Santa's New Christmas Plan
Santa goes modern.37 total reviews
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Terry Twinklestar, this story was great, I had so much fun, a six star I must rate.
Being the big kid I am, I truly adore it. This one I am glad, I did not ignore it.
I enjoyed it so much, I didn't want it to end. I'm happy that Santa, has a new trend.
Awesome that each reindeer had a body double, animal activists could give Santa some trouble
With this new plan, fewer times he will stop, makes sense to use Amazon, my best place to shop
How awesome in Texas, he needs a space ship, or else there'd be kids he might have to skip
This makes much more sense, than the old way, air weight restrictions, could impound his sleigh
I can just see Tim Allen, I mean Santa Clause, having to follow his own North Pole laws
So techie to fill his bag up so quick, but then we all know that this guy is St Nick
I'm done reviewing, must dash away now, and this story's so fun I must rate it a Wow!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Terry Twinklestar, this story was great, I had so much fun, a six star I must rate.
Being the big kid I am, I truly adore it. This one I am glad, I did not ignore it.
I enjoyed it so much, I didn't want it to end. I'm happy that Santa, has a new trend.
Awesome that each reindeer had a body double, animal activists could give Santa some trouble
With this new plan, fewer times he will stop, makes sense to use Amazon, my best place to shop
How awesome in Texas, he needs a space ship, or else there'd be kids he might have to skip
This makes much more sense, than the old way, air weight restrictions, could impound his sleigh
I can just see Tim Allen, I mean Santa Clause, having to follow his own North Pole laws
So techie to fill his bag up so quick, but then we all know that this guy is St Nick
I'm done reviewing, must dash away now, and this story's so fun I must rate it a Wow!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Debi, thank you for the six stars, and for your very fun review. I am delighted you enjoyed the story. Terry.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Excellent story. Terrific concept. Very innovative.
Originality should be rewarded!
Good luck in the contest and best wishes to you and yours.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Excellent story. Terrific concept. Very innovative.
Originality should be rewarded!
Good luck in the contest and best wishes to you and yours.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Wayne, thank you for reading and the kind review. Terry.
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
There's a contest winner if ever I've seen one. A fabulous and funny story for Xmas. It has me wondering if Santa really exists. (Of course he does, children). I like the way you brought wormholes in. Santas's trip needs a bit of space and time weirdness to get all his deliveries in.
I found one teeny-weeny error:
"..wanted one Christmas out of multi-colored..." the word 'for' is missing before Christmas unless I am misunderstanding.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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There's a contest winner if ever I've seen one. A fabulous and funny story for Xmas. It has me wondering if Santa really exists. (Of course he does, children). I like the way you brought wormholes in. Santas's trip needs a bit of space and time weirdness to get all his deliveries in.
I found one teeny-weeny error:
"..wanted one Christmas out of multi-colored..." the word 'for' is missing before Christmas unless I am misunderstanding.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Malcom, thank you for the six stars! I am glad you enjoyed the story. I will take a look at your suggested edit. I know I struggled with that part in the writing. Thanks, Terry.
Comment from Soledadpaz
I remember Big Chief tablets. I loved them.
Nothing like efficiency, especially at Christmas. Santa has the right idea for production and distribution. Even Tiny Tim is happy!
Great read!
Sol
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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I remember Big Chief tablets. I loved them.
Nothing like efficiency, especially at Christmas. Santa has the right idea for production and distribution. Even Tiny Tim is happy!
Great read!
Sol
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Sol, thank you for the review. Terry.
Comment from Wendy G
Great fun. Just one small problem, and a quick solution found. I am glad Santa had no problems re Australia. He seems to manage every year even though most of us in the northern areas don't even have chimneys. The reindeer are probably really worn out though, by the time they get here, but kangaroos with their pouches would make good substitutes as they are very strong and very fast. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Great fun. Just one small problem, and a quick solution found. I am glad Santa had no problems re Australia. He seems to manage every year even though most of us in the northern areas don't even have chimneys. The reindeer are probably really worn out though, by the time they get here, but kangaroos with their pouches would make good substitutes as they are very strong and very fast. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Wendy, thank you for reading. Maybe you should do a story with Kangaroos, that would be very fun! Go for it. Terry.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A very up-to-date and tech-savvy Santa.
The story is funny and fun. The language is warm and engaging. The images are clear. The narrative stays on point. The inclusion of Tiny Tim at the end is a nice surprise twist.
Thanks for a good read.
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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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A very up-to-date and tech-savvy Santa.
The story is funny and fun. The language is warm and engaging. The images are clear. The narrative stays on point. The inclusion of Tiny Tim at the end is a nice surprise twist.
Thanks for a good read.
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the very nice review! Terry.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! This is inventive and magical Terry and I loved it so much that I shall read it to my Grandchildren and they will believe every word of it. Your imagination ran wild here and I just loved the overall at the North pole and the improvements now that Santa has Reindeer stations! How wonderful, a magical story, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Wow! This is inventive and magical Terry and I loved it so much that I shall read it to my Grandchildren and they will believe every word of it. Your imagination ran wild here and I just loved the overall at the North pole and the improvements now that Santa has Reindeer stations! How wonderful, a magical story, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2022
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Dolly, LOL, thank you for the fun review! Terry.