Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
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Comment from Dawn Munro
"I stumbled on those other walks
too much "ill will, way too much gin
selfish and headstrong, never wrong." -- my favorite stanza. Haven't we all! "I made a choice to walk this way..."
It takes courage to admit the things we have done in life of which we are not proud. Yet at some point, to save ourselves we have to!
Wonderful poem, my friend.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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"I stumbled on those other walks
too much "ill will, way too much gin
selfish and headstrong, never wrong." -- my favorite stanza. Haven't we all! "I made a choice to walk this way..."
It takes courage to admit the things we have done in life of which we are not proud. Yet at some point, to save ourselves we have to!
Wonderful poem, my friend.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Dawn thanks 🙏🙏 much like a dangling participle, the quote mark does not belong so I removed this.
Comment from Janet Foor
A excellent message in "Blind Faith". Perfect artwork and presentation for this poem. Often, we are unsure of where to go or what to do but our choices make a profound determination of where that will lead us and if God is our guide, we will walk where he wants us to be.
Good work.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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A excellent message in "Blind Faith". Perfect artwork and presentation for this poem. Often, we are unsure of where to go or what to do but our choices make a profound determination of where that will lead us and if God is our guide, we will walk where he wants us to be.
Good work.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Janet, thanks 🙏🙏
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I like your poem. Changing paths by choice because of faith is the very best we can do, and although we don't know where our path will take us on earth, we have a sure promise of heaven at the end!
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I like your poem. Changing paths by choice because of faith is the very best we can do, and although we don't know where our path will take us on earth, we have a sure promise of heaven at the end!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Verna, thank you🙏
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your club poem, JLR. Your choice of art was
a great pairing with your well thought out words. I liked
the story the narrator told in your poem. Your lines
read smoothly with great details. I could imagine
everything as I read. Your gave readers much to think
about.
I believe your second line needed to end with
'to walk this way.'
I made a choice to walk this way
tuning out on what others say
[ I tuned out some to walk this way]
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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I enjoyed your club poem, JLR. Your choice of art was
a great pairing with your well thought out words. I liked
the story the narrator told in your poem. Your lines
read smoothly with great details. I could imagine
everything as I read. Your gave readers much to think
about.
I believe your second line needed to end with
'to walk this way.'
I made a choice to walk this way
tuning out on what others say
[ I tuned out some to walk this way]
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Jan.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, JLR,
I appreciated the opportunity to read the sentiments in your faith-based poem.
Heartfelt and sincere.
There are, however, two nits that need editing attention:
1. I made a choice to walk this way
tuning out on what others say
because I had tested thier (their) path
unsure to where.
2. I stumbled on those other walks
too much "ill will, way to (too) much gin
selfish and headstrong, never wrong.
Unsure to where.
Thank you for sharing,
diane
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Good morning, JLR,
I appreciated the opportunity to read the sentiments in your faith-based poem.
Heartfelt and sincere.
There are, however, two nits that need editing attention:
1. I made a choice to walk this way
tuning out on what others say
because I had tested thier (their) path
unsure to where.
2. I stumbled on those other walks
too much "ill will, way to (too) much gin
selfish and headstrong, never wrong.
Unsure to where.
Thank you for sharing,
diane
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Oh, gee whiz... Thank you Diane!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nice poem that you have presented for the potlatch club. It is interesting to me how that you used as your last line of each The words unsure to where. Your presentation is very good. Patricia.
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This is a very nice poem that you have presented for the potlatch club. It is interesting to me how that you used as your last line of each The words unsure to where. Your presentation is very good. Patricia.
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you
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You?re welcome.
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a well-written poem. The first line grab me. The word was choice. I post a prose story this week, (not serious like your work, it is satire) and I used something I heard in Alex Murdaugh's murder trail this week. It applies better to your poem than my satire.
Attorney John Meadors, closed his summation to the jury by asking them to exercise their greatest power. He referenced a book by J. Martin Kohe, Your Greatest Power. Of course the power is choice.
You have executed your greatest power. Very well done. Terry.
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This is a well-written poem. The first line grab me. The word was choice. I post a prose story this week, (not serious like your work, it is satire) and I used something I heard in Alex Murdaugh's murder trail this week. It applies better to your poem than my satire.
Attorney John Meadors, closed his summation to the jury by asking them to exercise their greatest power. He referenced a book by J. Martin Kohe, Your Greatest Power. Of course the power is choice.
You have executed your greatest power. Very well done. Terry.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Terry, your comments were quite enlightening, thank you so much for the validation.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and poem to go with it.
-A good topic, effective imagery, rhyme,
and repeating phrase.
-I like the idea of choosing the path
that is the best one for you since
you had "tested their path" and
weren't sure about it.
-This is just an observation, but
I wonder if the middle verse and
last one should be reversed since
the last one relates to the first one,
and the middle one is the desired outcome.
-Either way it is a good poem.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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-Good artwork and poem to go with it.
-A good topic, effective imagery, rhyme,
and repeating phrase.
-I like the idea of choosing the path
that is the best one for you since
you had "tested their path" and
weren't sure about it.
-This is just an observation, but
I wonder if the middle verse and
last one should be reversed since
the last one relates to the first one,
and the middle one is the desired outcome.
-Either way it is a good poem.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi Pam, I will reread it thank you for your observation.
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You are welcome, Jim.
Comment from Bill Schott
This baccresieza, Blind Faith, has the proper formatting and seemsto show a change of direction from the World to the Way. God calls and people answer it.
Found this:
...because I had tested (their) path...
...too much (ill) will way (too) much gin...
Happy day.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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This baccresieza, Blind Faith, has the proper formatting and seemsto show a change of direction from the World to the Way. God calls and people answer it.
Found this:
...because I had tested (their) path...
...too much (ill) will way (too) much gin...
Happy day.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thanks Bill!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
"To believe in God is impossible; but to not believe is absurd." Voltaire
"The greatest need in the world today is faith in God and courage to do his will." David O. McKay
"If a man prays, he believes that someone, somewhere at some times is listening." Me
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"To believe in God is impossible; but to not believe is absurd." Voltaire
"The greatest need in the world today is faith in God and courage to do his will." David O. McKay
"If a man prays, he believes that someone, somewhere at some times is listening." Me
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
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Spot on, sir Tom!