Japan's biggest mistake
Remembering Pearl Harbor35 total reviews
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A well-written poem. The flow is good. The rhymes are unforced. The narrative stays on point. The language is simple and declarative. The picture fits with the poem well.
Suggestion:
On that Sunday 2,3335 souls would be lost.
You have a typo in the number. Either too many digits or the comma in the wrong spot.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
  |
A well-written poem. The flow is good. The rhymes are unforced. The narrative stays on point. The language is simple and declarative. The picture fits with the poem well.
Suggestion:
On that Sunday 2,3335 souls would be lost.
You have a typo in the number. Either too many digits or the comma in the wrong spot.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
-
Good catch. Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
-
You are welcome.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I flew into Hawaii on December 7, 1988, and my thought was about all the lives lost in the name of war. I had a friend who was a little girl during the bombing. She remembers the terrifying noise from those bombs and seeing the huge craters in the streets, where some bombs went array. You did a great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
|
I flew into Hawaii on December 7, 1988, and my thought was about all the lives lost in the name of war. I had a friend who was a little girl during the bombing. She remembers the terrifying noise from those bombs and seeing the huge craters in the streets, where some bombs went array. You did a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
-
Thank you very much Shirley. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from jmdg1954
I've thoroughly enjoyed reading the posts for this contest. Yours is one of my top choices. Said profoundly, vividly and to the point.
Ironic, I think each post accounted for different total of deceased.
Best of luck, John
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
|
I've thoroughly enjoyed reading the posts for this contest. Yours is one of my top choices. Said profoundly, vividly and to the point.
Ironic, I think each post accounted for different total of deceased.
Best of luck, John
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
-
Thank you very much John. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from royowen
I guess in war some mistakes can be made, such an audacious attack by the Japanese, the German nation and the Japanese are/were warrior nations, but they both picked on countries that were two big for them, bullies tend to do that. Beautifully written Earl, blessings Roy
Typo : (2,3335) 2,335?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
|
I guess in war some mistakes can be made, such an audacious attack by the Japanese, the German nation and the Japanese are/were warrior nations, but they both picked on countries that were two big for them, bullies tend to do that. Beautifully written Earl, blessings Roy
Typo : (2,3335) 2,335?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
-
Good Catch Roy.Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
-
Most welcome Earl.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this tribute writing prompt to the Greatest Generation. Yes, they understood what it's like to be an American. Not the generation we have today who are aggrieved about everything. I enjoyed reading.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
|
Thank you for sharing this tribute writing prompt to the Greatest Generation. Yes, they understood what it's like to be an American. Not the generation we have today who are aggrieved about everything. I enjoyed reading.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2022
-
Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.