Comment from Brandon Clark

Excellent

Truly a beautiful Haiku you have here!

Being this is a contest entry for you...I counted the syllables in a second reading, verified them with an online syllable counter, and on Dictionary.com as well. You nailed it! So rest assured the syllable count is for sure good.

Overall presentation of image, font style, font size, and background color vs. font color is perfect as well as the formatting of the lines...may just want to remove what looks like an extra space between the first and second line.

Apologize for my moderate to severe OCD...lol...but being a contest entry I just want to help give you the best shot at the coveted 1st place and truly believe you have a significant contender with this one!!

P.S. Will definitely be checking out your Amazon page as I do have Kindle Unlimited and will post a review on there as well after I've read your work...with your permission, of course.

Best of luck to you in the contest!
Brandon

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Hi, Brandon. Thanks for the time you took examining my wee haiku and for the kind words. I'm glad the online syllable counters agreed - that's not always certain! The extra space is actually deliberate in an attempt to make that first satori line stand apart from the others.

You are most welcome to check out my two books on Amazon - I believe I get the grand sum of something like half a cent for every page you read and right now that sum may be a life-saver!

Have a great weekend.

Steve

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

Lovely haiku. These little poems are more difficult to write than one would think, but you've done very well.
The alliteration is a very nice touch.
Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

heather, many thanks for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed my wee poem.

Steve

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

These moths can be a nuisance as they flutter as they are drawn in by the electric light, they become mesmerised and sometimes get too close and burn themselves, a fine Haiku Steve, love Dolly x x x

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 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Hey! Don't go knocking over my moth - he's central to the poem!

Thanks for the review and yes, I do know how much of a nuisance moths can be.

Steve