Betrayal
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Comment from country ranch writer
Will follow along hopping he doesn't hurt her anymore like he already had the lout hoping they all can get tosave her before he goes into a rage and kills her.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Will follow along hopping he doesn't hurt her anymore like he already had the lout hoping they all can get tosave her before he goes into a rage and kills her.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for coming and reading this part, Country ranch writer, I really appreciate that. I look forward to reading more of your reviews. Warm hugs, and a happy 2021! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
You've built a very good plot here Sandra, and a villainous antagonist that is truly desperate and painted himself into a corner, the only trouble is he may realise his half brother has figured he was not clever enough to plan those drawings. An excellent episode, but don't make it too violent Sandra, heh heh. A weak constitution. Well done, great write, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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You've built a very good plot here Sandra, and a villainous antagonist that is truly desperate and painted himself into a corner, the only trouble is he may realise his half brother has figured he was not clever enough to plan those drawings. An excellent episode, but don't make it too violent Sandra, heh heh. A weak constitution. Well done, great write, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for another lovely review, dear Roy, and giving me your thoughts on Colin. He's not a nice person, is he? :)
I hope you had a lovely Christmas. We went to my son and his wife. Eric's mum and dad. It was lovely. I took your CDs with me to play durig the day, and Chris is going to make copies of them for both his family and my other son's. I hope that was alright with you? They are such lovely songs and meant to be shared. I wish you and yours, a very happy, healthy 2021. War hugs, Sandra xxx
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We?ve passed the baton to our youngest daughter, my wife still Cooks the Turkey, copy away as many as you like, a lovely day, we get on well with our kids and their kids, and hubbies.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, she is in deep trouble isn't she? but finally Grant realises what Colin might be capable of and he's turned to his SAS men for enforcement. But will they be in time? Great continuation and I'm looking forward to what's next. A big hug. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Hi Sandra, she is in deep trouble isn't she? but finally Grant realises what Colin might be capable of and he's turned to his SAS men for enforcement. But will they be in time? Great continuation and I'm looking forward to what's next. A big hug. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so very much for the lovely six stars, Ulla, and wonderful review. Yes, things aren't going well for Tania. She has to stay strong if she wants to survive this. Warm hugs, dear friend. Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is an excellent chapter,
full of drama, Sandra.
-Colin has shown what lengths
he will go to to get what he wants.
-Grant was right in saying all he
cares about is himself.
-I give credit to Tania for staying
strong, but I don't know how long
she can keep doing that.
-I think Colin has gone beyond the
point of a few threats, and who knows
what or when something will make him
totally snap.
-The transition to Grant's office
is very good, and I was glad to see
Lorna give Grant the extra push he
needed to do something about Colin.
-Bringing in the plans was a great way to start.
-She didn't back down, either, and Grant
took action.
-I was surprised by the people he had
available to work for him.
-It is going to really heat up now!!!
-Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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-This is an excellent chapter,
full of drama, Sandra.
-Colin has shown what lengths
he will go to to get what he wants.
-Grant was right in saying all he
cares about is himself.
-I give credit to Tania for staying
strong, but I don't know how long
she can keep doing that.
-I think Colin has gone beyond the
point of a few threats, and who knows
what or when something will make him
totally snap.
-The transition to Grant's office
is very good, and I was glad to see
Lorna give Grant the extra push he
needed to do something about Colin.
-Bringing in the plans was a great way to start.
-She didn't back down, either, and Grant
took action.
-I was surprised by the people he had
available to work for him.
-It is going to really heat up now!!!
-Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so very much, Pam, I really appreciate these comments, I wasn't sure whether I'd gone too far with Colin's behaviour. It seems to be alright with most of the other readers. I've not had much in the way of edits, but I'm sure there is one nice lady on here who will find some!!! Lol. Sending you a big hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You are very welcome and deserving, Sandra. I don't think you did carry it too far, and I'm glad the response has been good. I wonder who the nice lady is?!
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LOL!! I wonder!! xx
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👩👩🦰🤶💃��♀️ Is it one of these, ha, ha!!
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LOL! I'm beginning to believe you are as nutty as me!!! LOL!
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Oh, no!!!!!!!
Comment from Ben Colder
Now I wait the moment. You are as bad as me about cliff hangers. LOL. Something you should know. In my messages when you have your work to be published, it would not let me read it saying you had withdrawn the work. Of course that was a Fan Story lie so I came here at your profile and found it.
Well done Sandy.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Now I wait the moment. You are as bad as me about cliff hangers. LOL. Something you should know. In my messages when you have your work to be published, it would not let me read it saying you had withdrawn the work. Of course that was a Fan Story lie so I came here at your profile and found it.
Well done Sandy.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so very much for the lovely six stars, my dear Chuck, and the lovely review. You've always been such a good friend to me, and I do appreciate you a lot. I'm glad you found this part. That has to be JBs tracking!!! Have a lovely 2021, my friend. Lots of love, Sandy. xxx
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Some of the wording in my message I did not say. See what I mean.
Comment from damommy
Thank goodness, Grant believes Lorna. I have great hope they'll find Tania before Colin can hurt her too much more.
-they never were your brother[']s
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank goodness, Grant believes Lorna. I have great hope they'll find Tania before Colin can hurt her too much more.
-they never were your brother[']s
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Hi dear sister of mine, thank you so much for picking up that nit! I've made the correction. :)) Tania is in loads of trouble, and she knows it. I'm glad you enjoyed this part, Yvonne. Now Grant in on the case, let's see what happens next. Warm hugs, dear friend. Stay safe and well. Lots of love, Sandra. xxxx
Comment from Pantygynt
My oh my! This is beginning to get really heavy. Murder threatens and the ex SAS men are here to prevent it. this is turning into quite a thriller.
I think we have a name mix up here. I thought I was the only one who did that:
'Monica tore her eyes away from his...' - I think you mean Tania, not Monica!
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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My oh my! This is beginning to get really heavy. Murder threatens and the ex SAS men are here to prevent it. this is turning into quite a thriller.
I think we have a name mix up here. I thought I was the only one who did that:
'Monica tore her eyes away from his...' - I think you mean Tania, not Monica!
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the sixer, Jim! Yes, it's getting a bit rough for Tania. I've changed Monica into Tania!! Lol. How you managed to remember all the characters names in your last book, I don't know! I have trouble with just the few. Thanks again, Jim. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
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Most ofg mine were called Tom. Made it a bit easier. Lol.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Thank goodness Grant has moved forward to get help finding Colin and Tania. She is indeed in danger. I just hope she can stand up under his cruelty and threats. With all the
Security Camera's around these days perhaps they will find one that observed Colin and Tania leaving the restaurant and see she was unconscious when he put her in his car. Well done, Sandra. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank goodness Grant has moved forward to get help finding Colin and Tania. She is indeed in danger. I just hope she can stand up under his cruelty and threats. With all the
Security Camera's around these days perhaps they will find one that observed Colin and Tania leaving the restaurant and see she was unconscious when he put her in his car. Well done, Sandra. Nancy:)
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you, Nancy, for this lovely review. They are really up on this sort of thing, you will meet Grant's mates in the next part. Warm hugs, my dear friend, and have a wonderful 20211 :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Just a small comment, probably you wanted to say Tania instead of Monica in this line: "Monica tore her eyes away from his, and released her breath knowing she needed to be calm. Calm! " Otherwise I am happy that somebody decided to get some rescue team on the game. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Just a small comment, probably you wanted to say Tania instead of Monica in this line: "Monica tore her eyes away from his, and released her breath knowing she needed to be calm. Calm! " Otherwise I am happy that somebody decided to get some rescue team on the game. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
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Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you for spotting that, Iza. I'm glad you were one of the first to review it. Lol. Yes, Grant has called in the troups, and the search will begin. Thank you for the lovely, helpful review, my friend. Have a wonderful New Year. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Chapter of the Fiction speaks generally but expressively in the free flow of thoughts about more problems about the issue through a fairly narrated taletelling with good plot development, realistic characterization and contributory as well realistic dialogues, ends with a good promising ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This Chapter of the Fiction speaks generally but expressively in the free flow of thoughts about more problems about the issue through a fairly narrated taletelling with good plot development, realistic characterization and contributory as well realistic dialogues, ends with a good promising ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much, Alcreator, I always appreciate your kind reviews. I'm so pleased you are continuing to enjoy reading it. Have a wonderful New Year. :)) Sandra xx