Betrayal
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Comment from F. William Lester
Ah, the plot thickens. I wish I could fly off to the Bahamas. But, alas, only in my dreams. Good story. You're keeping the tension strong and the pace quick. I found a missing comma (had to find something-this is supposed to be a critique :) ). And--now I can't find it. However, I did find a couple of places that are a gray area: "...he asked, with a warm smile, which helped to lighten the tension already settling over them." In my opinion, I would delete the first comma, and in "Before Grant could say anything more, Monica came back waving the passport." I would add a comma after "back". Strictly my opinion. It's a gray area that tends to confuse me and is up to the author's judgment. It's so difficult to find anything wrong. You write so well. Thanks for sharing your work. Stay well.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Ah, the plot thickens. I wish I could fly off to the Bahamas. But, alas, only in my dreams. Good story. You're keeping the tension strong and the pace quick. I found a missing comma (had to find something-this is supposed to be a critique :) ). And--now I can't find it. However, I did find a couple of places that are a gray area: "...he asked, with a warm smile, which helped to lighten the tension already settling over them." In my opinion, I would delete the first comma, and in "Before Grant could say anything more, Monica came back waving the passport." I would add a comma after "back". Strictly my opinion. It's a gray area that tends to confuse me and is up to the author's judgment. It's so difficult to find anything wrong. You write so well. Thanks for sharing your work. Stay well.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for this really lovely review, with the nice compliment about my writing. Big blushes, there!! Lol. Also, thank you so much for pointing out those commas, yes you were absolutely right and I do appreciate you telling me. Have a lovely week, Frank, warm hugs. Sandra xx
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Thanks, Sandra. Hope you have nothing but sunshine this week.
Comment from aryr
A great continuation chapter, Sandra. It was fantastic that Grant had all those forms for Roland his solicitor. It was equally great of Jeff to agree to stay with Monica while Tania and Grant were secretly away. It was indeed laughable as to where Tania kept her important papers. I am so glad that Grant and Tania have this time alone. Suggestion: since Roland, Grant's solicitor-you might want to add him to the character list as well as that of his mother, they both seem to have significant parts in this story. Blessings, hugs, smiles.
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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A great continuation chapter, Sandra. It was fantastic that Grant had all those forms for Roland his solicitor. It was equally great of Jeff to agree to stay with Monica while Tania and Grant were secretly away. It was indeed laughable as to where Tania kept her important papers. I am so glad that Grant and Tania have this time alone. Suggestion: since Roland, Grant's solicitor-you might want to add him to the character list as well as that of his mother, they both seem to have significant parts in this story. Blessings, hugs, smiles.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Alie, for another lovely review. I've added both Marilyn and Roland to the Character list. Thank you for reminding me. I'll be adding another couple next week. The forms were given to him after his grandfather died, but I doubt his mother knows that, but she will! Thanks again, my friend, have a wonderful week. :)) Sandra xx
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You are most welcome Sandra, yaee I am glad I suggested it. Blessings, hugs, smiles.
Comment from Sally Law
I loved the Bahamas. I suppose it's not as glamorous as Europe. A wonderful chapter and very well penned as always. Leaves me wanting more. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I loved the Bahamas. I suppose it's not as glamorous as Europe. A wonderful chapter and very well penned as always. Leaves me wanting more. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I've been three times, and we hope to go back in the spring of 2022. We've booked another cruise and just hope this corona virus has been wiped out by then. I think it depends on where you live. I've been all around Europe, and lived in Spain, and Switzerland. So the Bahamas is our bit of luxury.
Okay, that's got that out the way!! LOL Thank you, Sal, for this lovely review and all the stars. I really appreciate you. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You are most welcome! Blessings always,
Sal XOs...
Comment from BethShelby
Everything seems to be going smoothly in this chapter. The romantic interests will get to be together for both Tania and Monica. I'm sure Colin will be doing everything they know to do to keep anyone from testifying against him however. I eagerly awaiting your next chapter.
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Everything seems to be going smoothly in this chapter. The romantic interests will get to be together for both Tania and Monica. I'm sure Colin will be doing everything they know to do to keep anyone from testifying against him however. I eagerly awaiting your next chapter.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Beth. Yes, I'm not sure who is the worst out of Colin and his mother, or perhaps they are the same. Evil! Lol. We're sure to find out soon. Have a lovely week, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Mistydawn
I'm so glad that they're keeping the girls safe. Tayna, the lucky being shuffled away to the Bahamas. I'm sure that's one hardship we'd all like to endure. I just hope Collins and his mom don't figure out where they're at and that Monica is truly safe. Your story is well-written, very interesting from start to finish. Like always, I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I'm so glad that they're keeping the girls safe. Tayna, the lucky being shuffled away to the Bahamas. I'm sure that's one hardship we'd all like to endure. I just hope Collins and his mom don't figure out where they're at and that Monica is truly safe. Your story is well-written, very interesting from start to finish. Like always, I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for this really lovely review, Misty. Both Jeff and Grant will be guarding them, so they should be safe enough now. Their worry is not knowing what Colin and his mother are up to. A big hug for that shiny sixth star, my friend! Have a lovely week, warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Begin Again
Hmmm...doom and gloom at everyone's door, but the "couples" remain together. It's always nice to add some spice into whatever is cooking. LOL, I so enjoy reading your story...as you saw in the last few days... Hurry! And write me some more... well, I shall not be greedy ....so write all your readers some more. Smiles and hugs! Carol
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Hmmm...doom and gloom at everyone's door, but the "couples" remain together. It's always nice to add some spice into whatever is cooking. LOL, I so enjoy reading your story...as you saw in the last few days... Hurry! And write me some more... well, I shall not be greedy ....so write all your readers some more. Smiles and hugs! Carol
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Bless you, Carol. I'm thrilled you are enjoying my story as much as I'm enjoying yours. I wish I could get them out as fast as you. I'll be working hard on it tomorrow. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh My! the Bahamas and the romance will grow as will Jeff's and Monica's. I love it!!!
'What's up?' Jeff answered the call immediately. ('the call' are extra words)
Perhaps you'll allow me to taste one, too?' (you can omit 'too')
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Oh My! the Bahamas and the romance will grow as will Jeff's and Monica's. I love it!!!
'What's up?' Jeff answered the call immediately. ('the call' are extra words)
Perhaps you'll allow me to taste one, too?' (you can omit 'too')
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you so very much, Barbara, for this lovely review and the shiny sixth star! I'll sort those extra words out too. Yes, romance is in the air for both of them. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh how splendid it would be to be able to temper life-threatening danger with private jets and an island in the Bahamas. Somehow it seems to make it all the more survivable.
With an undisclosed threat of danger hanging of the women the pace of this one quickened somewhat, taking on a new sense of urgency.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Oh how splendid it would be to be able to temper life-threatening danger with private jets and an island in the Bahamas. Somehow it seems to make it all the more survivable.
With an undisclosed threat of danger hanging of the women the pace of this one quickened somewhat, taking on a new sense of urgency.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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LOL, just living my dream, Jim! I waited years for a billionaire to whisk me off in his private jet to somewhere exciting. I think he got lost! Lol Thank you so much for the six stars, Jim. :)) Sandra xx
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