Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Breathe"Musing of an old man
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-You wrote a good cinquain with a good topic.
-Effective imagery creates a peaceful mood and scene.
-You also show your appreciation for nature and
how it can soothe our souls.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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-Nice image and presentation.
-You wrote a good cinquain with a good topic.
-Effective imagery creates a peaceful mood and scene.
-You also show your appreciation for nature and
how it can soothe our souls.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Pam as always, I send you thanks in abundance.
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You. are always welcome, Jim
Comment from Terry Broxson
I am most assuredly not any kind of expert on poetry, and I had to read up on what a Cinquain poem is all about. Now informed, I think you have written a wonderful poem. Your wonderful words have created a picture in my mind. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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I am most assuredly not any kind of expert on poetry, and I had to read up on what a Cinquain poem is all about. Now informed, I think you have written a wonderful poem. Your wonderful words have created a picture in my mind. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Terry, as always, I send you thanks in abundance.
Comment from royowen
Yep I think you're absolutely correct Jim, the thought of purity comes to mind when one thinks of creation, except fo man man repeatedly interfering with the divine, God is still keeping it from crashing, beautifully written cinquain Jim, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Yep I think you're absolutely correct Jim, the thought of purity comes to mind when one thinks of creation, except fo man man repeatedly interfering with the divine, God is still keeping it from crashing, beautifully written cinquain Jim, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Roy, as always, I send you thanks in abundance. Jim
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Welcome Jim
Comment from Laurie Holding
I love this one! The Cinquain is a beautiful, simple, yet challenging format, and you've made it your own with this piece. Your artwork is perfect. The only thing I'd throw in there, and you're the poet so this is just a side note, is that your poem is a full sentence, and I'd be tempted to treat it that way with a period and maybe even a comma after 'times' and 'majesty. Again, just an opinion. Great work, and I wish you luck in the contest. (But not too much luck; I might just be throwing my hat in that ring myself, lol!)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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I love this one! The Cinquain is a beautiful, simple, yet challenging format, and you've made it your own with this piece. Your artwork is perfect. The only thing I'd throw in there, and you're the poet so this is just a side note, is that your poem is a full sentence, and I'd be tempted to treat it that way with a period and maybe even a comma after 'times' and 'majesty. Again, just an opinion. Great work, and I wish you luck in the contest. (But not too much luck; I might just be throwing my hat in that ring myself, lol!)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Laurie, I look forward to reading your submission, good luck!
Comment from karenina
There is something about getting off the beaten path that cleanses our senses and opens our hearts and minds to new possibilities... A very vell constructed cinquain that has me pining for spring!
Karenina
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There is something about getting off the beaten path that cleanses our senses and opens our hearts and minds to new possibilities... A very vell constructed cinquain that has me pining for spring!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Karenia, as always, I send you thanks in abundance.
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One of these days I'll have a constructive suggestion for you...but thus far, I just sit back and smile!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, JLR!
Your poem and photograph is a playbook right outside my window!
Your prescription for soothing souls is "right up my alley!"
I would cease to exist if I couldn't breathe in Mother Nature's beauty every day...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Hello, JLR!
Your poem and photograph is a playbook right outside my window!
Your prescription for soothing souls is "right up my alley!"
I would cease to exist if I couldn't breathe in Mother Nature's beauty every day...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Diane, with smiles, as always, I send you thanks in abundance.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A simple but effective poem which works very well with the lovely illustration. The overall presentation supports the theme that nothing can rival natural beauty!
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A simple but effective poem which works very well with the lovely illustration. The overall presentation supports the theme that nothing can rival natural beauty!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Sarah, thank you.
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Welcome!
Comment from Faith Williams
Reading your poem makes me feel like I am in its accompanying picture, breathing in the majestic beauty all around me. Mother Nature does indeed soothe souls. Thanks so much for sharing, and best wishes in the contest.
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Reading your poem makes me feel like I am in its accompanying picture, breathing in the majestic beauty all around me. Mother Nature does indeed soothe souls. Thanks so much for sharing, and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
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Faith, thank you.
Comment from Sugarray77
Aaahhhh, I can feel the fresh air and soothing presence of being outside and enjoying a lovely day. That is what your well-written CinQuain makes me think and feel. Well done, Jim, and good luck.
Melissa
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Aaahhhh, I can feel the fresh air and soothing presence of being outside and enjoying a lovely day. That is what your well-written CinQuain makes me think and feel. Well done, Jim, and good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Mellisa, as always, I send you thanks in abundance.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
We seem to spend time counting to determine the "value" of something, yet we take our countless breaths for granted. You remind us, with this poem, that each breath brings us into the presence of the Divine, where are souls find peace. This is a beautiful contest entry.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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We seem to spend time counting to determine the "value" of something, yet we take our countless breaths for granted. You remind us, with this poem, that each breath brings us into the presence of the Divine, where are souls find peace. This is a beautiful contest entry.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Ginda, I appreciate your thoughtful words.