Out Of Time
An indictment on today's world scene.55 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yes, the world is in bad shape. I'm afraid there will be a terrible price to pay for our foolishness.
I published with Publish America once too. It was a bad decision. I think it was a scam.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Yes, the world is in bad shape. I'm afraid there will be a terrible price to pay for our foolishness.
I published with Publish America once too. It was a bad decision. I think it was a scam.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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They may well have been, but they were the first to publish my work which has led to my having to courage to continue publishing my writing. Thank you for your review comments.
Comment from lauralumummu
This is insightful of these times. It has a great rhyme and is well written.
My dad would say the world is going to h*** on roller skates. I do believe in peaceful protest especially for freedom though. Have a terrific week God bless you. Laura
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This is insightful of these times. It has a great rhyme and is well written.
My dad would say the world is going to h*** on roller skates. I do believe in peaceful protest especially for freedom though. Have a terrific week God bless you. Laura
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you Laura, Your dad knew what he was talking about.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is a powerful monologue poem that is passionate and heartfelt. It reminds me of something you'd hear at a poetry slam or open mike night, where people read what they wrote from the heart.What else is powerful is the image, which screams to me...you can have all the clicks in the world, but time will still run out.Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This is a powerful monologue poem that is passionate and heartfelt. It reminds me of something you'd hear at a poetry slam or open mike night, where people read what they wrote from the heart.What else is powerful is the image, which screams to me...you can have all the clicks in the world, but time will still run out.Well done!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you Tina. There have been other reviewers who have expressed opinions similar to yours, maybe I should pursue spoken word.
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You are welcome! I do think you should pursue the spoken word, especially about positive and encouraging subjects. People need a lot of encouragement these days!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very excellent poem that is so full of the truth my friend. You used great descriptive words that ring so true every moment of every day. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This is a very excellent poem that is so full of the truth my friend. You used great descriptive words that ring so true every moment of every day. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you Teri. I appreciate your great comments.
Comment from Wendy G
Powerful message, and your work is compelling. I agree with you totally,(although I don't live in the US). This world is in a mess, based on greed, living for self and self-centredness, lack of respect for law and order, lack of compassion for the vulnerable .... a never-ending list. Can't wait for divine intervention ... all in the plan, and at the right time!
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Powerful message, and your work is compelling. I agree with you totally,(although I don't live in the US). This world is in a mess, based on greed, living for self and self-centredness, lack of respect for law and order, lack of compassion for the vulnerable .... a never-ending list. Can't wait for divine intervention ... all in the plan, and at the right time!
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you Wendy. You are right on in all that you state in your review, the end is very near.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written cautionary poem conveys a powerful message about the chaos, need, decrption, and hatred in the world. Some of the issues you mention have gotten so out of hand--for example, homelessness--that
I wonder how they COULD be fixed, short of the entire world doing a 180
OR Jesus coming back.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Your well-written cautionary poem conveys a powerful message about the chaos, need, decrption, and hatred in the world. Some of the issues you mention have gotten so out of hand--for example, homelessness--that
I wonder how they COULD be fixed, short of the entire world doing a 180
OR Jesus coming back.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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That come back has been prophesied, we just do not know when, but we do know that its effect will be felt worldwide.
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I believe He's coming back soon.
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He will return, but not in a way most of the world expects. It will be felt all at once and the effect will be world wide.
Comment from Rachel L
*standing applause* This is absolutely wonderful. A shame how true the words you have written are, personally I feel we are already out of time, and I feel that's being a realist not pessimistic. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem though, thank you
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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*standing applause* This is absolutely wonderful. A shame how true the words you have written are, personally I feel we are already out of time, and I feel that's being a realist not pessimistic. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem though, thank you
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for some great supportive comments.
Comment from forestport12
I think you struck the right tone with this poem. Some memorable lines without forced rhymes that seemed natural. You brought into focus a broken world, but also gave instruction on what we can do.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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I think you struck the right tone with this poem. Some memorable lines without forced rhymes that seemed natural. You brought into focus a broken world, but also gave instruction on what we can do.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much. I am not only surprised by the positive feedback, I am also gratified by it as well.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Out Of Time ', is an exceptionally well-written and more than a little scary piece. Every line of this talented poet's work is woven with the gilt-less but golden threads of truth. To me this is a seven. Sadly I don't have one.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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' Out Of Time ', is an exceptionally well-written and more than a little scary piece. Every line of this talented poet's work is woven with the gilt-less but golden threads of truth. To me this is a seven. Sadly I don't have one.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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That is OK my love, approval from you is better than receiving a ten.
This really was a seven. Bless you and have a great week.
Comment from Paul McFarland
You have made some great points here. You and I might be on opposite ends of the political spectrum, but there are some things that we agree on.
Good rhyme, but a little free with the meter.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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You have made some great points here. You and I might be on opposite ends of the political spectrum, but there are some things that we agree on.
Good rhyme, but a little free with the meter.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you, I ignored meter in favor of trying to deliver the full brunt of the message.