Comment from mermaids

Excellent

I am a nurse in a nursing home and am familiar with hospice and the decisions that family members have to make. Your story describes well the difficult time it can be when an individual with dementia falls. Excellent true to life tale.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021

Hi, mermaids,

Thank you. I don?t know how the staff in nursing facilities manage.

Kindest regards,

J.P.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This seems like a sad story. The thing is it is written strangely. The flow is off.
Dad had fallen in the "Memory Unit," breaking like antique glass.

- Here the reader has to wonder, what is he talking about. What's a memory unit?

Alive, he'd be totally disoriented, bedridden,
- The second paragraph been awkwardly. Read this out loud and see how it sounds.

I can't be sure, but I would advise checking through it before the voting begins.

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 Comment Written 13-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021

Hi, lancellot,

Thanks for your review and the suggestions. Your time is very much appreciated.

Best wishes,

J.P.

Comment from Bill Schott

Exceptional

This one-hundred-word story, Oblivion, has the required word count and creates the powerful scene of having to make the legal decisions to end a parent's life. Such actions come with long, dark residual effects.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021

Thank you for that wonderful review, Bill.