Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

It is the way things start. When the old slips away the hunt begins for the new. I see nothing wrong with this short story. I hope it does well in the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thank you, Ben. I appreciate your stopping.
John

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Although this is fiction, this does sometimes happen when we make a connection with another person other than our spouse. If it is all about friendship then it remains innocent and when it crosses the line, all hell breaks loose and there could be tears and tantrums. I enjoyed this lighthearted loving connection here for the contest, a great post, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thanks, Dolly, for reading this short contest story.
John

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

You should do well in this challenge. I thought, at first, it was to be a fantasy of two kinds in fourth grade, but ooh-la-la it ended in a tryst, that may have een nice for the pair but not their significant others.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thanks, Tom. I appreciate your thoughts and well wishes.
John

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

This is a poignant story! the way you have written it makes the reader yearn that there could be more of it .Though it is a tryst i can not find fault with it .I am on their side...

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thank you, Sanku. I?m glad you enjoyed this.
John

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I know this is fiction, but, it is not uncommon. Many people are married to the wrong person, and it's such a shame. A life wasted. It's good your characters get to meet every week. This is an excellent contest entry, John, and I wish you the very best of luck! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thank you, Sandra for reading and those well wishes.
John

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

This is a lovely story of a special friendship that has turned to a love too special to share with others.

Edit -The relationship was to (too) meaningful
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thank you for the correction!
I appreciate you resting my post and sharing.
John

Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

That is dreadfully romantic! Wow, very sweet and very uh shall we say riske.
Sometimes that all it is between two people is the riske factor. But In the case of your poem of course is something entirely. Different this? I understood about it and it's definitely had no issue with the development of your poem in my mind it was very well written.
Nor do I find any problems aesthetically with your poem as you have a great picture there. I find no issues with spelling grammar or sentence structure either and this to be a very good submission. Thank you very much hope you have a great evening!

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Lea. A great review. Thank you so much for your thoughts.
John

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Oh that is a fine story, of a forbidden but strong love. Their secret meetings were at the same time tender and playful, but nevertheless meaningful. Doubtless the relationship will not last or else they will bd found out. Such trysts do not continue indefinitely. Best wishes gif the contest.
Wendy

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023

Thank you, Wendy for a great review and well wishes in the contest.
John