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Comment from kahpot
How beautiful, very well written, the rhyme and flow make this a joy to read, and the words within are so very heart warming, some times a person just knows they have more to do, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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How beautiful, very well written, the rhyme and flow make this a joy to read, and the words within are so very heart warming, some times a person just knows they have more to do, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments and especially thank you for the six stars. I'm so glad you like my poem.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
I loved this and I bet she was a wonderful person in her life. I also loved the artwork you chose. Well done and glad to read about your Grandma. Just one suggestion...which had st(r?)uck
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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I loved this and I bet she was a wonderful person in her life. I also loved the artwork you chose. Well done and glad to read about your Grandma. Just one suggestion...which had st(r?)uck
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much. I'm so glad you liked it. I appreciate you seeing the misspelled word.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Those diseases that hardly get a mention these days, were killers back then. How times have changed and we now battle new diseases. A well written and rhymed poem of triumph over tragedy, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Those diseases that hardly get a mention these days, were killers back then. How times have changed and we now battle new diseases. A well written and rhymed poem of triumph over tragedy, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much Dolly, I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Jean Lutz1
Sadly it was my grandmother's time. She possessed no material goods, lived in West Tennessee hills in post-depression years.Two-room house without electricity or plumbing -- just my grouchy grandpa. Yet she had faith and Vicks salve. Although she was Protestant, folks called her Saint Margaret. Low and behold what should arrive on April Fools Day but little old me, during a whooping cough epidemic. Sure 'nuff @ 6 days later, I caught it. The doctor that delivered me at home was a carrier. She treated me with what she had. She lost her life 3 months later. I believe it was heart issues that claimed her. Your tribute is beautiful and I am happy to place a star wreath upon it.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Sadly it was my grandmother's time. She possessed no material goods, lived in West Tennessee hills in post-depression years.Two-room house without electricity or plumbing -- just my grouchy grandpa. Yet she had faith and Vicks salve. Although she was Protestant, folks called her Saint Margaret. Low and behold what should arrive on April Fools Day but little old me, during a whooping cough epidemic. Sure 'nuff @ 6 days later, I caught it. The doctor that delivered me at home was a carrier. She treated me with what she had. She lost her life 3 months later. I believe it was heart issues that claimed her. Your tribute is beautiful and I am happy to place a star wreath upon it.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much Jean, I remember you from when I was on here back ten years ago. I think you're on my facebook. Anyway, both my grandmothers believed in Vicks salve. I got whooping cough at two from sucking on a token another little boy took our of his mouth and gave me. I truly appreciate the six stars. Nice to hear from you again. Have you posted anything lately?
Beth
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I just returned. I think I've posted 4. Got lost of reviewing to do. Yes, I'm on FB.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your Grandmother is honored that you wrote this great tribute to her, Beth. I enjoyed reading it. You did a great job telling of your life, her faith, and how she saw what she did when she was ill. I believe everything about it. Your words flow smoothly as do the lines. Best wishes.
May I suggest ~
T'was( 'Twas ) Typhoid(typhoid) fever which had stuck
"But listen! Surly ( Surely) you all know
"But No! the ( They) say it's not my time.
[in notes-->thyroid should be typhoid
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Your Grandmother is honored that you wrote this great tribute to her, Beth. I enjoyed reading it. You did a great job telling of your life, her faith, and how she saw what she did when she was ill. I believe everything about it. Your words flow smoothly as do the lines. Best wishes.
May I suggest ~
T'was( 'Twas ) Typhoid(typhoid) fever which had stuck
"But listen! Surly ( Surely) you all know
"But No! the ( They) say it's not my time.
[in notes-->thyroid should be typhoid
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you Jan, I really appreciate your review and comments. I so glad you saw those things that need correcting.
Beth
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Bethshelby:
The story about your grandmother reminds me a bit of my paternal grandmother. We used to get calls to the hospital because she was supposed to be at death's door. Often, she would be sitting up telling jokes by the time we could get there, often less than 20 minutes later. Once she told me she would let me know when she was going to die. Thanks for sharing such a nice tribute to your grandmother.
Rdfrdmom2
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Bethshelby:
The story about your grandmother reminds me a bit of my paternal grandmother. We used to get calls to the hospital because she was supposed to be at death's door. Often, she would be sitting up telling jokes by the time we could get there, often less than 20 minutes later. Once she told me she would let me know when she was going to die. Thanks for sharing such a nice tribute to your grandmother.
Rdfrdmom2
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comment. I'm glad you shared that story about your grandmothers.
Beth
Comment from royowen
Isn't that wonderful that your grandmother heard those angels singing, and that she was alive to share that testimony with you. It probably accounts for your great faith not, you are an inspiration to me and a great many others Beth. This beautifully written in rhyming ballad style octains and abcbdefe rhyme, well dine blessings Roy
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Isn't that wonderful that your grandmother heard those angels singing, and that she was alive to share that testimony with you. It probably accounts for your great faith not, you are an inspiration to me and a great many others Beth. This beautifully written in rhyming ballad style octains and abcbdefe rhyme, well dine blessings Roy
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you Roy, I really appreciate the reaffirming words in your review. I'm humbled that you say I'm an inspiration, because you are an inspiration to me and most everyone else on this site.
Beth
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Well done