Minnie and the Masons
A farm job.38 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Your great story, told with a nice amount of panache, have proven to be very entertaining. I could read them all the day long. You seem to have descended from a hard working determined family from your mom's side at least. It also appears that we have a lot in common.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Your great story, told with a nice amount of panache, have proven to be very entertaining. I could read them all the day long. You seem to have descended from a hard working determined family from your mom's side at least. It also appears that we have a lot in common.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Sir, there?s more to the story I think. Terry
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No doubt, and I am anxiously waiting to learn all of the details, gory or not.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is such a great story and well told. I did have to (pause) in a few spots I hope you don't mind if I mention them.
"She left their homes at twenty-one to seek HER fortune"> and then you go on to mention Fortune as a person. I figured it out, but it did stop me.
"Pulled by two horses">maybe a paragraph change, here? "Right from the start she loved the girls> Without the paragraph change it sounds like you're talking about the horses> maybe, Add Minnie's name? Minnie loved the girls." I only mentioned them to you because both stopped me from reading. That stupid stuff said, lol. You have a strong story here to cherish through your days and beyond. Well done, Sir Terry.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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This is such a great story and well told. I did have to (pause) in a few spots I hope you don't mind if I mention them.
"She left their homes at twenty-one to seek HER fortune"> and then you go on to mention Fortune as a person. I figured it out, but it did stop me.
"Pulled by two horses">maybe a paragraph change, here? "Right from the start she loved the girls> Without the paragraph change it sounds like you're talking about the horses> maybe, Add Minnie's name? Minnie loved the girls." I only mentioned them to you because both stopped me from reading. That stupid stuff said, lol. You have a strong story here to cherish through your days and beyond. Well done, Sir Terry.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I have to laugh about the horses and girls, and you are absolutely right! Thank you for the good input! Terry.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed reading this story because there was enough detail included that I could easily visualize the action. Minnie was resourceful and determined to make a decent life for her and her son, as evidenced by her demands prior to going to Oklahoma. This story is well written with a great final sentence.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed reading this story because there was enough detail included that I could easily visualize the action. Minnie was resourceful and determined to make a decent life for her and her son, as evidenced by her demands prior to going to Oklahoma. This story is well written with a great final sentence.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you for reading and your kind review, Terry.
Comment from Annmuma
This story is well done, but I like your writing much better when I "feel' you in the writing. I think you have accomplished your goal of approaching the story from a reporter or observer's viewpoint and the meat of the story comes through loud and clear. I just like it better when I feel the characters more. In fact, my favorite line in this story is: "I SAID IS THERE A MASON IN THE BUILDING?" because I heard Minnie's frustration and could see her standing there with her child and her belongings and on the verge of tears -- translated into yelling. ( I would add a comma after 'said')
Thanks, Terry, for sharing this story. It reveals more about who you are and why.
ann
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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This story is well done, but I like your writing much better when I "feel' you in the writing. I think you have accomplished your goal of approaching the story from a reporter or observer's viewpoint and the meat of the story comes through loud and clear. I just like it better when I feel the characters more. In fact, my favorite line in this story is: "I SAID IS THERE A MASON IN THE BUILDING?" because I heard Minnie's frustration and could see her standing there with her child and her belongings and on the verge of tears -- translated into yelling. ( I would add a comma after 'said')
Thanks, Terry, for sharing this story. It reveals more about who you are and why.
ann
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thanks for the input, as I told you it was a little different, but I liked the way it came out. Her shouting for a Mason was what the whole story was about. Thanks, Terry.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story with us. I got a giggle from it. Minnie was quite an interesting woman, and you are a good storyteller. The two fit together very nicely.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you for sharing this story with us. I got a giggle from it. Minnie was quite an interesting woman, and you are a good storyteller. The two fit together very nicely.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank You, very kind of you. Terry.
Comment from royowen
What an absolutely brilliant story, I have never heard that before, it says more about you than you'll ever know, and I'm so glad I got to read it Terry, what a woman she was, high principles, and you've probably inherited them. Beautifully written, well done. Blessings Roy, PS it's a wonder she didn't take the young girls with her.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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What an absolutely brilliant story, I have never heard that before, it says more about you than you'll ever know, and I'm so glad I got to read it Terry, what a woman she was, high principles, and you've probably inherited them. Beautifully written, well done. Blessings Roy, PS it's a wonder she didn't take the young girls with her.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you.
Roy, she told me this story about a year before she died. Terry.
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Wow, what a woman
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is a great story. You should enter it in one of the contests and it would do very well. like this story and found it to be an enjoyable read. The dialogue is great and carries the story forward in a nice manner.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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This is a great story. You should enter it in one of the contests and it would do very well. like this story and found it to be an enjoyable read. The dialogue is great and carries the story forward in a nice manner.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much, I do appreciate your kindness. Terry.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Wow, what an interesting story, Terry. You told it well. I could see everything as I read. I wondered how it would end and couldn't stop reading. This should've been a contest entry--true story or something. You have a great true tale for your family forever. You depicted the surroundings, the characters, and the atmosphere well. Your granny and father were strong individuals.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Wow, what an interesting story, Terry. You told it well. I could see everything as I read. I wondered how it would end and couldn't stop reading. This should've been a contest entry--true story or something. You have a great true tale for your family forever. You depicted the surroundings, the characters, and the atmosphere well. Your granny and father were strong individuals.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Jan, thank you for reading there may be more to come. Terry.