The Inn at Blackpool
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Cricket the Critic"These are free-verse poems.
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Comment from royowen
I like this one, particularly because apart from a slight waver in concluding stanzas in varied meter, it's perfectly timed, the ballad form is perfect for your theme, which bops along, really about a troubled time of great loss, my dad was at Dunkirk in the beginning, brother David in Vietnam. Wounded. Beautifully written, blessings
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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I like this one, particularly because apart from a slight waver in concluding stanzas in varied meter, it's perfectly timed, the ballad form is perfect for your theme, which bops along, really about a troubled time of great loss, my dad was at Dunkirk in the beginning, brother David in Vietnam. Wounded. Beautifully written, blessings
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thanks so much....I do need some work on "stanzas and varied meter"......these are fun to bash together....I was blessed in Vietnam....surrounded by so many brave men....Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
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Well done
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, sometimes our biggest critics can bring out our greatest efforts, the forces would have been just the thing to change these blowhards, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Excellent, sometimes our biggest critics can bring out our greatest efforts, the forces would have been just the thing to change these blowhards, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thanks so very much..some of our bitter draftees were introduced to the DIs and later became good small unit leaders...Godspeed and Best Wishes.....Stu Harrell
Comment from irishauthorme
Good work, Stu! D--Day, 1944 was on my 8th birthday. My dad had been gone 2 & 1/2 years as a Chief Petty Officer in the SeaBees, and was gone a total of four years. In the Navy I saw a lot of smart--aleck kids get straightened out in boot camp, under the USMC drill sergeants, just a few hard--asses didn't make it. Still reading about WWII, still regret I wasn't old enough to go. In Vietnam twice, what a hell hole.
Appreciate your work to keep the WWII spirit alive.
irish
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reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Good work, Stu! D--Day, 1944 was on my 8th birthday. My dad had been gone 2 & 1/2 years as a Chief Petty Officer in the SeaBees, and was gone a total of four years. In the Navy I saw a lot of smart--aleck kids get straightened out in boot camp, under the USMC drill sergeants, just a few hard--asses didn't make it. Still reading about WWII, still regret I wasn't old enough to go. In Vietnam twice, what a hell hole.
Appreciate your work to keep the WWII spirit alive.
irish
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Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thanks so very much....these little verses are always fun.....Thanks for your Vietnam service....I was there as a grunt LT......a very bitter time...but I was surrounded by a bunch of brave men....Godspeed Brother..Air/Cav Airborne...Stu Harrell