Gertie and the Laundromat
Doing the laundry, meeting a friend41 total reviews
Comment from Annette R.
Such a moving story. Loved the picture. Without any spelling, typos nor grammatical errors it is hard to offer any constructive suggestions. Making the font bigger would make it easier to read. You might consider changing Camels and instead of which. Also, pay straight home instead of pay home straight. It is engaging and well written. Nothing like having your own washing machine. And dryer.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Such a moving story. Loved the picture. Without any spelling, typos nor grammatical errors it is hard to offer any constructive suggestions. Making the font bigger would make it easier to read. You might consider changing Camels and instead of which. Also, pay straight home instead of pay home straight. It is engaging and well written. Nothing like having your own washing machine. And dryer.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you Annette for your review and kind words.
When I post my original font is the largest at 36 but when I paste, this is the font that comes out.
Mary
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I understand the font can be changed after posting on FanStory through editing.
Comment from Bridge
A lovely story. It really touched my heart. If only all of us could be like Gertie, the world would be such a wonderful place. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.
With regards
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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A lovely story. It really touched my heart. If only all of us could be like Gertie, the world would be such a wonderful place. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.
With regards
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and review. It is greatly appreciated.
My best wishes,
Mary
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love this story! It has a little of everything rolled up in a well written piece. The illustration is whimsical and sets the tone immediately. Your writing grabbed me and held me until the end.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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I love this story! It has a little of everything rolled up in a well written piece. The illustration is whimsical and sets the tone immediately. Your writing grabbed me and held me until the end.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your review and very kind words. It is very much appreciated.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from GeraldShuler
This brings up memories of my own about unlikely friendships. This was written with a true understanding of the deep need to be needed. Your writing is inspirational on every level. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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This brings up memories of my own about unlikely friendships. This was written with a true understanding of the deep need to be needed. Your writing is inspirational on every level. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you Gerald. I appreciate your kind words and review.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from Eugenette Morin
What a totally wonderful memory to have and remember as you grow older. Maybe one day you will become Gertie, maybe not, but it's a nice souvenir to hold
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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What a totally wonderful memory to have and remember as you grow older. Maybe one day you will become Gertie, maybe not, but it's a nice souvenir to hold
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your review and kind words. Yep, I think I am now like a sweatpants version of Gertie!
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
This is an excellent, sensitive, and humorous piece of writing. Thanks for sharing a story of how a young girl and a senior adult can become friends. I love the character of Gertie. You really paint a picture of her with words and the dialogue is very engaging. I would suggest reading it over and maybe use a few contractions or other more casual words so it seems more natural.
I am adding a few line editing suggestions you can use or not. I hope you don't mind.
musky = a very strong and sweet odor that's hard to ignore. Musk is what some animals emit when they are ready for sex. Maybe you mean musty? musty = having a stale, moldy, or damp smell.
although all four never worked (at the same time).
One or two were (would be) broken down, and . . .
Come on out," She called (s in she should be lower case
Great story!
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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This is an excellent, sensitive, and humorous piece of writing. Thanks for sharing a story of how a young girl and a senior adult can become friends. I love the character of Gertie. You really paint a picture of her with words and the dialogue is very engaging. I would suggest reading it over and maybe use a few contractions or other more casual words so it seems more natural.
I am adding a few line editing suggestions you can use or not. I hope you don't mind.
musky = a very strong and sweet odor that's hard to ignore. Musk is what some animals emit when they are ready for sex. Maybe you mean musty? musty = having a stale, moldy, or damp smell.
although all four never worked (at the same time).
One or two were (would be) broken down, and . . .
Come on out," She called (s in she should be lower case
Great story!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a beautiful story, Mary. It sounds like life was pretty lonely and sad for you in the projects. How wonderful that Gertie decided to choose you as a friend. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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This is a beautiful story, Mary. It sounds like life was pretty lonely and sad for you in the projects. How wonderful that Gertie decided to choose you as a friend. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you Judy I appreciate your kind comments and review.
Best wishes
Mary
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You are most welcome, Mary. :)
Comment from LisaMay
Kindness, sincerity, homespun wisdom - Gertie provided a much-needed authentic friendship to your 9-yr-old self (important to Gertie as well) which you write about so appealingly. I can imagine how your heart sank when she was no longer there for you... and she too missed you. Your nostalgic reminiscence integrates dialogue successfully and is very moving. You describe your early life in project housing so I can picture it easily. Tough times.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Kindness, sincerity, homespun wisdom - Gertie provided a much-needed authentic friendship to your 9-yr-old self (important to Gertie as well) which you write about so appealingly. I can imagine how your heart sank when she was no longer there for you... and she too missed you. Your nostalgic reminiscence integrates dialogue successfully and is very moving. You describe your early life in project housing so I can picture it easily. Tough times.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you Lisa. I truly appreciate your kind words and review. Thank you for the six stars. I am truly grateful and appreciative.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from kiwisteveh
You have turned your childhood memories into an emotional and touching tale and a super tribute to your unconventional friend, Gertie. That takes some doing! And hence the six stars.
Oops! Gotta run - I'm supposed to be at work and I just found out!
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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You have turned your childhood memories into an emotional and touching tale and a super tribute to your unconventional friend, Gertie. That takes some doing! And hence the six stars.
Oops! Gotta run - I'm supposed to be at work and I just found out!
Steve
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the review and very kind words. I appreciate your giving it the six stars. I am truly grateful.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from royowen
What a lovely story Mary, you've written about your family before. I've often wondered about the total background of many people on this site, or anywhere for that matter. This was such a heartwarming story of Gertie, who sought you out. What would we do if we didn't have kids to balance out lives. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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What a lovely story Mary, you've written about your family before. I've often wondered about the total background of many people on this site, or anywhere for that matter. This was such a heartwarming story of Gertie, who sought you out. What would we do if we didn't have kids to balance out lives. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you Roy I truly appreciate your kind words and review.
Blessings
Mary
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My pleasure
