragraphs with a space for easier reading. I can see you probably did it in your manuscript, but on FanStory you need to physically add the space. I enjoyed this story. Yes, we are part of God's family. Good luck with the contest.
Early the next morning, before sunrise, (the following morning, has to deal with definition)
"If you have only bread for bait, how do you keep it from falling off the hooks when they hit the water?
He smiled and said, "Ah! I show you!" He went over to his old beat up car and pulled out a large piece of very stale, very hard loaf of bread. He looked at me and instructed, "You bite into bread and put on hook! No?" (each person speaking gets their own paragraph)
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I would suggest breaking your paragraphs with a space for easier reading. I can see you probably did it in your manuscript, but on FanStory you need to physically add the space. I enjoyed this story. Yes, we are part of God's family. Good luck with the contest.
Early the next morning, before sunrise, (the following morning, has to deal with definition)
"If you have only bread for bait, how do you keep it from falling off the hooks when they hit the water?
He smiled and said, "Ah! I show you!" He went over to his old beat up car and pulled out a large piece of very stale, very hard loaf of bread. He looked at me and instructed, "You bite into bread and put on hook! No?" (each person speaking gets their own paragraph)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Excellent suggestions and i am grateful that you would take such care with your review. Give me 15 minutes and these will addressed. -Bill