Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

(pretense=>pretend) Powerful presentation--startling imagery--clever rhyme: advisors/wiser--answers/cancers. Gingerly, albeit a good rhyme, doesn't really work in context. Cancers/wounds--mixed metaphor.

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 Comment Written 18-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020

Thank you, Elizabeth, for your forthcoming review. Your kind comments are much appreciated. Have a happy 2021.
Jesse

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image and
presentation, Jesse.
-Good to see you.
-A well written poem
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like how you begin with
all of the "voices" we hear,
all telling us what is
the best thing for us to do.
-You definitely have the
right idea in your concluding verse.
-Have a great holiday season and
a very good New Year, too!

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 Comment Written 18-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020

Thank you, Pam, for your in-depth and kind review. Sorry for the delay in reply. I appreciate your commentary, and I wish you a happy 2021!
Jesse

reply by Pam (respa) on 26-Dec-2020

You are very welcome, Jesse, and there is no problem with the delay. Hope to see more of you in 2021. Make it a good year. You deserve it!!

reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020

Thanks, Pam, for the encouraging support. I'm doing the best I can to make it my best year yet!
Happy 2021!
Jesse

reply by Pam (respa) on 27-Dec-2020

You are very welcome, Jesse, and I think we all want to meet that goal for 2021!!

reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020

Yes. We all share that in common.
Happy (almost) New Year!!

Jesse

reply by Pam (respa) on 27-Dec-2020

Thanks!