Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I can see Otis sittin on the dock of the bay, or the marcels singing Blue Moon on a terrace watching a Lunar moonrise spark Biscayne Bay, Miami, Fla..................................................

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022

Thank you Tom... I think. I hope you liked it! :)

Melissa

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like the meter applied to this poem, it makes it delightfully attractive to read, the lyrical quality of the words gives it a light hearted bounce that would pair well with a musical melody, this is beautifully written my friend, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022

Thanks so much Roy. I like this meter too! :)

Melissa

reply by royowen on 28-Dec-2022

Well done

Comment from Karyn2

Excellent

This is a really wonderful poem in its feel, flow and theme. I think I'll have to take a wonder to the classes on meter. This is great! I just adored all the magical starry galactic imagery you used and personification, transporting the reader to a far away almost fantasy like place. So creative! I don't have any 6's left but this is fabulous!

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022

Oh Karyn... you have made my day. I am so glad you like it!

Melissa

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow, a stunning poem and I'm thinking it could be the winner! You've really mastered the amphibrachic meter and crafted this whimsical celebration of the moonlight. The line that stood out for me was "and tickle shy Venus while I dance with Mars."

My only suggestion would be to use a softer font as this one is so loud and forceful and your poem is more romantically playful.

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 Comment Written 28-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022

Thank you sweet Helen for your lovely words. I played around with the other fonts after I read this, and I think I will change it slightly. I have gotten used to the italicized comic sans and can't seem to part with it. LOL. Hugs!

Melissa

reply by lyenochka on 28-Dec-2022

I like your new font change! I always try to remember the background color since Gypsy told me about the default to Gray. The gray here could go with the Moonlight theme. But another lighter color might help make the font pop a bit more. Again, this is from visually challenged me! So do whatever works for you!💖

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

I love any poems about the moon and moonbeams. There is a feel of fantasy in your vivid use of words to describe the night and moonbeams."And tickle shy Venus while I dance with Mars" is a line that takes the reader to another place.

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022

Thank you so very much Mermaids! I am so glad you like it.

Melissa