Now I See Me
Catching up with my life...49 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
Excellent imagery, visuals and phraseology in this poem.
Loved your choice of artwork to accompany the poem.
These stood out:
Warm visions of a life mostly-lived,
tripping through a storied past;
singing songs from evocative times,
so vivid, they're all coming back.
Best of luck in the contest.
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Excellent imagery, visuals and phraseology in this poem.
Loved your choice of artwork to accompany the poem.
These stood out:
Warm visions of a life mostly-lived,
tripping through a storied past;
singing songs from evocative times,
so vivid, they're all coming back.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Now I See Me
Excellent entry for the Mirror, Mirror contest. We all have our own inner demons to face. And your poem flows well. It draws upon emotions and it presents strong images.
Check this.....
a stranger(')s image peers back;
a stranger's image peers back;
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Now I See Me
Excellent entry for the Mirror, Mirror contest. We all have our own inner demons to face. And your poem flows well. It draws upon emotions and it presents strong images.
Check this.....
a stranger(')s image peers back;
a stranger's image peers back;
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from Sharon Davis
This is a powerful free-form poem that involves a deep dive into self-reflection.
The image used to support the piece highlights the work's content effectively.
Well done. Thank you for sharing.
One typo... strangers- should it be stranger's?
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This is a powerful free-form poem that involves a deep dive into self-reflection.
The image used to support the piece highlights the work's content effectively.
Well done. Thank you for sharing.
One typo... strangers- should it be stranger's?
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
You've analyzed and cleverly captured the thoughts and feelings many of us have as we look back on times when we were someone else. The final verse is motivational to anyone struggling to grasp and hold on to the present. Your artwork and poetry pair perfectly for the Mirror, Mirror contest. Best wishes in the contest.
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You've analyzed and cleverly captured the thoughts and feelings many of us have as we look back on times when we were someone else. The final verse is motivational to anyone struggling to grasp and hold on to the present. Your artwork and poetry pair perfectly for the Mirror, Mirror contest. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from Frank Malley
We react in so many ways when we look into mirrors. There must be many thousands of poems and stories that use our quicksilver image as a starting point or as a thematic touchstone. In this poem which uses line lengths of between 3 and 9 syllables, the narrator encounters in the mirror a younger self, riven by doubt and fear. As the poem progresses, the narrator discards that troubled version of herself and moves with boldness back into the life she has formed in her present.
The poem is elegantly written, but there is a preponderance of words so poetically attractive (and therefore over-used) that they seem a bit supercilious. Such words as are oiled in the stew of cultural popularity need to be used more sparingly, despite their chronic attractiveness both sonically and significantly. Using a metrically free, short-line approach to his or her poetry, this poet has broken the much-used molds of poetry prior to Walt Whitman and the ensuing, new and metrically untethered era of modern poetry; he or she needs to consider whether a word or phrase's attractiveness (and ensuing overuse) sometimes disqualifies a (sadly) meretricious word choice. See 'diaphanous.'
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We react in so many ways when we look into mirrors. There must be many thousands of poems and stories that use our quicksilver image as a starting point or as a thematic touchstone. In this poem which uses line lengths of between 3 and 9 syllables, the narrator encounters in the mirror a younger self, riven by doubt and fear. As the poem progresses, the narrator discards that troubled version of herself and moves with boldness back into the life she has formed in her present.
The poem is elegantly written, but there is a preponderance of words so poetically attractive (and therefore over-used) that they seem a bit supercilious. Such words as are oiled in the stew of cultural popularity need to be used more sparingly, despite their chronic attractiveness both sonically and significantly. Using a metrically free, short-line approach to his or her poetry, this poet has broken the much-used molds of poetry prior to Walt Whitman and the ensuing, new and metrically untethered era of modern poetry; he or she needs to consider whether a word or phrase's attractiveness (and ensuing overuse) sometimes disqualifies a (sadly) meretricious word choice. See 'diaphanous.'
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting poem about self-doubt and finding courage, I think. I am trying to learn more about poetry but don't understand a lot of it. However, this poem has good illustrations that I can see. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is an interesting poem about self-doubt and finding courage, I think. I am trying to learn more about poetry but don't understand a lot of it. However, this poem has good illustrations that I can see. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think we occasional reflect before moving forward with positivity and forgiving the past can help us to offload any anxiety, a poignant write, love Dolly x
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I think we occasional reflect before moving forward with positivity and forgiving the past can help us to offload any anxiety, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Now I See Me ', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Peened with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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' Now I See Me ', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Peened with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Sometimes it is best if we never look back. That happens to many after graduation. You think, there's no sign of returning to past circumstances. Once I graduate, I'm leaving this town and never looking back.
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Sometimes it is best if we never look back. That happens to many after graduation. You think, there's no sign of returning to past circumstances. Once I graduate, I'm leaving this town and never looking back.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
Comment from papa55mike
There are many different personalities living inside all of us, it comes to how many are we willing to share. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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There are many different personalities living inside all of us, it comes to how many are we willing to share. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022