The Return
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Comment from Theodore McDowell
What a trooper, still writing in the midst of a horrible Covid experience. You truly are a writer through and through and must find inherent joy in the writing life. Well done. Keep resting and get well.
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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What a trooper, still writing in the midst of a horrible Covid experience. You truly are a writer through and through and must find inherent joy in the writing life. Well done. Keep resting and get well.
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Theodore, for this. I know, I'm addicted to writing, but at least it takes my mind off Covid. Thank you, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Sandra. wow what a great story many twists and turns and well written
I have at last caught up the chapters and enjoyed them all so forgive me for not rating them all (they would all get a six from me anyway)
My interest in your story while reading is such that I don 't look for spags
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Hi Sandra. wow what a great story many twists and turns and well written
I have at last caught up the chapters and enjoyed them all so forgive me for not rating them all (they would all get a six from me anyway)
My interest in your story while reading is such that I don 't look for spags
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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aw, thank you, Chris, what a lovely thing to say, and there is nothing to forgive! I'm so pleased you do enjoy my writing, it's given me a huge boost. And thank you for that extra gold star! Now I'm smiling. Love and hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra
Comment from Pantygynt
By this time any disbelief on the part of your readers will be suitably suspended so I think the self elevating poke will be understood all round.
An excellent episode. I have just a coup-le of thought for your Covid-befuddled brain:
'Good evening, Smith...' Is he using the more usual spelling of the solicitor's name as a put-down or is it an error on your part? I am not sure which. We find out later but I think we should be prepared perhaps:
'The atmosphere cooled to somewhere below freezing. Roger Crankston-Smythe was already regretting his decision to come. The solicitor leapt to his feet and held out his hand, withdrawing it moments later when he realised it was being snubbed, as Brandon deliberately mis-pronounced his name, "Good evening, Smith. Now, what is so important that it couldn't wait until morning? I don't have much time to spare, so make it quick."
Ignorant bastard! Roger ignored Lord Brandon's deliberate insult; it was just another of the unpleasant man's uncouth traits.'
'Okay, jokes over....' Needs an apostrophe - joke's (joke is over).
'There (is) [are] no such thing[s] as ghosts!'
'... and wants her father[']s good name restored.' >> Possessive apostrophe needed.'
Get well soon! Hasn't Bessie got a suitable potion for you?
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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By this time any disbelief on the part of your readers will be suitably suspended so I think the self elevating poke will be understood all round.
An excellent episode. I have just a coup-le of thought for your Covid-befuddled brain:
'Good evening, Smith...' Is he using the more usual spelling of the solicitor's name as a put-down or is it an error on your part? I am not sure which. We find out later but I think we should be prepared perhaps:
'The atmosphere cooled to somewhere below freezing. Roger Crankston-Smythe was already regretting his decision to come. The solicitor leapt to his feet and held out his hand, withdrawing it moments later when he realised it was being snubbed, as Brandon deliberately mis-pronounced his name, "Good evening, Smith. Now, what is so important that it couldn't wait until morning? I don't have much time to spare, so make it quick."
Ignorant bastard! Roger ignored Lord Brandon's deliberate insult; it was just another of the unpleasant man's uncouth traits.'
'Okay, jokes over....' Needs an apostrophe - joke's (joke is over).
'There (is) [are] no such thing[s] as ghosts!'
'... and wants her father[']s good name restored.' >> Possessive apostrophe needed.'
Get well soon! Hasn't Bessie got a suitable potion for you?
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for these edits, Jim, I've made all the corrections, and taken up your suggestions. I asked Bessie, but no, she suggested I ask Gwendolyn!!! Lol.
Sending you a big hug for the golden star, with these edits, you were quite within my laws to give me a five and a half!! Lol. Hope to chat tomorrow of Tuesday. :)) Sandra xxx
What a pile up! I'm glad he wasn't hurt, but how he escaped without losing his life, amazed me!
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It was indeed and what a wonderful race afterwards. I think you will have been satisfied with the outcome. Glad you were well enough to enjoy it.
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Yes, I was coughing a lot, but it was worth it. I knew it would be a good one, and it really was. I think Hamilton's car is on the mend, and from now on the racing will be amazing to watch. xxx
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And it is Austria next week. I sincerely hope you will be feeling better by then.
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I'll make sure of it!! xx
Comment from tfawcus
Another fine chapter of entertaining dialogue between Bessie and Margot. The threads of the story are coming together nicely. Most enjoyable. Sorry to hear you've not been well.
A few nits, as you suspected...
'She said she had written proof of what we've done, and wants her father(')s good name restored.'
I don't know what Meg will think, I mean, they weren't close by a long shot! (Two sentences, perhaps?)
It also makes me wonder if the contents of this letter is (are) the underlying reason my mother has behaved the way she has.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Another fine chapter of entertaining dialogue between Bessie and Margot. The threads of the story are coming together nicely. Most enjoyable. Sorry to hear you've not been well.
A few nits, as you suspected...
'She said she had written proof of what we've done, and wants her father(')s good name restored.'
I don't know what Meg will think, I mean, they weren't close by a long shot! (Two sentences, perhaps?)
It also makes me wonder if the contents of this letter is (are) the underlying reason my mother has behaved the way she has.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I'm so grateful for this, Tony. My head just wasn't up to doing that edit. I've made the corrections. I don't think I'll be doing much writing for a day or so.
Thank you so much for the lovely review, and the golden star, I really appreciate them both. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
What a lovely ending tease! I don't know how Margot is going to fair when she returns to her own time (assuming she does) Now she knows how it feels to have a soulmate and wonderful lover, life is going to be very empty without him!
Another intriguing, beautifully written chapter, and I can't wait to see what Miles thinks of the contents of Bessie's parcel.
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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What a lovely ending tease! I don't know how Margot is going to fair when she returns to her own time (assuming she does) Now she knows how it feels to have a soulmate and wonderful lover, life is going to be very empty without him!
Another intriguing, beautifully written chapter, and I can't wait to see what Miles thinks of the contents of Bessie's parcel.
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Alexis, for reading this chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed it. You're right about how she would feel when she goes back to her own timeline. But Meg must be allowed to live her life, if they are able to save it. Thank you so much for the sixth lovely star, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I hope you are better very soon, Sandra. Thoughts and prayers are with you.
-You did an excellent job with the chapter, and I was surprised to see it so early!
-I like the progression from the visit by Smythe and his attempt to explain the visit of Mistress Crawley and the ghost of his father. You did a good job describing Lord Brandon, too.
-Bessie's reaction and her actions are priceless. I think she is only getting started!!
-A good discussion between Bessie and Margot, and quick thinking by Bessie to keep Miles from leaving.
-The plot thickens, as they say!!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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-I hope you are better very soon, Sandra. Thoughts and prayers are with you.
-You did an excellent job with the chapter, and I was surprised to see it so early!
-I like the progression from the visit by Smythe and his attempt to explain the visit of Mistress Crawley and the ghost of his father. You did a good job describing Lord Brandon, too.
-Bessie's reaction and her actions are priceless. I think she is only getting started!!
-A good discussion between Bessie and Margot, and quick thinking by Bessie to keep Miles from leaving.
-The plot thickens, as they say!!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Pam, for this lovely review. I wrote this part on Monday, I think I must have had a premonition! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I was nervous posting. And a big thank you for the lovely sixth star. That has put a smile on my face. Love and hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. I am glad it brought smiles to you. You are in your element with your ghost characters. Who knows what havoc they will wreak next!!!